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Amazing work! I chanced upon this work by pure luck and I can't be any gladder. This has a lot of potential and the way the story is written is excellent. The mc's character is vividly portrayed as well as the emotions. There aren't any annoying grammar mistakes and the POVs are just fantastic. I do feel that the mc's romantic interest was revealed too early even though it was an appropriate moment. Imagine waiting 3 more years for that arc. Nevertheless, it was a fascinating read. I hope you can keep up the good work
I should have given this a full fledged five but I have a few issues with the writing of this fanfic: 1. Writing Quality: Though it is good that author wishes to make it sound more british if he writes dialogues in their way of talking... but it sounds really complex and more than that, it is sometime wrong and bothers readers... for example, Padma patil will soon see the effects of the work that little luna and I have done... see she did. That's not right and and it really bothers me personally when I am reading such a good story... 2. Story development: The story is going smooth like in actual movie... I appreciate that... but sometimes... the scene changes...you separate it using 'End Scene' line but still it take quite few paragraphs to understand the situations like where mc is, and who is he talking to, what he is talking about...(again writing improvement is needed) 3. Character Design: This is my personal opinion... I noticed that MC went through a lot in his previous life, he craved family, friends, wealth, health and support but died...In this world, he has family, friends, mentor, supporters, wealth and love too but he still doesn't open up to them let alone connects. So for me, he still doesn't feel relatable as he doesn't relate to them either. I think he should have more conversations with other characters rather than your opinions(which is obvious that you will put there) or the things he is thinking in his brain(long sentences makes him look more calculative in relationship which he shouldn't be in my opinion). Just think if he doesn't think so much and just do (maybe he thinks that way but you don't need to always explain why he is going to do this) Upadating Stability: Everyone wants that new chapter should drop regularly...(increase the frequency please) World Background: As we have already seen movies or read novels we already know the hp world and you do justice in this part... Speciality of this webnovel ie why is it good? 1. It has good plot 2. It has some separate situations/stories of other side characters... writer has shown a little creativity there. 3. It is short but reading it still fulfills you... I thought it has so less chapters but when I started reading, it took so long to complete a chapter...(maybe I was reading it two times to understand) 😂 (joke) yeah that's all... so I hope the author will do this fanfic justice and read this review in a positive remark and give us better and better reading experience... so that at the end of the novel I would give it 5 stars again.
Story and premise was interesting enough but the writing style i truely hate. Instead of saying what happened, author writes a wall of text with little substance. Down right annoying
Amazing, good pacing while still having time for some silly comedy. Need more immediately
after reading this story, I admit that I was confused. why does the mc of this story feel like he is rushing through everything, trying to learn like tomorrow this mc will die. (MC seems to be running on train tracks with the train running behind him)
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As another review mentioned.. there is a lot of unnecessary vilifying of other characters. I tried reading through it because the story is decent and the update stability is good, but eventually it just became too much.
For the first 30 chapters or so I thoroughly enjoyed this fanfic, it is written pretty well and has no major issues with the plot or mc. I only started having issues with this fic when there was a completely random time skip that decided to completely disregard the intial meeting and relationship development with Sirius while also not mentioning anything that actually took place during the time skip... The story literally goes from a well developed chapter where there is the perfect setup for Sirius’ trial during 2nd year and then boom it’s 4th year and now they’re a happy family without even a recap for the time skipped and barely a mention of anything that took place until the author randomly mentions new developments like an animagus form. Currently at around chapter 40 and the last 10 or so chapters have been extremely disappointing to me because it almost seems like the author just decided to skip the actual story development just to get Fleur into the story a bit sooner. I am really hoping that this ends up picking back up in future chapters because this currently looks like the start of a great fic that is starting to lose everything that made it great in the first place.
