It would make the transition smoother if you started the chapter with a preface. Something like “Elsewhere in a small Eastman village” just to give the reader a heads up on the POV change and reduce any chance of confusion that would bring them out of immersion.
As of writing this review I’m at chapter 137 out of the 170 currently posted. As the author has mentioned in their own review, they are obviously new to writing. At first the writing is a bit choppy and personally I would enjoy some more POV hopping to show the thoughts of characters other than the MC. There is obvious improvement in the writing as the The story goes on and nothing has been so bad that I have wanted to drop the novel. So far the MC is just getting started and in in a phase of exploring and experiencing the world. I hope that later this shifts from him learning and gaining experience to making moves of his own to change the world.
Do you have a timeframe for the audio book. I always like to buy both and listen as I read since the people at Sounbooth Theatre do such a great job.
Hey author. I know there is a harem tag on this novel, but from how things are going so far I really don’t think it makes sense for Karl to have multiple love interests. Right now his connection with Dana is far and above anything he has with the others. And with what has been shown of his personality he doesn’t seem to be the type that would go after multiple women. This chapter seems to be the beginning of him forming a harem but so far the only one he’s shown interest in and has shown I treat back is Dana. Suddenly having others push their way in would be weird. I think having some of the others take an Interest in him would be fine, but as a character I believe he would choose to maintain one solid romantic relationship.
The pacing really depends on where you plan to go. The thing I don’t want is for you to make the pacing too fast and lose too much detail.
Chapters 1306 and 1307 are still missing.
Me agree.
Chapters 1306 and 1307 are missing.
Between recommending Atticus’s Odyssey and writing The Inkeeper and this novel you are now responsible for a full third of the novels I am currently reading. I don’t know if I should thank you or curse you.
I made a comment on the prey chapter and you could do something similar in this one starting it by saying “The next day” this gives readers who are going chapter by chapter slowly as they are released a bit of an easy transition into the chapter. As well as giving readers who binge read chapter a reference point to associate where / when in the story you are coming from. It’s not as necessary during fight scenes, but world building chapters would benefit greatly from this.
The Runic Alchemist
Fantasy · GlaringError