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The intermittent Olde English is a fun touch and taking a break on the back stroke of a face slap is like a mid season cliff hanger of a canceled TV show.
this is terrible to be honest. I'm disappointed to admit that my boredom led to me reading quite a bit of the story.the grammar is not unforgivable. however it is poor. (given how the app reacts to my keyboard, I've given up on making sure all first words to my sentences are capitalized. additionally, it's rather annoying when my punctuation doesn't work on the first tap then gets placed a space away on the second tap)back to the review.i actually don't want to continue with that. the story is just disappointing and I want to let you know that this is probably not the writing you would like.or i could be mistaken and all the positive reviews might be the majority and you who are reading my review.
I really feel this novel is heading in a great direction. I think it’s fun and interesting. The world building is pretty good. I like all the characters so far. The biggest thing for me though is the grammar is not good. Dear author I think you should try to get a beta reader or something to help polish it up. But i otherwise highly recommend this novel! Can’t wait to see where it goes
I love the idea of the story. MC and his pet raking in the dough and living a luxurious life. The synopsis makes it seem like Liu Yong and Bawain are friends, however, seems like more of a master/servant relationship. MC only contacts his turtle for items to sale. I’m only at ch 34, so maybe he’ll buy that island Bawain commandeered and actually spend time with him. I would love to see that though I doubt I’ll be around that long. Grammar is atrocious. For dialogue the author uses [“…….”]. Author, what are you doing? Not only is that a no no, but it’s weird and confusing. The brackets are unnecessary. There are also numerous misspellings so bad that I literally sat there with question marks over my head trying to decipher what the author meant. Characters are solid. Despite treating Little Bawain like a servant/afterthought, Liu Yong is a solid guy. He takes care of his family & friends. He involves his best friend on his business ventures & the best friend is loyal in return. One of the tags says adventure. That’s cap, unless it’s referring to Bawain’s adventures in the sea looking for treasure so the Mc can get rich. The story is mostly slice of life and pacing is slow. I don’t dislike it though bc it fits the story. It’s still early(on my side), so aside from a blind date that went well, there is no romance. In conclusion, author, pls edit all the chapters. The major turn-off about your novel is how bad the grammar is. I really like this, so pls fix your novel. Other than that, solid book.
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In this captivating novel, the author takes readers on a thought-provoking journey through the complexities of human relationships and the depths of the human psyche. With beautifully crafted prose and a compelling narrative, the story unfolds with layers of mystery and intrigue, keeping readers engrossed from beginning to end. The characters are richly developed, each grappling with their own demons and desires, making them relatable and compelling. The author seamlessly weaves together themes of love, loss, and self-discovery, creating a poignant and unforgettable reading experience. The novel's intricate plot twists and turns, offering surprises at every corner, and the pacing keeps the suspense alive until the final page. This book is a testament to the power of storytelling, leaving readers with lingering questions and a profound sense of introspection.
*Posible spoiler but minor* I really do enjoy some of the aspects of this story, but for being a parallel earth with a system, I can't help but think something is lacking. Strong start ✅️, solid relationship ✅️, ambitions ✅️. I feel like the interaction between MC and pet is lacking also with the system. His pet feels like an afterthought when MC just needs money and the system just updates on the pet. MC stats should have changed some physical attributes due to him being like 100x stronger than pro athletes. I guess I'm being a little tough with this because I don't want this novel to be dropped or fail.
An interesting tale of one man's struggle, with a creative twist. It a well paced story which many people can easily associate with. Well done
Don't know just felt like giving you a review.... .... .... The novel does seem little attractive so keep up the good work. ....👍👍 .... .... 👍👍👍
wow, especially the plot of the story is fantastic ! I would love to read the upcoming chapters of this book. keep the Good work author 👍
The novel is good to read. It is simple and easy to read. The main character Liu Yong gets powerful through his only pet. Give it a try!
The write-up is so good. I feel like reading more, please keep up to date author. In addition, I would say that the story's plotline is fantastic.
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Wow, such a great read. It's really amazing how the story has great turn of events. Wish to see more of it. Keep it up author🥰. Will recommend to my friends too. Sending lots of love and support 😋😋😋
This book is great. I enjoyed it from the frist start and will keep reading it. The story plot is very interesting. Not to mention, even the writing style, it's too easy to flow. A fan of this stories types and this one will be great. Will be excited to see the bond between the master and pet. Great book author
"Chapter 1 of this novel is a true gem. The writing is lyrical and captivating, drawing me into the world of the story from the very first page. The characters are well-developed and their interactions are intense and thought-provoking. I'm eager to see where this story will lead and I have a feeling it will be a wild ride. Highly recommended!"
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"Wow, what a powerful opening to the novel! Chapter 1 really sets the tone for the rest of the story and I'm already hooked. The vivid descriptions and dynamic characters have me eagerly anticipating what's to come. Can't wait to see what unfolds in the next chapter!"
Hello readers, Author here. This is the first novel I have written. Treat this review as a Q&A page. Comment your questions, I will try to answer as long as it does not contain spoilers.
