Webnovel Author: Ultimatedaywriter - Novel&Fanfic Collection

Yep I'm writing my own review because no one else will. I feel like my story has been throttled so I hope this works. Hopefully it will but I'm not holding my breath. My story is about cultivation, heart ache, revenge, and souls. Enjoy also except a little smut in the future.

alright I will try it out.

thank you I really appreciate the review. and don't worry I have no plans for him to lose faith with the angels.

The MC is going to cuck the hell out of some fallen heroes. And Yuri sounds like fun I will plan up some scenes.

No that is a metaphor.

I like Hinduism mainly because of Asura's wrath, Record of Ragnaroc, and Shin Megami Tensie. A series with a guy legitimately worshipping Shiva is awesome I can't wait for more.

The plot is pretty good and it hits right from the start. The exhusband is an abusive guy with small penis syndrome from what I can tell. The first chapter grips the reader emotionally and keeps them there.

While info dumps can be boring you have a lot of ground to cover. I would say try and make an action scene or something with dialogue to use the information instead of firing it out. That doesn't mean you can't drop in information especially if its something the MC knows or has recently learned. As a writer its up to you to decide how much is too much. I'm know to have the opposite problem I don't give enough information leaving readers confused. Its one of those things where you need to be conscious of and practice. I hope I'm making sense man. But seriously a good start to your novel in my opinion.

So far no major grammar errors or anything that took me out of the book. The main character has an interesting system with hard limits which always makes things more interesting. The story has a lot of potential give it a read if you like cultivation novels.

Yes it is a harem.

Alright you might not like my review but here it is. I'm not always into slice of life type works but this one is good and has a steady pace. The dialogue and I'm guilty of this too may need to be read aloud by the author in the editing process. Some of the wording is more formal then the context requires but that is my incredibly specific nit pick. As in if I absolutely had to find a flaw this really good work that was it.

It has a lot of promise, a great premise, and plenty of heart. I can't see any overt errors which is great. The present tense may be a little hard for some people to get used to but that would be my biggest complaint.