The magic and fighting scenes are awesome and the characters are great. If you're looking for a good story, this one has got you covered. A little bit rough with the formatting and style at the beginning, but after chapter 5 it's super clean!
I enjoy mispellings, like soilder. Since instead of being an actual soldier, it's a person make of soil who is a guard / soldier. super fantasy, or soilder is a soldier rank.
"So you're with them. Yes, there currently in the village chieftains, but right now, it's located up there it's the biggest building. Feel free to go talk to them but dont cause any trouble." The soilder answers pointing up.
Fantasy · Elite_cobra
lots of backstory, but curious to see where the story takes our characters.
In hindsight, I could have immediately had the character kill the animal for meat. But the thought of it didn't occur to me and it seemed a bit cruel. Too much dilemma, drama, debate and group dynamic. Also extremely dark for the second chapter. I'm trying to not introduce too much internal drama and conflict unless it's for the plot.
Nice word count, author knows how to write good scenes and unique characters for the protagonists to interact with. There's a good magic system and family dynamic as you can feel it going in a certain direction. Definitely a slow burn as the world is being built, but can't wait to see the adventures the protagonists go on.
I think it's got a good start and good potential. The author definitely has a passion for writing and I hope to see more chapters. I find it quite comfy to read, but that's more a personal preference.
I wonder what part of the continent skellius is on... (。・・)_且~ must near be some sort of underground lair or cave system. Maybe even an earth dragon? thanks for the chapter!
For a first time system novel it's written really well. The system screens are nice and easy to read. It's not a dark themed novel and very similar to various litrpg stories. I think the humor is great and the first 20 chapters definitely have some interesting moments and characters. World building-wise it's still a bit slow. However the pacing is not hurried so you get to take the time to understand the leveling system and information about the enemies before each fight. The title is a pretty good synopsis of the story and it's a very leisurely read.
fun first chapter! looking forward to reading more.
Asgold, sounds like Assgold. nice overlord reference!
"Asgold is an S-rank necromancer. He's a mercenary hunter, so he isn't affiliated with any guilds. I already let Julian know you are all promoted to an A-rank team. however, you're not allowed to enter dungeons right now and will require constant watch as you're too dangerous." Willace explains.
Darkness into Light
Fantasy · Elite_cobra