Accidental Roommate

Writing Quality is 4/5: Reason: It's well written, some punctuation does need to be fixed in later parts of the first chapter. Some words seem to be missing as well. However the story is executed well, and one can tell that the author is either a native English speaker or has been educated in English for the majority of his/her life. Stability of Updates is 3/5: Reason: It's only the first chapter. Authors are divided into two groups: Those who write and write and write without any regard to the response from the audience. And then there are those who read comments/reviews and then decided when or how to upload the next chapter. I always give a 3 star rating for this section because it's still new and we don't know how the author will respond with their next chapter. Story Development is 4/5: Reason: Good premise, good idea, despite what I already said in the comments section, I don't dislike the story so far. It has potential to either be a reverse-harem, or a really sweet romance. Or... a five-way love ********? Is that called a love pentagon? :P Character Design I give 3/5: Reason: One chapter isn't usually enough to properly ascertain the character of the protagonist and other characters. I give a fair 3 star rating on this section because there usually will be more development in the future but at this point there isn't anything to look at. Also from what I've already said in the first chapter's comment section, the protagonist is a bit of a mess to begin with. Like most protagonists are. Don't be disheartened dear author at what I say here. To future readers, don't give up on this story because of what I said. World Background is 2/5: Reason: Time and Setting isn't clear yet. We know the generally broad area the story is set in (Ontario, of possibly Canada. There is city called Ontario in the world, but I won't assume it's the city.). The era/period of this story seems modern at best considering the one reference I picked up which is the car of one of the characters: Civic. There isn't much detail otherwise. Hopefully this will improve as the protagonist interacts with the other characters and with the rest of the world. Other comments: I'm not sure how far this bus stop is from her father's house, but if the male character that is introduced has a car parked nearby and is contemplating life at this same bus stop, it could mean that the house of the four males isn't relatively far from the protagonist's father's house. Meaning, it is possible for her to bump into her father once in a while. I personally don't want to see how that would play out and would rather prefer if the protagonist lived a good distance away from her father. Anyhow, thanks for the chapter, hope to see more soon. (added to library.) P.S. I only add stories that rate a 3/5 minimum on average to my library. :D