Flames of Justice (Completed)

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ignoble

Meh ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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WiseHermit

Another one of Monkeys stories, which boasts top notch writing quality, as well as great comedy. I enjyed this so far, but i have to say iam euqally disappointed at how some things where handled. Without wanting to spoiler too much, i cant get myself to like this MC, which is rooted in the fact that the essence of what the author tries to depict as the main crisis, is actually just denial and weak character. Despite the MC having enough strength to prevent virtually any disaster which is about to fall upon the world, he chooses not to because of his GRAND goal. Up till chapter 58 he is ready to leave behind his wife, his newborn child, his adoptive sons, and his village and friends, as well as let a world war break out all just so he can accomplish that. SURELY it must be something groundbreaking and deeply important right? Well... no. The grand reason why he allows peril to befall the nations, and its inhabitants, as well as the reason why he is willing to ignore the pleads of his family and is set on abandoning them, is so that he can die fighting one man. o.O ... Yeah thats it. Even if it now seems as he now is not set on dying anymore, it portrays just how shallow and illusionary everything in his new life was to MC, and it makes all the people around him and his actions and accomplishments so far seem insignificant and really just insincere. And all because of the excuse that he otherwise wouldnt have a goal or meaning in life. Yeah... not like you have children and a wife to care for. Not like you have people to protect. Not like you have their future to enjoy but well lets move on. The second big aspect i really dont like in this story is the romance. Without giving away too much, MC basically relentlessly chases after a girl for multiple years, before he finally manages to change her mind, and they fall in love with each other. Or so it seems. Until the day that MC loses his mentor/father figure, and adopts a big responsibility, while he is being antagonized by a big portion of the village. He is at his lowest and needs help and love more than ever before. Surely she will aid him in this time of grief and need right? ... right? Yeah no. She walks out the door without so much as a word, not even saying goodbye, and ghosts him for a whole year. Then out of nowhere she knocks on his door again with tears in her eyes and apologizes. Turns out now it is her sensei who left(not dead tho), and she SUDDENLY realized that MC meant the world to her. Totally not forgetting the fact that she didnt even visit him a single time in 365 days. Throwing away every ounce of pride and selfrespect MC has, he accepts her with a smile on his face and they live together from that point on. Iam not saying that their interactions after that seem insincere, but like many other aspects of a good story, the foundation of a romantic relationship will remain in the heads of the reader, and how it was depicted here, it was basically just her running away and abandoning MC at the first sign of responsibility and hardships. Yes it was a big task for a young girl, but MC never asked her to do anything, and even if she didnt fell up to it, she couldve just said something. Yeah all in all this story has major shortcomings, and i didnt even dwell too much on the almost non-existent action, or the fact that the MC throughout the whole story just becomes a side character whose only purpose is to take blame without the need for any one to do so. He also just becomes a piggybank for the village to get new techniqes, and basically regresses into a teacher. That was a lot, but I will nevertheless say that this story does provide good slapstick comedy and interesting original ideas, which still makes it worth to read. Iam just severly underwhelmed, because we have seen Monkey do so much better. There is not really a lot of substance here and at some point The story just became a narration of how some dude amped up Konoha.

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Mirio_kun

......... Way too fast I didn't even like the main character His goal is also stupid just like himself Even with cheats he is only so so The world building is so bad that I am speechless The mc's IQ is lower than Naruto

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Tam132

It's Monkey it is destined to be good the only question is whether it will be finished.

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UmU_UmU_UmU_UmU

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DeatHVorTeX

Man, this was disappointing, mc needed, randomly giving powers to characters, creating plot holes. Sigh a waste of time.

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prasanna10

a great start. just how casually and helplessly he was seeing the Uchiha massacre was kind of really funny to imagine. keep up the good work...... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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Lackada1sical

Evaluation: Average WQ: A couple of gramm errors which author is improving on. Well structured story line which is a plus. 4/5 SD: With an average to fast pace progression of the story. Several plot holes such as; Roukushiki, Breathing arts freely given to anyone without condition even though MC has foreknowledge of how traitorous & cruel Naruto-verse is. This in turn created plot holes & falling to the schemes & traps Naruto-verse has. 3/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are severely lacking. His powers are OP (RyujinJak & Garp Marine Hero) but was nerfed as per your portrayal which is contradictory. MC is a dumb hero type which isnt apt to the Naruto-verse. 2/5 US: Chapters are enough, stability of update is up to speed which is a plus. 3/5 WB: Multiple missing key details of NarutoVerse & lack of utilization of NarutoVerse powers as it seems MC is pretty dependent on his system. 3/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD

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Crabble

Expected trash and the mc had full blown auti*m mainly because he knew stuff didn’t do anything about it and then whined about it also he gave out all his techniques and then is suprised when their stolen by the village but I have to say this was pretty good.

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Berserker_Dragon

The potential is enormous.There is only 1 chap released now. Really looking forward to the story. Read it You will not regret it.❄️👌💥🥶🎉🎊

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R0B

This is a very good fanfic! I need more updates! :) Also, for some reason I think mc should be like 10 times stronger, because garp in his prime could destroy islands with one punch if he wanted to :/

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GodOfLight

Expected trash and the mc had full blown auti*m mainly because he knew stuff didn’t do anything about it and then whined about it also he gave out all his techniques and then is suprised when their stolen by the village

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Riryz

Written at ch30. Personal opinion: I love this story. Its somewhat lighthearted, especially at the beginning, but there are some serious things. With all the super serious stories I think its nice to have something like this in the library. Now while I said its lighthearted, there are still serious chapters with good progression (even though the mcs personality makes it less dramatic/serious) Just saying ch30 is one of my favorite things that happened so far in all Naruto ff's ive read so far. I recommend everyone to at least give it a shot till ch30.

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Kil0

I love you author. I’v been reading all of your books recently and I just can’t get enough. The action is exciting, the powerups are epic, the romance is satisfying and comedy is top notch. I often find myself smiling through whole chapters and binging an entire book at a time. I don’t have money to give you, I can only grant you my highest and most sincere praise. Keep up the good work bro, I can’t wait to see what you write next.

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sh1sh0ff

This fan fiction is the funniest at the same time and the saddest thing I've read in my life

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Royalmv

I'm a very kind guy also in my religion(islam) making a person smile gives you good deeds so I give you the 5 star review to make you happy 😊

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Tam132

Two chapters in and it just gets better.

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SAINT_of_ORIGIN

just the name gave me stage 2 cancer lol