abu_saeed

abu_saeed

male LV 4
2020-11-27 Beigetreten Global
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abu_saeed
abu_saeed
6 months ago
Posted

It was great............................

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abu_saeed
abu_saeed
6 months ago
Posted

It's really good..........................................................................................................................................................

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
6 months ago
Posted

It's really good................................................................................................................................................

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
8 months ago
Commented

This guy was living protagonist life even before getting a system.

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abu_saeed
abu_saeed
10 months ago
Posted

The story is very disappointing. Or maybe, I just expected too much. You constantly try to make your mc appear better than the original Cid, but your mc is just boring. While original Cid is the best part of Eminence in Shadow. And you either don't know much about solo leveling power systems. Or you can't use them in this story. It's all over the place. And the story is just plain Bad.

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
10 months ago
Commented

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abu_saeed
abu_saeed
10 months ago
Commented

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Anime & Comics · Fallen_Crown

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
11 months ago
Replied to Laron_Shawn

What are you talking about? Hiashi's twin brother was marked, why do you think Hinata's younger sister won't be?

'Now that Hinata's marked by Orochimaru's seal that affects her chakra network, the caged bird seal which also affects the user's chakra network can't be placed on her. So he promoted Hanabi to become the heir that way when Hinata becomes strong, judging by the way she is going, it would be the case. He wouldn't have to worry about Hanabi being marked as she is younger...'

The System: The Real Civilian Shinobi

The System: The Real Civilian Shinobi

Anime & Comics · Version_401

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
11 months ago
Posted

So the story is good. But you are progressing way too slowly. The problem with fanfics is that everyone is already familiar with the source material. So, there is a limit to how much I can enjoy or invest in the story knowing it's filler. I don't know how much of the story you have planned. I suggest you make your OCs interact with canon characters and canon events more. Having an OC story with non-canon events isn't good for a fanfic. Your writing quality is very good, so I read one of your original works. It is considerably better than this, in my opinion, because even if something that happened there were to be insignificant later it doesn't hinder my investment now. It's not the same with fanfics

abu_saeed
abu_saeed
11 months ago
Replied to ultimategod

Who are you confirming these things with? It is confirmed that she is female, Oda himself confirmed it in a SBS. And Yamato doesn't even want to be a male. She just wants to be Oden.