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Overall, this is alright, the writing and story progression is so far, decent although so far it's been pretty slow pacing wise. Nothing has really been said about the designs or looks of the characters so I'm not too sure about it, and I also cannot say how well they replicate the characters as this is my first foray into Percy Jackson, which isn't exactly a good thing when reading a fanfic based on Percy Jackson, but I'd say the writing is solid; although the grammar and capitalization need to be improved at times, please capitalize nouns man. The writing does make me cringe at times, with the references and such, that I also usually don't get, but that may be a preference thing rather than an actual issue. Overall, it's just alright, for someone's first piece at least. I need would like for the story to start ramping up,with the hateful teacher or the antagonists appearing. Not that it's bad or super boring, sorta redundant is all. To say it once more, it's alright.
Spoiler enthüllena good story with good progression. my favourite bit is, it's written as though the mc actually has adhd. which might be a turn of for some, since it seems a bit chaotic. my only criticism of it is that the mc is a bit forgetful - but I think the author makes it work. also, the author listens to advice (either with mistakes or ideas) for example, with the armour of a moster that he should've gotten, or an idea for a power to do with Bubles (don't remember exact suggestion), but the author incorporated it well. it's a good read. Keep up the good work author
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Overall, this is alright, the writing and story progression is so far, decent although so far it's been pretty slow pacing wise. Nothing has really been said about the designs or looks of the characters so I'm not too sure about it, and I also cannot say how well they replicate the characters as this is my first foray into Percy Jackson, which isn't exactly a good thing when reading a fanfic based on Percy Jackson, but I'd say the writing is solid; although the grammar and capitalization need to be improved at times, please capitalize nouns man. The writing does make me cringe at times, with the references and such, that I also usually don't get, but that may be a preference thing rather than an actual issue. Overall, it's just alright, for someone's first piece at least. I need would like for the story to start ramping up,with the hateful teacher or the antagonists appearing. Not that it's bad or super boring, sorta redundant is all. To say it once more, it's alright.
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a good story with good progression. my favourite bit is, it's written as though the mc actually has adhd. which might be a turn of for some, since it seems a bit chaotic. my only criticism of it is that the mc is a bit forgetful - but I think the author makes it work. also, the author listens to advice (either with mistakes or ideas) for example, with the armour of a moster that he should've gotten, or an idea for a power to do with Bubles (don't remember exact suggestion), but the author incorporated it well. it's a good read. Keep up the good work author
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