I won't. Just clarify the context behind his power.
As if ordained by fate, Yan Jin's Nine-Neonate Hydra acquired the bloodline lineage of nine primordial archaic beasts preserved within the purple jade necklace. These beasts, whose bloodlines had been captured and sealed by the necklace, represented some of the most formidable and ancient entities in existence. When the necklace was melted into his eyes, the latent power of these primordial beasts was unleashed, initiating a transformation within Yan Jin.
Fantasy · Judejayden
I don't think that is the direction, I am going for. It's not a romance based novel. More of a power trip.
After the shower, Lan Zhan meticulously groomed him. Every detail of Yan Jin's appearance was attended to with care and precision. Lan Zhan's hands moved deftly, brushing and tidying, restoring Yan Jin to his usual state of refinement. The process was both soothing and restorative, a ritual that helped to smooth away the marks of his recent ordeal and return him to his accustomed elegance.
Fantasy · Judejayden
two things to things to keep in mind. 1- there is a pair of eye in his see of consciousness." blue eye" 2- they materialise giving him illusory colorfully eyes. I need to be more clear with my description. I apologize.
You cannot argue with, fantasy physics, Lol...
First, he needed to consider the arrows as bullets. Since they could not gather sufficient momentum to pierce, enhancing them with blood energy could make them hit like blank bullets.
Fantasy · Judejayden
Don't worry all critiques are welcome. As long as you are not rude everything is okay.
"It's him!" Nie Li spat, his voice filled with venom. As if responding to his anger, the lion he stood upon roared furiously, its golden mane flaring as its eyes locked onto Yan Jin with barely-contained rage.
Fantasy · Judejayden
It has to do with his bloodline, he his a golden lion , pride is too much.
"It's him!" Nie Li spat, his voice filled with venom. As if responding to his anger, the lion he stood upon roared furiously, its golden mane flaring as its eyes locked onto Yan Jin with barely-contained rage.
Fantasy · Judejayden
Actually nice catch
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Fantasy · Judejayden
Thanks for the recommendation.
Yet as Yan Jin began to work, the old master couldn't help but marvel at the boy's talent. Despite his lack of formal training, Yan Jin had a natural gift when it came to crafting weapons, especially arrows. His arrows were works of art—each one meticulously crafted, balanced perfectly for flight, and marked with intricate designs that displayed a keen eye for detail.
Fantasy · Judejayden
Maybe it's not very clear. But the reaction comes from the ***** eyes in his soul. It's illusionary...or even a projection if you prefer. I suppose it's bad writing.
Suddenly, a primal roar emerged from deep within him, echoing through the universe. When he opened his eyes, a pair of blue pupils as clear as the sky, adorned with intricate ancient patterns that extended from his corneas to his temples, gave him the aura of an ancient deity.
Fantasy · Judejayden
Is writing this easy?
Legend of the Divine Archer
Fantasy · Judejayden