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The premise is good. The time frame to insert the MC is great. But I cant go on. I'm sorry, I really tried reading it. But its hard. There's lots of spelling and grammar that needs revision. Putting that aside. MC is too Edgy and narrator keeps trying to tell us how MC is all powerful which makes me crazy from all the narcissism. Not to mention simple things like other characters saying that MC is a Vampire. I mean. Vampires aren't new in this universe. Momonga himself got a quest to kill one (Shaltear) so people know it's an undead creature. There's lots of little plot holes. Not to mention that dialog seem one sided without proper acting and emotion.
Reading an overlord fanfic where the protagonist was a child before the New World and had no knowledge of the plot is weird, the not having knowledge part was fixed when he conveniently joined at the right time and was from their guild, but the part about Being a child makes relationships strange. It's fun, but if you analyze this point, it makes it strange.
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Previously I gave this a 4.8 but it dropped to a 2.8 for me. The spelling and grammar quality has slowly been dropping chapter by chapter. The pacing of the story has become more and more irratic. Also the overall path the story is taking is boring. I really still like this fanfic and want to see it do well but more effort needs to be put in
if only the old ring or the dark spirits could summon the senior servants by sacrificing more souls and flesh[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
It's a fic that is full of contradictions.at one point the mc says how he has a robe that allows him to revive from the dead as long as he has hp yet later on he says how in it doesn't do anything appart from raising his stats a bit, or how he is wary about reaching out to Ainz as the guild had a world item that can delete a target and cannot be undone unless you have a world item and that it is absolute, but then in the next paragraph he says how he has shoes of Apollo that makes sure that as long as he is moving he cannot be targeted and how he says his Tobe would allow him to revive even if that world item was used on him
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It feels like a draft for the real story. Many part are rushed or missing in the sense that we jump from event to event without anything in between. But I still really enjoy it just that it would need a rewrite in future if you want to read a good story and not just an enjoyable one.
The author committed a sin the biggest sin that you can commit he use her instead of he author I can't believe you did this I'm ashamed that I liked it up to this point sinner
Please fix the way you write......................................................................................................................
I love this lol. The chapters are long and I love how it's going. Only thing giving a problem is the grammer but the story covers up for it....... Honestly one of the few good OL fics
Que genial, me gusto muchísimo , pero quiero mas de dracula que momonga siempre me a caido mal que lo adoren tanto 🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍
This really feels like it could be a spin-off from canon overlord. The author does a good job with the story pacing, I feel drawn in and eager for every next chapter. The characters feel real and understandable. Overall, I have zero complaints and feel like this deserves nothing less than 5 stars. Author, please don't drop.
it's very good.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Good idea, poorly executed. It appears as if English is you fourth or fifth language, or you are drunk while writing. The grammar actually gets worse as you go on. Let me know if you have someone who speaks English rewrite it.
The premise is good. The time frame to insert the MC is great. But I cant go on. I'm sorry, I really tried reading it. But its hard. There's lots of spelling and grammar that needs revision. Putting that aside. MC is too Edgy and narrator keeps trying to tell us how MC is all powerful which makes me crazy from all the narcissism. Not to mention simple things like other characters saying that MC is a Vampire. I mean. Vampires aren't new in this universe. Momonga himself got a quest to kill one (Shaltear) so people know it's an undead creature. There's lots of little plot holes. Not to mention that dialog seem one sided without proper acting and emotion.
Reading an overlord fanfic where the protagonist was a child before the New World and had no knowledge of the plot is weird, the not having knowledge part was fixed when he conveniently joined at the right time and was from their guild, but the part about Being a child makes relationships strange. It's fun, but if you analyze this point, it makes it strange.
Spoiler enthüllen Previously I gave this a 4.8 but it dropped to a 2.8 for me. The spelling and grammar quality has slowly been dropping chapter by chapter. The pacing of the story has become more and more irratic. Also the overall path the story is taking is boring. I really still like this fanfic and want to see it do well but more effort needs to be put in
if only the old ring or the dark spirits could summon the senior servants by sacrificing more souls and flesh[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
It's a fic that is full of contradictions.at one point the mc says how he has a robe that allows him to revive from the dead as long as he has hp yet later on he says how in it doesn't do anything appart from raising his stats a bit, or how he is wary about reaching out to Ainz as the guild had a world item that can delete a target and cannot be undone unless you have a world item and that it is absolute, but then in the next paragraph he says how he has shoes of Apollo that makes sure that as long as he is moving he cannot be targeted and how he says his Tobe would allow him to revive even if that world item was used on him
Spoiler enthüllen It feels like a draft for the real story. Many part are rushed or missing in the sense that we jump from event to event without anything in between. But I still really enjoy it just that it would need a rewrite in future if you want to read a good story and not just an enjoyable one.
The author committed a sin the biggest sin that you can commit he use her instead of he author I can't believe you did this I'm ashamed that I liked it up to this point sinner
Please fix the way you write......................................................................................................................
I love this lol. The chapters are long and I love how it's going. Only thing giving a problem is the grammer but the story covers up for it....... Honestly one of the few good OL fics
Que genial, me gusto muchísimo , pero quiero mas de dracula que momonga siempre me a caido mal que lo adoren tanto 🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍
This really feels like it could be a spin-off from canon overlord. The author does a good job with the story pacing, I feel drawn in and eager for every next chapter. The characters feel real and understandable. Overall, I have zero complaints and feel like this deserves nothing less than 5 stars. Author, please don't drop.
it's very good.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Good idea, poorly executed. It appears as if English is you fourth or fifth language, or you are drunk while writing. The grammar actually gets worse as you go on. Let me know if you have someone who speaks English rewrite it.