The Correct Way Of Idol Managing

LV 4

ShinSungmi

Omg! The plotline for this is something I would usually go for, and everything is quite intriguing. The story is very much easy to read, and there are not much grammatical errors.

LV 13

Delphonse

So far it's kinda funny in the way the Main Character acts. Excited to see where it leads. The wording is a little off but keep up the good work!

LV 2

KD_Dix

This usually isn't a type of book I would personally pick out, but I was pleasantly surprised by how organized and efficient the author presented it. It's very in-depth in a professional understanding as well as giving ”highschoolers” a better look as they were exhibited as mature, secure giving, devoted individuals that sought out a dream to become an idol and I honestly believe even with the struggles and the determination of others wanting their downfall, they will succeed! I also wanted to make a point, the ”Manger, ” may have had his struggles, to this day, but with the determination, he broadcasts in gaining the audience to promote the ”Cherry Blossoms, ” I honestly feel that he may like it more then he realizes. Maybe it's not just about the money he will earn by managing this idol club?! One suggestion I would consider is to check out ”Grammarly, ” it is a fantastic program that helps with punctuation and grammatical errors. Within your story, I have noticed a couple of errors, as well as the changing of characters ”Pov.” It can get a little confusing regarding who is talking at the moment; I suggest titling the top of each change though it is nothing major, I believe it will help the flow and overall understanding of your story.

LV 3

Daoist_HeavenlyGod

I think it is time for me to made my review, tbh this book got a very great potential, I enjoyed reading this one. Hoping author won't drop this, It was very fun for me to read. I absolutely recommend this to all of you guys to read this is very very wonderful book.

LV 11

MeriemR

I really think this story has so much potential. I like it so far. I think if the author could improve a few things, it would be more appealing to readers. First of all, the tenses need to be unified, either past or present. Some editing needs to be done as there are many grammatical mistakes. I think there should be more character development, maybe backgrounds, goals, motivation. Something that kinda bothered me was the fact that the author uses both first and last name every time he talks about a characters. I think one is enough, also descriptions are lacking. Great work though, I am sure you will improve with time!! Gambatte kudasai!!

LV 2

evolx24

As many of people said in the comments, Idols are not my cup of tea for two reasons: I've lived in Tokyo and got soo fed up with it and second it is always the same comedy. About the novel, it is actually fun, but you have to like Japanese comedy, otherwise, you just won't get jokes. I personally laughed a lot. Characters are funny and adorable, Araragi kept reminding me of the Monogatari series. And the dark part of my really wanted the whole show to go dark 'à la' Perfect blue... But that's just me, gotta see a doctor :) Overall, if you like reading manage and shonen, I recommend it!

LV 10

ReincarnatedSaint

Awesome novel. There are very few novel, which attracts my attention in this genre. It was hilarious and It was rate for me to get so much into it. Yeah, I think has a bit of problem with his tenses and singular and plural words. But I think it would improve overtime. Just don't drop it

LV 10

Jin_Daoran

Ever since I read Penguin Revolution, I've liked the manager/producer trope in light novels and CNs. The high school drama I could do without, however, since very few writers do it well. In the initial chapter, the MC is immediately plunged into a daily life full of complication, and the subsequent chapters certainly are built well on the foundation of the first. From the first chapter to succeeding chapters, the motivation of the MC to put his best effort into idol managing is also shown, though I look forward to seeing how that motivation matures in the future. He's certainly a go-getter, so it promises to be interesting. While the character of the MC is set up well, I'd like to see a bit more set up in the character of the girls in the chapters following their introductory scenes. The pacing is good, the plot is developing nicely. But, what the heck, if this is discount Haruhi Suzumiya, I will cry. Big fat ugly tears. Author, you are warned~ ;] The grammar is good enough, but needs work. The plot and the MC give the story enough charm that the reader is drawn more and more into the world. This story about the travails of Araragi Hideki, I definitely recommend it. Fight on, Araragi Hideki!

LV 7

Gourmet_DAO

It is easy to read, the text block is a little rough, but it does not cause any special complaints. The title page is attractive. The story is fascinating. You can advise those who like to read stories about school and romance. Respect to the author for an interestingly written story!

