Zusammenfassung
Orion Kartia's life was cut short and he was now forced to transmigrate into the wonderful world of One Piece but thankfully he has a few gifts to help him get started!
This is purely fan-fiction. It's just a way for me to practice my English whilst writing something enjoyable.
This book is targeted at avid One Piece fans as there is a lot of terminology that can only be understood by people who follow the manga/anime.
The release schedule for normal working weeks will be as follows:
Mon - 1x Chapters
Tues - 1x Chapter
Wed - 1x Chapters
Thurs - 1x Chapter
Fri - 1x Chapters
Sat - 2x Chapters
Sun - 2x Chapters
Any mass releases or dead periods will be announced in advance.
Thank you for all the support so far but please don't hold back with the criticism as well... I need it to improve my writing. I welcome all criticism, as long as it's constructive!
I'm mainly using this to test the waters and improve my writing, as I'm also working on the story I'm most proud of and looking forward to releasing!
I won't be releasing that one for the foreseeable future as I want to have written the majority of the story in advance as the goal is to get paid on the back of it. And there are too many potentially good novels that finish half way through for one reason or another. I don't want my main novel to be one of those!
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Ok I have read enough to Understand what kind of MC the author is trying to make from this line in Chap 23 "I'm no hero but as long as I see something I don't agree with, I won't hesitate to do what's required of me!". The author is trying to make his MC a saint. but all i seen so far as soon as he arrived at the town is to attempt to kill a couple of marines doing their job so they can feed them selves or family. Their job was to capture fugitives which by standard are extremely dangerous to the public. he helped the other 3 girls escape and saved the one that was captured. he then says hes not a hero and will kill people he don't agree with. Author from what i understand you are trying to make a MC that is purely evil in nature but only show his good guy act to close ones or to the ones he wants to use (white haired girl). If by chance he makes his way to that toy island. by your standard he will kill everyone that is living there. When you first showed the marines you portrayed them as rapists licking their lips and making them say they'll have fun with them...uhh? what... please don't stick chinese tropes into a novel like this. Yes in the anime they were subtle, hardly noticeable and far in between. I will still continue to read this. The MC is just very poorly one sided still. Author stop trying to make your MC the good guy here you are clearly making him to be a cold blooded killer but shadowing it by friendship and happiness when he sees his friends. Also justifying his killing is also dumb so don't try that. there are more perspectives then just the MC try to think what others would think. that's what makes a novel more interesting and complex. Example would be the marine that he killed could have a family and is just trying to feed them by doing his job, However, your MC killed him for no reason other then to say I'm stronger so killing is justified. Knocking the marine out would be the best approach in this situation. You are clearly trying to make the MC infamous early for killing people when this is a very stupid move to make if you have a brain.
change nothing everything is awesome so far plot, pace,character development ,new character introduction,back story while keeping us from anticipating what's next to come just love it my power stone from every day will be here now
Well I am a person that love fanfic, and looking forward for your work. Hope you satisfied my curiosity.................... 140 character Requirement
Fuc😁 you author , Currently at ch. 101 sorry can't take it no world development with a fuc Ed up story. Mc reborn with cheat given by God Mc compares to his big bro is weak as Mc body weak compares to his bro as mc give him cheat Mc element is wind and his bro due to cheat can get sun power . Mc body is weak as his bro have dragon body with the cheat given by him Mc use swords and bro halberd . He is strong than sword Mc crew have a girl with dual devil fruit of which one is time fruit. Author why do I think except author everybody is strong and his fruit is too weak too. Are you planning to write 800 or 1200 ch. Then I m sorry I was looking for a short like 350 ch. Have anyone heard mc reborn with cheat and God give him cheat for his friend too And those cheats even made them more powerful than him .
Keep it up i like it, i need more!!! MORE¡!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!??????!??!!!??!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!=!!!!!
Pretty much a wuxia novel with the setting of One Piece. Disappointing in all honesty. It was hyped up in the beginning but then it just fell faster than a devil fruit user swimming in the blue sea. I don't recommend reading this so turn back while you still can. P.s: Apparently Tsunade reincarnated into One Piece. After that I skimmed a few chapters and I just don't know what to say anymore.
Great story. Great fan fiction. It is really fun and entertaining. My only problem with it is, there is not enough chapters for me to keep on reading.
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Cool.. Keep it coming, dude.. I like Fan-fiction, way more intresting. Don’t cut this story half.way.. Make it cool but kill super vallain often it will lose it charm.. hahahha
I'm disappointed, utterly disappointed. Create Pirate group then at some points Breaking it leave one by one, Bull****. Important for future progress? Bull****. Just says it was because your whims. Power up because some stupid seat back? BS BS BS
I think the reason I really hate this story is all the extra sh*t the author added that did not and should not exist in the One Piece world. Anyone who reads this story, enjoy it, and still claims to be a one piece fan... well, congratulations! You’ve just won the Biggest Hypocrite if The Year award!
It's a shame the author cares about his story less than the readers do. The reason for badly written plot is because the author needs to practice different ideas for his 'real' novel. I wouldn't mind what happened happening if it was presented in a reasonable way and didn't contradict 100000% of everything the character did or said before. With 1 chapters all character building you did was thrown out the window, yet you say its to help him develop?? How can he develop when you thoroughly destroyed his base?!? That's why people are mad, not because of what happened, but because we feel cheated and lied to, was everything he said fake?? If all that was an act and this is who he truly is now that would have been brilliant writing, but that doesn't seem to be the case here.
I’m sorry for my previous review. I must skipped over some sentences. Shame on me. And thanks for reminding me @Wf_cure @christa.................................................................................................................
Yo is it possible for you to continue writing the story? i love it so far i like the story that you wrote more than i did the original please continue if possible
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It is a nice fanfic, however, you won't get much enjoyment from reading until chapter 129, unless the author continues it. Apparently, many people have been disappointed by the last few chapters at this point, which probably motivated the author to just drop it. Right now, it is on hiatus, so no recommended as a read. Besides those points, it is one of the best ff you will find on QI, completely unlike the absolute wish-fulfillment ffs here.
Dropped I just CAN'T EVEN with this s### just no I gave it a chance but only the writing quality is up there IMO though everything probs improves BUT I CAN'T EVEN ENJOY THIS PIECE OF S### BECAUSE THE AUTHOR INSINUATES BOA, SHAYA AND THE TWINS WERE R###ED NO JUST NO F#### YOU. And once more I'm at peace after going through a S### show of a light novel having to add R### just to drive the story.
Another "original" story based off something that already exist these trash ass authors can't have a original thought to save their lives it's ridiculous
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TAGS .......... -Male MC -Transmigration -One Piece World -Overpowered MC -Smart MC -Action -Adventure -Brotherhood -Family -SuperPowers(Devil Fruits) -Pirates -Time Skip -Martial Arts -Rank System -Weak to Strong -Drama -Romance( very little)