This story is good. I read twice and already keep into my library. I hope that you continue to use simple grammar, because some of them didn't understand if you read first. But that's okay since you'll always improve no matter you got struggling in your writing. I hope you didn't give up early and focus on your own writing.
Up until now, I totally enjoy this series. Especially MC from weak to strong theme. The writing quality is simple yet so easy to understand. And worldbuilding take it slow. So the reader understand a bit about the story. Too bad i want to see a character who feels sympathy to MC. Good job :D
Nah. just been a while since i was silent reader and didn't give so much about review. and this is the first time i give review to someone in global (usually, i read a lot in indonesian language. and always give some feedback)
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The quality of writing is good. Easy to read and make story interesting. At first, i thought gonna be overpowered. turns out i was wrong since mc needs effort from weak into strong. Also, pacing is good and worldbuilding needs to improve. But as reader, i like it. Keep it work
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I see. I'll considering your feedback next time. thanks for your feedback
thanks for feedback.
thanks for giving review honestly. actually, I made stories to focus on 4 main characters, and each character trying to build up into good development, to make character feels insecure when they got similar situation in real life. and yes, I made complex stories to make interesting and feel sympathy for character (though I admit, some of them kinda messy) anyway, thank you again[img=recommend]
until now, there is no harem. just weak to strong recently.
speechless menurutku. baru kali ini, aku membaca cerita webnovel dengan kalimat dan kata yang kompleks tapi seru untuk dibaca. belum lagi teknik sihir atau baca mantra ala akademi, dipadukan dengan petualangan dan cerita berat, membuat kisah ini berasa real. dimulai dari worldbuildingnya begitu rapi hingga diksi simpel.
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original The Unknown Origin Story T
Issac Garretwards, a student who often gets bad treatment meets Reynold Ellis in entering a dungeon called Unknown Origin. That said, the place is filled with mysteries that have yet to be answered. One by one, the victims fell due to the many portals connecting to the place. Issac and Reynold with Ninja who are victims of the atrocities of Demons, Kiyoyasu Ogasawara explores the deepest dungeons to stop the casualties.43 Chs 13 Sammlungen
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Another World Chronicles
4.94 Abgeschlossen
Hiro Sakaki, a high school student, died and was reborn. Allen McCarthy went through a similar experience. Yumi Hitomachi and Rina Shirasaki, meanwhile, were subjected to Summoned Magic by the Gods. The four of them have come together to experience the life of the next world and to investigate the otherworld. Will the four of them be able to lift the veil of mystery? Furthermore, the enemy he faced was not just the people around him. Even more powerful than ordinary humans.256 Chs 1.5k Sammlungen
- original
Unknown Origin Dungeon
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Issac Garretwards, seorang siswa yang sering mendapatkan perlakuan buruk bertemu dengan Reynold Ellis dalam memasuki sebuah dungeon yang bernama Unknown Origin. Konon, tempat itu dipenuhi misteri yang sampai saat ini belum terjawab. Satu persatu, korban berjatuhan akibat banyaknya portal penghubung ke tempat tersebut. Issac dan Reynold bersama Ninja yang merupakan korban dari para kekejaman Demon, Kiyoyasu Ogasawara menelusuri dungeon terdalam hingga menghentikan jatuh korban jiwa.59 Chs 38 Sammlungen
- original
Another World Chronicles Universe
4.92 Abgeschlossen
Menceritakan sebuah kisah dari berbagai aspek dalam sebuah Universe. Dimulai dari reinkarnasi, sihir pemanggilan hingga petualangan yang dinantikan.628 Chs 440 Sammlungen
- original
Sagitarius Girl
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Seorang bayi perempuan yang dititipkan ke bumi dan diasuh oleh orang tua angkat. dia diberi nama Aisyah. Dia telah dianugerahi berbagai macam sihir. elemen api, angin, udara dan tanah. Ketika beranjak dewasa, Aisyah ingin menjalani sekolah dengan normal sampai tua. Akan tetapi, dia menerima sebuah surat dari Argo untuk melindungi bumi yang dia tinggali. Mampukah dia mengatasinya? Mengingat surat ini tidak boleh dibaca oleh siapapun kecuali dirinya.39 Chs 47 Sammlungen
Thanks for critique. Actually i want to use consistent such as hiro and allen as he. while Yumi and Rina as She. Anyway thanks again for correction
Another World Chronicles
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