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2018-07-01 Beigetreten Malaysia
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Teslatrooper
7 months ago
Commented

You repeated the sentences here.

"Michael, you seem a bit distracted today. Anything we can help with?" Antoinette asked, concern lacing her tone.

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Sci-fi · Faux1231

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Teslatrooper
9 months ago
Commented

There's two mistakes in this sentence. Since it's Michael entering the room, it should be "he stepped" instead of "she stepped", and "he saw" instead of "she saw".

As soon as she stepped inside the conference room, she saw a gorgeous woman with a mature look on her face. She looked a bit like Catherine. Speaking of Catherine, she was present inside, waving a hand at him.

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Sci-fi · Faux1231

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Teslatrooper
1 years ago
Commented

"stake" should be "steak"

Artemis' eyes bulged in disbelief when the piece of juicy stake was crushed and mixed with his saliva. 

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
1 years ago
Commented

"is majesty" should be "his majesty"

The soldier stood at the door. "Your highness, Artemis... It will be lunchtime soon. Is majesty will grab you then, will that be alright with you?"

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
1 years ago
Commented

"baby shifts" should be "navy ships"

Another feature that the baby shifts had, which the cruise lines didn't have, was the many training rooms, some strictly for the Baymardians and others for anyone else like those dorm Carona or guests like Artemis. 

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
2 years ago
Commented

altered should be appeared.

The thick pink fog vanished as quickly as it altered, and everyone was stupidly staring at a very unexplainable sight. ('0')

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
2 years ago
Commented

punch should be bunch.

One by one, the many rough-looking pirates mocked the punch. 

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
2 years ago
Commented

severally should be severely i think.

The ships had broken down severally. And 3rd prince Artemis had to rile up his sleeves and join the crew in sealing the leaks with tar. 

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Fantasy · lumydee

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Teslatrooper
2 years ago
Commented

"number of priority" should be "number one priority"

The Demon Rats were no doubt shocked by the emergence of the train but after all the intense fighting, they got over it pretty quickly and knew that the war train was their number of priority to ensure their survival. 

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

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Teslatrooper
2 years ago
Commented

flowed should be followed.

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Fantasy · lumydee