RastDear

male LV 13

Just an ordinary reader

2018-03-28 Beigetreten Japan
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Moments 6
RastDear
RastDear
3 years ago
Commented

Alright I'm annoyed enough that I have to comment now. I like your story Author but you REALLY need to brush up on you grammar or at least get an editor please. I've noticed that you've been making small mistakes even more in the past 10 chapters or so. One of the examples from this chapter is missing words like: " We're not gonna make *IT*" and stuff like differences between your and you're other things like tenses: "have you forget" should be "have you forgotten" these are the kinds of mistakes that I have noticed the most. It's a small thing but it really ruins the immersion. I hope you can see this as an advice instead of an attack. Thanks for the chapter

RastDear
RastDear
4 years ago
Replied to RileyPetesGeralt

no problem! i'll probably only comment if i find similar stuff happening if you don't mind. thanks again for the chapter!

RastDear
RastDear
4 years ago
Commented

hello again. you introduced alfred as alfred but then in the same paragraph changed it to arthur and later again back to alfred. while i know it could be his last name or whatnot i feel like you should make it consistent or at least say his full name first. this is just a little nitpick. thanks for the chapter

RastDear
RastDear
RastDear
4 years ago
Commented

i don't know if you read my comment or not but just to make sure i'll do it again. at ch 32 you said he was 16 but at the status update it says he's 17. please fix this

RastDear
RastDear
4 years ago
Commented

just started reading and either there's a typo or something. you said that he was 16 but at the status update at the end the age was listed as 17