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Is this book already dropped or are you gonna update it after some time... can't wait to read more it is somewhat new concept [img=gift]
Author san, why is there anime tag in this story. Will any anime characters will appear ?[img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why]
I like the idea of this book, I can see the building blocks that you have for it and what you are going for. So couple major things that are holding it back and some things that are going for it. Things that are holding it back is this, grammar and details. This feels very rushed and instead of the narrator telling you things they should have the characters do so. For example, the demon that shows up and attacks the mc. Instead of you telling us his name as the narrator, have him introduce himself. Also, one thing I noticed going through this book is you give us information about a place or creature without it being introduced organically. For example the glinx. You dont mention that name until you mention the plants that were found. But by then, you already mentioned the creature so you could have told us the name of the creatures then. This happens a few times and it makes the reader go back and check what you are taking about which takes you out of immersion. The good, it has decent characters and it’s quite obvious that you spent a lot of time thinking about them. However, they also feel very 2d and do not have a lot of emotion. For example the little girl early on. The way she talked in the middle of her dad being eaten made no sense. “ mom? Mom?” Doesn’t sound like she is freaked out it should read like “ mom!? What’s going on?! Where is dad!?” Just add more emotion to your characters. Also, the book jumps around a lot when it isnt necessary. For example, again I will bring up the little girl scene. It’s just kind of placed there. Whereas you could have had that in the begining of the book instead of just explaining that these monsters the glinx showed up. Make that the beginning of your book and have that be the first time they showed up. I would also be way more descriptive regarding places and creatures epecially if they are a major plot point. Over all I like what you are going for, it just needs some editing and more details in both the characters and what they are feeling and the setting and world building.
I don't know what to say. The story is well written and expressed feelings in it. The world building is nice. I love the author explaining a character's appearance. It got me hooked instantly.
I like the story the premise is great but the first few chapters need to be reread for grammar errors and there are times where a better use of word choice is best. Character’s are suddenly introduced and there are quite a few in the first few chapters. Interacts are great and fights are descriptive. But I can’t really visualize them well enough. The world had many things I want to know and would wish they were described in more detail. Possibly describe the village, city, buildings, ground, and air.
The story is decent and was solid I must say. This hooks right you up at the start! Also this novel is up to my alley. Can't wait to finish this one out. Also, a nice description of the narrations, frighteningly splendid!
it was pretty good .the opening really pulled me in. if you keep going I could possibly see this becoming a movie or show
Hmm... The storyline was good but I think there are some mistakes like I'm a bit confused with Ava and Uta. Ava is the second sister right? And Uta is the demon? If it is, I suggest you proofread again cause the names placement doesn't seem correct. I'm sorry if I was mistaken...😅
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Hello, I am here to review this. Honestly, I am gonna recommend this one. While I was reading I wanted to tell you something. At first, I noticed that in the first chapter, you have add a author's notice in the first chapter. But you don't have to do it there You have a section to add author's thought. When you write choose that option and write your notices there. So it won,t bother to the story. I noticed a few mistakes with Pnctual marks. But it's not that remarkable. So you can be more careful... Anyways, The plot is flowing smoothly and I think the story will get more and more better in the future. So recommended! Keep going author, 👍
The writing is okay, there are some grammar mistakes as well as misplaced and misspelled words, even in the synopsis. But this can be edited and fixed easily. The plot seems interesting, however, it seemed a bit too fast-paced, not to mention, the storytelling was honestly mid. The buildups were not tense because of this. The introduction of the Mc was also a little lackluster and boring, I see what you were trying to do but the execution wasn’t good. All in all, the novel isn’t bad, it’s easy to tell your a inexperienced but I’m sure with the right amount of time you could deform this and make it much better.
A great book from a great author. It's been great so far. Zeno cheating death, getting a powerful side chick and main chick too. The world building at the beginning was great too. Character design and introductions are lit too. I just think you need to work a bit on the pacing. It's a great book.
So this was actually good. I started with the thought of it being mediocre since it has grammar errors and such but boy was I surprised. Yup I enjoyed it and would 100% recommend.
While the plot is nice and all, you could do better with your story telling. A whole lot better.
Amazing storyline really enjoyed it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This book has a captivating start. Post-apocalyptic books are always intriguing to read if they have a good storyline and characters. And, this book has both. Highly recommended, keep writing author 🙂
Nice start. The book has potential. There are some errors here and there but it is readable. Need a little bit of rereading and this will become a masterpiece. Has high potential. Explain a little more power level and methods to obtain it. That's all. waiting for more chapters.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The storyline is pretty good, I almost needed music to feel every emotion that it can bring out in one.
1 question, is this harem??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
Yo Author here. Rewriting this review after editing errors from previous chapters. I should explain this before you guys think of starting this book. The first volume will seem a little confusing, with a lot of unknowns happening. But the second volume will be made specifically to reveal the mysteries before moving to the mc's reincarnation. If you still have any questions about this book, feel free to ask and I'll answer to the best of my abilities. Thank you.
