The Immortal in Star Wars

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Daoist2ndArcher

The protagonist is unlikable and another one of those kinds of Immortals without ambitions or personality who live a miserable life and where no matter what happens you can tell from the start that the ending will probably be very bad, not to mention the overall development. Also there's way too much being told and nothing happening.

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Lucas_Oliveira_2302

If I'm not mistaken, an amulet will be created in the future that prevents the user from aging. The MC could take this amulet and give it to a girl he wants to keep it forever

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Flint_dad

perfect 👍 the protagonist is Alive the universe is Alive

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TinyBookDragon

It's in first person but feels more like a summarized third person. Very bland, very boring all around.

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Itachi_Uchiha000

The protagonist's character development kinda suck. But the idea is hella good. But you need to fix on how the character should be at least ambitious than before.

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LeafPanda

Sorry author, but the main character isn't that amazing. I know that he's immortal but why can't he have some ambitions for his descendants to achieve something

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septimus_heap7

Just wanted to give a good Review . Is there any Chance that the Mc travels to different Universe or other Storys ? Just dont drop it . :)

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TrueMonarch00

For those who never watched Star Wars like me and you think this won’t be a good novel to read, well I will tell you this think twice because I came to read as a tryout but I like this novel soo much that I keep bothering the author to update so I can read more. The is a gem and I would like for you to try the holy book 📕. Join me on this adventure to bother the author ✍🏻, not to drop this book cause it hurt me sooo bad that I would have to stop reading 📖 webnovel. Anyways read this book and you will not regret it .

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Raptor2244

So I’ve read a couple reviews as well as the novel and I have to say that you’ve done a pretty good job in my opinion. I like how you didn’t have a ROB that’s always pretentious and illogical. I also like how you made his character OP but in a way that took some effort (and a lot of time). I like how the MC was transported back millions of years and can just enjoy growing and creating without having to deal with a disaster right off the bat. I also like how he’s not a hero of justice or a crazy evil lunatic. I also greatly appreciate the setting. There are surprisingly few good Star Wars fanfiction. Now, while it’s a very good idea, the execution is a so-so. I’m not a writer so I cannot tell you how to correct this but I can offer my point of view. First of all the story reads kind of like a grocery list. It’s pretty dry and if I didn’t enjoy the subject matter I would probably get bored. Second the MC personality is indeed a little lacking. Although I think this is because he has been alone for so long, a loner MC who doesn’t interact with others is a boring MC, unless the inner monolgue is interesting in some way. Third, your character doesn’t really have any overarching goal/purpose. Having a goal adds spice to a story because it gives drive and because there will inevitably be people who oppose that goal. Now I can’t offer you any advice on how to fix this but I can offer you some fanfics I’ve enjoyed that I believe did some things very well. First of all “The Lone Wanderer” series on ff.net fits your MC personality well. although in that story MC is forced and can’t chose where he goes, I believe your MC and that MC have a similar personality. Second you can look at “Harry potter and a galaxy far far away”. For this you either like it or you don’t but there’s long spans of working on tech/force abilities and somehow the author makes it not boring. Finally, I would look at “The questionable burdens of leadership of a troll emperor”. I dislike a lot of things in this novel, mostly the MC view on s*x and “free love” and there’s some racism but that doesn’t bother me as much because a lot of it is pretty accurate IMO. However the author absolutely nailed kingdom building, OP MC, and the consequences a long life will have on personality and view of others. Perhaps I gave too much advice and your not really that serious about writing. But either way I think you have an excellent idea and are doing a pretty good job executing it. You just need to tweak some stuff. Thanks for the fic.

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RevolutionMan

One of the best star wars story, many story from kotor, old republic and etc. Thanks 🙏 and i wait new chapters. +rep +rep +rep +rep +up +up +up +up [img=recommend]

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HolySage

Bro, when are you gonna update? The story is so good.

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UnholyKozmos

Please don’t give up. Don’t listen to the negative comments about your OC, it’s your story do with it what you want. Hope to see an update soon 🙏🏻

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Mrnoob5089

Great story development, Great character design, Great world building, Overall I very much enjoyed the book.

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TheDudeThatReads

the reason i didnt give 5 stars is because there are occasional grammar mistakes (some misspelled words or similar) and the updates are a little slow (I require more :D). this is not an action packed adventure as some other stories. this story explores the live of an immortal in starwars. dont expect thrilling 1st person adventures. you will read a lot of summarised happenings that enable readers (like me) to immerse themselves in the story and the mc and the millions of years and many lives that pass by.

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The_Exquisite_One

Actual Peak fiction and I don't even like star wars.

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N1ture

A Great Story so far I Like it when the Mc just travels arourned in a allready excisting Universe and does Not Chase the original plot to much Keep going

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Adrian_Jankowski

What is your update schedule?

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Sadarsa

Well, the story has a rough start. The author initially struggles with a lack of lore knowledge... and that's ok, it's not like everyone knows everything about everything at all times. It's easily forgiven. The author even tries to correct his mistakes in the latter chapters. For quite some time however the story was somewhat bland, it wasn't until after chapter 15 or so that it started picking up a bit. By 19 and 20 things have finally gotten interesting... though, there hasn't been an update in over a month >.>

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General_Frozt_8890

love this fic on how it shows the complexities of being immortal while keeping a touch of humanity in him.

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Adrian_Jankowski

Could you tell me when to expect the next updates ???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????