Entering the World of HSDxD

You already know what type of story this is. The protagonist gets 5 wishes and to go to ANY world of his choosing, and of course, he didn't wish to be god. No, he chose to be born in the DxD universe. He could've chosen pokemon, a world were no one dies, but no. He then wishes for "A primordial bloodline that can let me tap into the power of the ancients". What is that supposed to even mean? Do 'the ancients' mean your ancestors before humanity? If so, did you just wish for the power of a great ape? Honestly... He then wishes to be born as Issei's brother, for no reason whatsoever other than to make it interesting. Did you just wish for your life to be filled with danger? Do you have a mental disability?

| REVIEW | This review MAY come off as overly critical. The world derives from the world of Highschool DxD, in this world, demons and other beings thrive. -For starters, The story, its all over the place. The story does not have a consistent line in which that leads to a strong plot. The entirety of the story is a jumble of words that don't seem to work together. -Continuing on, gramatical errors make the fanfiction incredibly difficult to read, with the terrible plot development, it makes it harder. -My issue does not come in with the world part, it comes with character choices, and developments. The character lacks any major backstory besides us knowing that, oh, he died because of his parents that abandoned him. It is incredibly vague, it would do no harm to elaborate on some of the parts. - The Fan-Fic is incredibly difficult to put together. The story line, as I stated is everywhere. The main aspects of the Fan-Fiction is essentially a regular MC's character traits. He's overpowered, crude, and just overall a over-generic character. - This Fan-Fic has a terrible structure, I am no writer, no professional reader. But the structure is GOD AWFUL. It is hard to read enough as is, but the character dialogue isn't even separated. It is almost impossible to comprehend. Internal thoughts and external dialogue should be separated. Upon viewing the first few chapters I realized how much of a mess this was. FINAL STATEMENTS : This Fan-Fiction, if you can call it one, is not great, but not the worst I've seen. Some improvements the author can make, is to get a proof-reader. Getting a proof-reader could be a valuable asset, especially since the proof-reader is most likely good at english, and can help separate the mess. Write up a storyline on WHERE and HOW you want to characters to end up. Writing a storyline without a proper basis is a important feat, doing this quickly will help a lot. Finally, UTILIZE ABILITIES FROM PREVIOUS CHAPTERS. You should keep a list of all the abilities you gave your characters, and keep in mind how they can be countered, etc. DON'T FORGET YOUR CHARACTERS ABILITIES. If you read this review, please try to act on at least one of these things.

This is a story where the Mc is stupid and dosent use the advantages given to him. First he rarely uses the dungeon even though it’s an overpowered way to strengthen himself but nope the Mc decides that a Dojo would be better. And he gets an amazing ability of unlimited blade works but when he uses it which is when he is besieged by an devil army he waits till his nearly dead before he decides to use it, and it turns out it’s his first time using it? Are you joking me, after all these years he never decided to use his STRONGEST ability, the result was the he didn’t know how to use it properly and took time to get the basics in the middle of a battle against the devils. And after that it turns out the ability wasn’t even barely even awakened even though it was already max level. Everything in this novel is twisted to the authors will to suit the situation, for example he has a detection ability but it never work until the fire ball is seen by the nekoshou. And after all this his abilities get assimilated into other skill which pretty much make the skills worse then when it was before like when he had had senjutsu he could heal himself a little at a time periodically with the energy around him but now he needs to lose half of his stamina to heal medium wounds. I don’t think the author meant it this way but thats how it’s written. For people who care about the logic behind the story and the small things I do not recommend this fan fic. There are many more small inconsistencies that I would like to point out but I can’t be ****ed.

Damn this is good. It felt refreshing after reading this. I like the MC here and the story development is also good. I want to read more , so please don't stop midway Mr. Writter.