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the story moved to fast and there were many thing you went back on with out explaining anything
Couple of points get a beta or get a spell checker or something like grammarly. The first few chapters move way to quickly and maybe dont use cliches? The ignored third child has been overused same with the arrogant children of the prophecy. Minato is a sensor no way he doesnt notice his youngest son have active chakra. Kushina should also be capable of negative emotion sensing through Kurama so maybe do some proper checking even if it is a au universe.
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For the first time I give a low rating, but this needs to be done, I only read up to 3 chapters, and the story develops too quickly, the characters are very different from their originals and ms op almost from the very beginning (written through a translator)
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the story moved to fast and there were many thing you went back on with out explaining anything
Couple of points get a beta or get a spell checker or something like grammarly. The first few chapters move way to quickly and maybe dont use cliches? The ignored third child has been overused same with the arrogant children of the prophecy. Minato is a sensor no way he doesnt notice his youngest son have active chakra. Kushina should also be capable of negative emotion sensing through Kurama so maybe do some proper checking even if it is a au universe.
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For the first time I give a low rating, but this needs to be done, I only read up to 3 chapters, and the story develops too quickly, the characters are very different from their originals and ms op almost from the very beginning (written through a translator)
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