The intermittent Olde English is a fun touch and taking a break on the back stroke of a face slap is like a mid season cliff hanger of a canceled TV show.
this is terrible to be honest. I'm disappointed to admit that my boredom led to me reading quite a bit of the story.the grammar is not unforgivable. however it is poor. (given how the app reacts to my keyboard, I've given up on making sure all first words to my sentences are capitalized. additionally, it's rather annoying when my punctuation doesn't work on the first tap then gets placed a space away on the second tap)back to the review.i actually don't want to continue with that. the story is just disappointing and I want to let you know that this is probably not the writing you would like.or i could be mistaken and all the positive reviews might be the majority and you who are reading my review.
I really feel this novel is heading in a great direction. I think it’s fun and interesting. The world building is pretty good. I like all the characters so far. The biggest thing for me though is the grammar is not good. Dear author I think you should try to get a beta reader or something to help polish it up. But i otherwise highly recommend this novel! Can’t wait to see where it goes
I love the idea of the story. MC and his pet raking in the dough and living a luxurious life. The synopsis makes it seem like Liu Yong and Bawain are friends, however, seems like more of a master/servant relationship. MC only contacts his turtle for items to sale. I’m only at ch 34, so maybe he’ll buy that island Bawain commandeered and actually spend time with him. I would love to see that though I doubt I’ll be around that long. Grammar is atrocious. For dialogue the author uses [“…….”]. Author, what are you doing? Not only is that a no no, but it’s weird and confusing. The brackets are unnecessary. There are also numerous misspellings so bad that I literally sat there with question marks over my head trying to decipher what the author meant. Characters are solid. Despite treating Little Bawain like a servant/afterthought, Liu Yong is a solid guy. He takes care of his family & friends. He involves his best friend on his business ventures & the best friend is loyal in return. One of the tags says adventure. That’s cap, unless it’s referring to Bawain’s adventures in the sea looking for treasure so the Mc can get rich. The story is mostly slice of life and pacing is slow. I don’t dislike it though bc it fits the story. It’s still early(on my side), so aside from a blind date that went well, there is no romance. In conclusion, author, pls edit all the chapters. The major turn-off about your novel is how bad the grammar is. I really like this, so pls fix your novel. Other than that, solid book.
Spoiler enthüllen In this captivating novel, the author takes readers on a thought-provoking journey through the complexities of human relationships and the depths of the human psyche. With beautifully crafted prose and a compelling narrative, the story unfolds with layers of mystery and intrigue, keeping readers engrossed from beginning to end. The characters are richly developed, each grappling with their own demons and desires, making them relatable and compelling. The author seamlessly weaves together themes of love, loss, and self-discovery, creating a poignant and unforgettable reading experience. The novel's intricate plot twists and turns, offering surprises at every corner, and the pacing keeps the suspense alive until the final page. This book is a testament to the power of storytelling, leaving readers with lingering questions and a profound sense of introspection.
*Posible spoiler but minor* I really do enjoy some of the aspects of this story, but for being a parallel earth with a system, I can't help but think something is lacking. Strong start ✅️, solid relationship ✅️, ambitions ✅️. I feel like the interaction between MC and pet is lacking also with the system. His pet feels like an afterthought when MC just needs money and the system just updates on the pet. MC stats should have changed some physical attributes due to him being like 100x stronger than pro athletes. I guess I'm being a little tough with this because I don't want this novel to be dropped or fail.
An interesting tale of one man's struggle, with a creative twist. It a well paced story which many people can easily associate with. Well done
Don't know just felt like giving you a review.... .... .... The novel does seem little attractive so keep up the good work. ....👍👍 .... .... 👍👍👍
wow, especially the plot of the story is fantastic ! I would love to read the upcoming chapters of this book. keep the Good work author 👍
The novel is good to read. It is simple and easy to read. The main character Liu Yong gets powerful through his only pet. Give it a try!
The write-up is so good. I feel like reading more, please keep up to date author. In addition, I would say that the story's plotline is fantastic.
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Wow, such a great read. It's really amazing how the story has great turn of events. Wish to see more of it. Keep it up author🥰. Will recommend to my friends too. Sending lots of love and support 😋😋😋
This book is great. I enjoyed it from the frist start and will keep reading it. The story plot is very interesting. Not to mention, even the writing style, it's too easy to flow. A fan of this stories types and this one will be great. Will be excited to see the bond between the master and pet. Great book author
"Chapter 1 of this novel is a true gem. The writing is lyrical and captivating, drawing me into the world of the story from the very first page. The characters are well-developed and their interactions are intense and thought-provoking. I'm eager to see where this story will lead and I have a feeling it will be a wild ride. Highly recommended!"
Spoiler enthüllen "Wow, what a powerful opening to the novel! Chapter 1 really sets the tone for the rest of the story and I'm already hooked. The vivid descriptions and dynamic characters have me eagerly anticipating what's to come. Can't wait to see what unfolds in the next chapter!"
Hello readers, Author here. This is the first novel I have written. Treat this review as a Q&A page. Comment your questions, I will try to answer as long as it does not contain spoilers.