honestly man, i really like your novel and the idea behind it. it's just that, your story is all over the place. there is a war going on and the demon king is on her castle, having 'diplomatic meeting', going out and having fun with her daughters, etc. and Leon who is supposed to be on the dessert 50 chapters ago is now on the dragon empire. The use of the potion on Leon is stupid for a dragon queen who is supposed to be living for hundreds of years... no offense but, i hope you can make it better and salvage this story! i really really would like to read it's polished version.
update?
i really like your first book, so, I'm going to join your journey on this one too!!!
Thank you so much for writing this! this is one of the best books I've read so far. you didn't unnecessarily prolong it! although i also want a part 2 of this book lol! Elias vs nyarl, more about the mystery of the world and outergods, the reason the other world is colliding with this one, and the reason Elias is in his current world! This is one of my favorites really!
a deserving rest for all of them!
can't wait to know on what will happen to Eltuga after this! will she exist as Azalea's second personality? will she be expelled from her body and possess another body or puppet made by miss witch? or will she cease to exist completely?
everything is slowly unveiling!
4 chapters??? nice!!! i need 1 more fp lol!
2 chapters? nice!!!
no problem man! i know that you are not a full time writer, but, i just like this novel and has a potential to improve!
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