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In MHA as Rimuru Tempest with Archer Emiya's Power(Being Rewritten)
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The style of writing is weird, I don't know if you have read any other novels before but it feels weird for you not to use ' ' for thinking and " " for talking. Instead of using " " for both. Also putting the names in front of what people are saying throws off immersion you should do, "Wait did that actually happen to him?" Bobby asked john with genuine curiosity.
I dont know what to write so I'll just say keep up the great work and the story is great so far. Also I have a question will he be later on getting more of rimuru stuff or abilities from the anime or LN/WN
While the story has a nice premise and starting plot the mc feels like too much of a pushover I don't mind him being a trap but the way anyone can trick him or treat him as a pushover repulses me. He just goes along with whatever happens,when nezu tricked him even with the contract he could've just denied anything and refuse to a contract he just took nezu questioning him repeatedly, but that's fine even if he went with it. But him being declared as the loser of the cooking competitive absolutely discouraged me from reading. That was so heavily biased and the fact that he goes along with the bets with him gaining bs in return even if he wins yea no sorry byee!!
author I recommend a small harem maximum three because with a large one the stories are ruined it would rise to a higher ranking if the story improves but at the moment there are few chapters but for a novice writer in my opinion he is doing quite well
The story and idea has potential but the author rushed through it and cut every corner. To start with the story and character development, Mc appears and immediately meets various heroes who, despite his villainous actions, are ok with him. Furthermore character dynamics and story lines are skipped over, this is shown the most in the Christmas chapter where suddenly people who we have never seen the Mc interact with are at his party and talking like old friends. My biggest complaint however is that the Mc was working to become a teacher but is never seen actually teaching, interacting with students, or being officially hired. This is a major part of the story that would explain a lot about the MC's relationships with characters and develop his character but the story doesn't exist.
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dude you need to read it yourself and then correct the story. the way it is going is completely uninteresting. even the conversation need improvement.
Your MC is honestly just plain too edgy. All the killing and castrations, you honestly need to chill out my dude. Your story would be 10x better if your Mc just calmed down a bit.
I won't say anything, I'll just leave this here and go, good luck with your story................................. ........................................
I really enjoyed the novel up to the Christmas special, after that it went way off the rails and started to make no sense, such as the mc talking to people he shouldn't know and the entire timeline becoming a mess to push the story forward in a faster manner than it previously was.
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Secarah keseluruan tidak masuk akal dan bodoh dia dari dunia modern tapi akal sehat karakter utama mc china yang berarti menyinggung dia lo akan dibunuh atau gimanah ya dia menyelesaikan kebanyakan masalah dengan membunuh yang sangat tidak cocok dengan tema dunia boku no hero
MC get Op at the start. didn't end the First world and already has the Power to destroy a Planet. get abilities that he use a couple of Times. nothing original. 28 ch. read
I'm giving you 5 stars. [Questions before read] •Is a Multiverse Fanfic? If that not the case... •What is the World? Watching the Chapter Names I guess is MHA. And finally... •Should I read this Book?
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Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
Review from the first 5 chapters: There is no Rimuru in this story so far just another Shirō Emiya with the face of Rimuru. The story have a system and is confirmed that there will be others with systems. Saying this the character design and story development have been null so far. The writting quality is average. The world background cant be judge just from 5chapters so far just 4star. Update Stability 5star so far 5 chapters in few days.
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