LV 4

MatchaMilk

This really heavily reminds me of an anime which ig the author is going for and its nice to see that. The story is cute and I can see in my mind how it unfolds!  The characters are also adorable! There are grammarical mistake and switches between past and present tense, author should settle for one tense. I also think its not really necessary to describe their appearances, we need a bit info about them but going too much into detail is superfluous. I get it tries to go with the anime trope but in a novel or even a light novel, its not really common (correct me tho if im wrong) This would make a good manga tbh! It would be even cooler if it could be a shounen, if you think managing idols and shounen doesnt fit, i highly recommend act age where the mangaka makes striving to become an actress so damn hype. Have you read light novels? I'd suggest looking at them to see how those authors wrote them, although a lot say japanese light novels are trash lol All in all, its a nice, light-hearted story and I hope the author will continue their hard work!

LV 4

Barbare

Very good novel, basically I have a negative idea of ​​the genre and you will understand that I'm not a fan at all, that won't change. BUT ! You have not done what i often criticize in this genre, in other words something completely absurd and cliché, you are only taking up the codes of the genre by adding your originality to it and that is probably why I was caught in the story, however it’s too different from what I like to read in and general and that's why it won't be one of my classics. I can only make two comments to you and that’s to be careful with the way you bring information, I find that you are not subtle enough and that will only enrich the development of your characters and your intrigue which are already excellent and secondly pay attention to the structure of your sentences, I find it a little too compact and I have the impression that the actions follow one another too quickly sometimes. Otherwise I can only congratulate you for making me like an Idols novel, it's a feat, believe me! 😂

LV 15

ResidentialPsycho

This is a high school series focusing an a teenage boy (presumably) who becomes the manager of an idol club in his elite school. This appears to be a comedy using a particular type of Japanese joke called a tsukkomi (a one-person tsukkomi at that), but they fall flat. This presumably occurs in Japan, and I am not sure what the era it is. The technology appears to be at a low level, so maybe later in the 1900s? People have purple, blue, or black hair, but no explanation has been given for this. I don't know if that's the natural colors in the world, if magic exists, if hair dye is popular, or if everyone is wearing wigs. If you have never read or watched any series featuring Japanese idols, you will be completely lost while reading this and may want to do some research before trying this series. In real life, groups such as AKB48, SMAP, Arashi, and many others are famous. These groups feature boys or girls as young as elementary schoolers dancing and singing in groups to a choreography and wearing costumes for their events. They also have strict training for fitness and appearances, and an individual member can be replaced at any time. They have harsh training for dancing and singing, both individually and as a group. They have strict rules about their personal lives, including not having any romantic relationships, having to present designed personalities to the public, being unable to show they are stressed if out in public, etc. They often have to pay for several of their own fees and receive little income doing this work. They may only be notified of a job the night before an event and are expected to work when ill. They may not receive any vacations. There aren't any unions to protect their rights either. Aside from performances, they also have to post vlogs and the like showing their designated personalities in order to get likes, participate in variety shows, and have hand-shaking and signing venues. They work hard to become famous and compete with each other, even though it's only a temporary thing. There are a lot of other critiques about them, such as promoting underage girls as objects of sexual fantasy, but I won't go into that here. That's roughly how idol groups work today in our world in Japan based on my understanding of them. However, this series treats blue and purple hair as natural, and the time and place are not revealed. One character is eventually described as Japanese, but the setting isn't necessarily Japan. Since the MC expects to make money from this, I'm guessing things are different there. The story could improve drastically if the setting were clarified early in the beginning. There is no world background. There isn't much development to the story. Rather than reading a story itself, it feels more like I'm reading the detailed outline to a story. There is no meat to go with the bones of the plot or fill it in, which makes the pacing quite fast. There isn't any imagery. There isn't any character depth and aren't any character-establishing moments either. The MC is stressed. One of the wanna-be idols is optimistic. That's about all there is for readers to know about them thus far. As such, there obviously isn't any character development either. There are no training montages as the girls suffer through training and making their own music. When reading the series, this group gives me more of an impression of a band rather than an idol group, and they sound like they would fit that career much better. There are a number of logical errors as well, even going back so far as the initial setting. The MC says he's "poor," but this is only told rather than shown. Why did he enter such a costly school if he was concerned about money? Why isn't he working part-time or doing odd jobs for money? How is he able to afford to eat a full meal every day? Is he using community showers to save on expenses? Does his family keep the heat off in winter and AC off in summer to save on costs? Is he wearing worn second-hand clothing? No explanation is given, and none of this is described. The MC strongly gives the impression that he doesn't know what true poverty is. There is definite wealth-shaming, by the way. Other series have race-shaming, fat-shaming, or privilege shaming, and now we have wealth-shaming, too. If he didn't want to be near people who live more comfortable lives, then why did he choose a high school like this one? Why did these people want to live the highly-scrutinized, controlled lives of idols? It's a mystery. Although the MC wants money, this is definitely not how to earn it. At one point, the idols enter a competition. I can't see why established groups would bother with newbs like them, and the competition format doesn't make sense at all. For some reason, it's portrayed as a format used for martial arts tournaments and sports when idols are only focused on popularity. It's a show, so wouldn't it make sense to have all the groups perform in an established order to show off and let people submit cards voting for their favorites at the end? With better technology, they could vote electronically. When drawing numbers, what's the point of each person drawing a number from a box unless it's to give a show? These managers are incredibly busy, so they likely wouldn't sit around waiting for things to happen. If the draw is being filmed, then that could add some ******* for the event, but that's all. It would make sense to announce each group on a board as the lineup is established. There are distracting grammar errors throughout the chapters, but the worst of it is in the first two chapters. The first chapter is mostly in present tense while the second chapter is mostly in past tense. One tense needs to be used consistently. The text is mostly in first and second person. I'm not sure why the narrator is using second-person in a story like this. It's not like readers are seeing his diary entries. Even though this series is mostly written in first person, it spontaneously has chapters in third person or with a narrator change readers don't know about. Literature featuring first-person narratives usually have one main character with a limited perspective on events. Third-person narratives can easily incorporate other characters to change the point of view, but first-person cannot do that. The only series I can think of which changes the first-person perspective from one person to another is Animorphs, and each character's name is listed at the top of each chapter. This fic doesn't tell you the narrator has changed until the end of the chapter when you've already completely changed how you view one character. This issue alone is very confusing. Other common grammar errors include not spelling out numbers less than 100, improper use of commas, using similar-sounding words instead of the appropriate words (ex. exemption rather than exception), incorrectly worded common phrases, incomplete sentences, using the wrong prepositions, and improper capitalization. Just using a spell-check and grammar-checking program like MS Word would make for a drastic improvement. In short, this story needs a lot of work and development. Ideas and concepts need to be expanded on because the readers cannot read the writer's mind.