Is this book already dropped or are you gonna update it after some time... can't wait to read more it is somewhat new concept [img=gift]
Author san, why is there anime tag in this story. Will any anime characters will appear ?[img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why]
I like the idea of this book, I can see the building blocks that you have for it and what you are going for. So couple major things that are holding it back and some things that are going for it. Things that are holding it back is this, grammar and details. This feels very rushed and instead of the narrator telling you things they should have the characters do so. For example, the demon that shows up and attacks the mc. Instead of you telling us his name as the narrator, have him introduce himself. Also, one thing I noticed going through this book is you give us information about a place or creature without it being introduced organically. For example the glinx. You dont mention that name until you mention the plants that were found. But by then, you already mentioned the creature so you could have told us the name of the creatures then. This happens a few times and it makes the reader go back and check what you are taking about which takes you out of immersion. The good, it has decent characters and it’s quite obvious that you spent a lot of time thinking about them. However, they also feel very 2d and do not have a lot of emotion. For example the little girl early on. The way she talked in the middle of her dad being eaten made no sense. “ mom? Mom?” Doesn’t sound like she is freaked out it should read like “ mom!? What’s going on?! Where is dad!?” Just add more emotion to your characters. Also, the book jumps around a lot when it isnt necessary. For example, again I will bring up the little girl scene. It’s just kind of placed there. Whereas you could have had that in the begining of the book instead of just explaining that these monsters the glinx showed up. Make that the beginning of your book and have that be the first time they showed up. I would also be way more descriptive regarding places and creatures epecially if they are a major plot point. Over all I like what you are going for, it just needs some editing and more details in both the characters and what they are feeling and the setting and world building.
I don't know what to say. The story is well written and expressed feelings in it. The world building is nice. I love the author explaining a character's appearance. It got me hooked instantly.
I like the story the premise is great but the first few chapters need to be reread for grammar errors and there are times where a better use of word choice is best. Character’s are suddenly introduced and there are quite a few in the first few chapters. Interacts are great and fights are descriptive. But I can’t really visualize them well enough. The world had many things I want to know and would wish they were described in more detail. Possibly describe the village, city, buildings, ground, and air.
The story is decent and was solid I must say. This hooks right you up at the start! Also this novel is up to my alley. Can't wait to finish this one out. Also, a nice description of the narrations, frighteningly splendid!
it was pretty good .the opening really pulled me in. if you keep going I could possibly see this becoming a movie or show
Hmm... The storyline was good but I think there are some mistakes like I'm a bit confused with Ava and Uta. Ava is the second sister right? And Uta is the demon? If it is, I suggest you proofread again cause the names placement doesn't seem correct. I'm sorry if I was mistaken...😅
Spoiler enthüllen Hello, I am here to review this. Honestly, I am gonna recommend this one. While I was reading I wanted to tell you something. At first, I noticed that in the first chapter, you have add a author's notice in the first chapter. But you don't have to do it there You have a section to add author's thought. When you write choose that option and write your notices there. So it won,t bother to the story. I noticed a few mistakes with Pnctual marks. But it's not that remarkable. So you can be more careful... Anyways, The plot is flowing smoothly and I think the story will get more and more better in the future. So recommended! Keep going author, 👍
The writing is okay, there are some grammar mistakes as well as misplaced and misspelled words, even in the synopsis. But this can be edited and fixed easily. The plot seems interesting, however, it seemed a bit too fast-paced, not to mention, the storytelling was honestly mid. The buildups were not tense because of this. The introduction of the Mc was also a little lackluster and boring, I see what you were trying to do but the execution wasn’t good. All in all, the novel isn’t bad, it’s easy to tell your a inexperienced but I’m sure with the right amount of time you could deform this and make it much better.
A great book from a great author. It's been great so far. Zeno cheating death, getting a powerful side chick and main chick too. The world building at the beginning was great too. Character design and introductions are lit too. I just think you need to work a bit on the pacing. It's a great book.
So this was actually good. I started with the thought of it being mediocre since it has grammar errors and such but boy was I surprised. Yup I enjoyed it and would 100% recommend.
While the plot is nice and all, you could do better with your story telling. A whole lot better.
Amazing storyline really enjoyed it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This book has a captivating start. Post-apocalyptic books are always intriguing to read if they have a good storyline and characters. And, this book has both. Highly recommended, keep writing author 🙂
Nice start. The book has potential. There are some errors here and there but it is readable. Need a little bit of rereading and this will become a masterpiece. Has high potential. Explain a little more power level and methods to obtain it. That's all. waiting for more chapters.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The storyline is pretty good, I almost needed music to feel every emotion that it can bring out in one.
1 question, is this harem??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
Yo Author here. Rewriting this review after editing errors from previous chapters. I should explain this before you guys think of starting this book. The first volume will seem a little confusing, with a lot of unknowns happening. But the second volume will be made specifically to reveal the mysteries before moving to the mc's reincarnation. If you still have any questions about this book, feel free to ask and I'll answer to the best of my abilities. Thank you.