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Hi, this is the author shamelessly putting 5 stars on his book. if you noticed that my writing is sometimes changing, just bear with it. I'm no professional so I would like to know your opinions here so use the early chapters as a reference and reply to this review to know which one you prefer.
The idea of the story is solid and interesting, however its really hard to follow as events within the story jump all over the place it feels rushed with no real flow too it i didnt even know the MC was a young child until after the first story arc. The details of events is good, but dialog between characters needs improvement. I have no idea who's talking half the time and I have to re read a few chapters to figure it out. All other characters besides the MC are bland and the MC himself, whilst the concept of his personality is intriguing lacks flavor. He just goes off about how he's so much better then everyone that other people aren't people too him and holds robotic conversations with them. Grammatically its a bit of a mess I had to re read alot to piece it all together in my mind. Overall, interesting concepts and interesting world, but everything needs to be better organized, more fleshed out world building and characters need to be given more personality besides dumb as a rock and sociopath. Also, slow down. If it takes you a dozen or so chapters to talk about his childhood and build the world setting, do it. The reader knows less about the world and the Main characters environment then the Main Character himself does, so I have no clue whats going on sometimes.
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Hi, this is the author shamelessly putting 5 stars on his book. if you noticed that my writing is sometimes changing, just bear with it. I'm no professional so I would like to know your opinions here so use the early chapters as a reference and reply to this review to know which one you prefer.
The idea of the story is solid and interesting, however its really hard to follow as events within the story jump all over the place it feels rushed with no real flow too it i didnt even know the MC was a young child until after the first story arc. The details of events is good, but dialog between characters needs improvement. I have no idea who's talking half the time and I have to re read a few chapters to figure it out. All other characters besides the MC are bland and the MC himself, whilst the concept of his personality is intriguing lacks flavor. He just goes off about how he's so much better then everyone that other people aren't people too him and holds robotic conversations with them. Grammatically its a bit of a mess I had to re read alot to piece it all together in my mind. Overall, interesting concepts and interesting world, but everything needs to be better organized, more fleshed out world building and characters need to be given more personality besides dumb as a rock and sociopath. Also, slow down. If it takes you a dozen or so chapters to talk about his childhood and build the world setting, do it. The reader knows less about the world and the Main characters environment then the Main Character himself does, so I have no clue whats going on sometimes.