LV 4

Nightingale367

It may not be the type of book genre that I'll read usually as I'm not really into management novels, but I really have to say that the author uses good grammar and suitable vocabulary at times and the the ideas are entertaining enough to make you continue reading.

LV 4

816D35

The story is good so far. The writing is smooth. The MC is too serious for his age but I think it is acceptable because he is self-conscious about his economic state. I think writing from the first person POV is limiting because it is hard to describe what the other party is thinking when you are not inside their heads but you seem to find a way to do it. good luck and good continuation.

An entertaining story that surprises. The characters feel sympathetic and the writing quality itself is quite good. I sincerely enjoyed this story far more than I initially imagined I would. Minor grammar mistakes, but these are neglectable as they seldom intervene with the flow of the story. A job well done.

LV 10

MizA

I was gladly surprised that a title I didn't like was a instant love. The **** theme mingled with idol management is easy to read. So if you wish a light reading, it's for you. Main character is so likeable I'd like to pinch his cheeks. So tsundere! There are minor mistakes on grammar, tenses and also, dialogue tags, but nothing some editing can't fix. Go go!

LV 11

coffeemugssshot

I am more into mature or let's just say older novel contents. I passed the age of reading high school novels, but I would say, you're doing a good job author. There are some grammatical errors here and there (not obvious though, so it's fine), some spelling mistake as well, but the way the story slowly progresses, is like it. The challenges and management skills of the ML is superb. I give two and half thumbs up for you.

LV 2

Bahtiyor

Despite having technical errors in the chapters, the author still was able to convey the premise of the story to me and elaborate it through character development, action-reaction, and conflict. I like how you incorporated first person perspective and having the balance of thought and plot. Many authors that tried to write like that often failed to convey such a simple premise. You did just fine.

LV 4

Primate

Though, not a fan of idols type of novels, I took my time to read the available chapters of your work. Firstly, the quality of your writing. I think your writing is good. Good grammar, tenses and phrases. Only minor errors which I've pointed out in the comments. Secondly, the rate of updates. This is excellent so far. Thirdly, the nature of your characters. I believe you understand the logic behind character formation and development. Your MC is of great character, even the side characters are all good. Well eritten characters. Fourthly, story line. Right from chapter one, your story is progressing well. From the MC in a new environment to the beginning of his role in his new environment. Steady and focus storyline. And lastly, the world building. Though, I'm not a fan of this world, it's well written. The little of the world I've read is a proof of that. Keep up the good work.