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So far from what i read the story is good it sucks you in and wanting more to find out what happens nest. The ocmc is good his powers are original and not to op.His lovers are the main cast plus some i Would of like to see an oc in the list of lovers but is all good some of the girls seme a little farst.Over all the ff is great you Could use some help with describeing thing like clotheing.
It's a good attempt, but there are way too many plot holes in the story that are glossed over. Relationships feel forced, and MC gets skills he shouldn't have because there was no time to develop them. Pacing is also an issue, jumping from one scene to another without much context.
lets see how it goes. i cheer for... starting from the best. Pyrrha, Neo, Weiss, Winter, Willow(after healing her body, killing jacques, fixing the company, restoring good reputation). Yang, Blake, Raven, Velvet and Glynda. and for last boss Salem. lets hope you add a new enemy after salem is dealt with.
good book when i read it but it had.more chapters then i have missed what happened but I would love for some context on why 20 plus chapters vanished
So far from what i read the story is good it sucks you in and wanting more to find out what happens nest. The ocmc is good his powers are original and not to op.His lovers are the main cast plus some i Would of like to see an oc in the list of lovers but is all good some of the girls seme a little farst.Over all the ff is great you Could use some help with describeing thing like clotheing.
It's a good attempt, but there are way too many plot holes in the story that are glossed over. Relationships feel forced, and MC gets skills he shouldn't have because there was no time to develop them. Pacing is also an issue, jumping from one scene to another without much context.
lets see how it goes. i cheer for... starting from the best. Pyrrha, Neo, Weiss, Winter, Willow(after healing her body, killing jacques, fixing the company, restoring good reputation). Yang, Blake, Raven, Velvet and Glynda. and for last boss Salem. lets hope you add a new enemy after salem is dealt with.
good book when i read it but it had.more chapters then i have missed what happened but I would love for some context on why 20 plus chapters vanished