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The Greatest Monarch
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Zusammenfassung
After an unexpected accident, the king of Zion went into a state of coma. The ruler should be the heart of his people but the truth was entirely different from this. The coma seemed more like a blessing for the people of Zion.
They wished for this blessing to never vanish. Why? That was because if it did not vanish and if he died, the holy church would take over the kingdom and they would no longer have to serve under a trash king anymore.
But after he woke up, something even better happened. The King has lost his memory, even his personality was completely rewritten.
When the trash king came to know the wrong deeds he had committed earlier, it pierced into his chest like sharp arrows making him feel guilty beyond what words could explain.
He decided to change the shape of his kingdom and become the strongest king ever with the help of the "system" he got!
Will he be able to dominate the world? Will he be able to enjoy the luxurious life of a king? Those questions can only be answered when you read his story and dive into the world of fantasy!
Note: This is a remastered novel of my previous novel. After I had to undergo surgery I could no longer write, which made people lose interest in my novel and I actually wanted to rewrite my novel too. There were many mistakes and loopholes that I wanted to fix so here I am... writing my novel once again.
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hi, i am really happy that i am writing the 1 review in this novel. well, i read the 12 chaps and all i could say is that the plot is well written , the mc is likable , his character is developing in a good way. there still some space for mkre world building but in general i liked the pace of the story and each chapter made want i read more. the updates are regular, the author is strict about it . i really hope that this work get recognised and loved the same way i feel about it 🥰
This book is everything I could ever want from a book let alone a free one. This character has a genuine personality though starts off cruel he slowly develops as a person and it’s beautiful to see! The world building right now is a little unclear but I expect a lot over the coming chapters! I highly recommend this book to all who read it! The only complaint is I WANT MORE OF IT!!!
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I rate this high, only because once I hit chapter 6 my complaints pretty much stopped. That being said there are a lot of problems with the first 5 chapters. Grammar is a big issue here. I understand English is not your first language, but there are a lot of turns of phrases that just don't work in English. Reading more books in the genre can assist in fixing these issues. I also recommend finding someone who can edit out the worst of your mistakes. Your first 5 chapters do not create any sort of emotional attachment to the MC. This is a huge problem! I understand there is a lot of info the reader needs to understand the world. I suggest use dialogue to gradually pepper in the world building. Your use of flowery descriptions had me skipping several paragraphs, because I didn't care. Leaving descriptions more vague helps the reader envision your world better. Readers are smart, we can fill in the blanks for ourselves! There are a few points in the first 5 chapters that just don't make sense. Like the PM would have been informed from the beginning about the King's health. No one is just born a 'strategist'. Make sense if maybe he was trained after his talent was discovered, but it doesn't just happen. Please leave definitions and To Be Continued out of the chapter. They don't add to the story and only forcibly destroy the flow. A lot of the first 5 chapters you are committing the crime of telling us things, instead of letting us see the story play out. You will lose readers with this. The first 10 chapters should be about creating an emotional connection between the readers and your MC(s). Names are constantly getting messed up, or your switching the spelling of them. Please fix the easy stuff like this! Once the system was introduced the story started coming together nicely and is the only reason you got such a high rating! There are serious issues with this story. I am sorry it took so long to get you this review! Perhaps, consider opening the story differently, like from the moment the MC wakes up and using the dialogue to fill in the blanks of the world around him. It is fun for the readers to experience the world with the MC.
Shameless Author here :> so yes I rated my book 5 stars cuz why not? Anyways, you can ask me any question related to my novel here and I will try to answer them all if it did not reveal big spoilers related to the story. There's nothing more to see here 👀 cya