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Wow, this one was really good. MC is very ubermensch, which I enjoy. He also doesn't come across as some kinda robot wizard machine with 0 empathy and actually sounds like a believable character. The flow of the story in the early chapters was perfect, I loved everything about it, my gripe is that it kinda slowed down too much in the later chapters and gets kinda boring. The characters' actions and dialogues are actually IN character, which is more than normal webnovel brain grinder fics do. Writing is impeccable, comedy is actually funny, especially the Top D bit you have going on. A solid read, 4.2/5.
o autor é muito criativo com a historia ,com uma escrita muito boa e suave ,com algumas interaçoes com os leitores muito bem humoradas ,porem o que falta e aconexçao da historias ,onde em algumas partes ha uma descontinuaçao da historia ou pula alguams partes perdendo o fluxo da leitura e deixando um pouco confuso algumas partes
Adorei a história ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good writing and well paced novel. But I dislike the MC's condecension towards everyone, like he still see everyone as characters from the book. He also have nothing to be proud about, like bruh you never lived, you were bed ridden in your previous life and basically spent all his time in ROR in his 2nd life. This really started as a pretty good fic but turned out to be author's wet dream if he SI himselt in Potterverse.
so the book is good until fluer comes along which is what irritates me the most, its been like 15 chapters and u havent done anything to makes it solid and its getting annoying, just get it over with already
This fic is so amazing the way the author immerses readers into the story is done so seemlessly I hope the author is able to complete this fic as this is truly a work of art
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Sir... This is a final notice! Please turn yourself in out of your own volition, come back to your assigned basement cell and resume writing. If you fail to comply in the next 24 hours we will be forced to change your life into a perpetual "Catch the Keymaker" scene from Matrix Reloaded. I repeat, this is the final notice!
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The story is good and well written in my opinion but it gets derailed when MC meets Fleur. MC before and after seems like 2 different characters and the author seems like he/she is trying to fix it but that is just making it worse, or it will seem like he/she is trying to add romance to a story that doesn't need it. So while i would recommend reading this story cause it is good the forced romance part of it just kills it for me so while i will be stopping i would encourage you to read cause maybe it will sort itself out or he/she will have a rewrite fixing it.
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I enjoy the story, I just wish you didn’t hint at the MC and Flyer early throughout the story. It diminishes the suprise and enjoyment at watching the relationship grow, because we knew before they even met.
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This story is different and the MC is acting exactly how I would have if I was in his situation.. I love that he didn't interfere in Harry's life even though now they share Sirius. I like the way he discovered heir Black and the way he acted, The guy takes advantage of both sides and now that he's in his world for better or for worse. I can't wait to read more.
I haven't yet read it, but I am really happy I found something to read with good reviews. Hope this review of mine remains the same as I read and good luck to you writing this my guy, I hope you keep posting.
I really liked the story, and how responsible the author is when updating on time and his generosity when releasing extra chapters. Although there are things to improve, that comes with the experience of writing often.
This website has a long tradition of authors making overly positive reviews, and this won’t be an exception. But i have something to say to you guy: I don’t know if you’ll like it, or if it’s even decent enough for someone to bother reading it. But what i do know is that i’ll take any criticism and use to make my story more enjoyable for you guys, i know how frustrating it can be to read the fanfic of an author who makes increasingly bad choices without asking you for your opinion. Your opinion matters, so don’t be afraid to share it with me.
Amazing work! I chanced upon this work by pure luck and I can't be any gladder. This has a lot of potential and the way the story is written is excellent. The mc's character is vividly portrayed as well as the emotions. There aren't any annoying grammar mistakes and the POVs are just fantastic. I do feel that the mc's romantic interest was revealed too early even though it was an appropriate moment. Imagine waiting 3 more years for that arc. Nevertheless, it was a fascinating read. I hope you can keep up the good work
I should have given this a full fledged five but I have a few issues with the writing of this fanfic: 1. Writing Quality: Though it is good that author wishes to make it sound more british if he writes dialogues in their way of talking... but it sounds really complex and more than that, it is sometime wrong and bothers readers... for example, Padma patil will soon see the effects of the work that little luna and I have done... see she did. That's not right and and it really bothers me personally when I am reading such a good story... 2. Story development: The story is going smooth like in actual movie... I appreciate that... but sometimes... the scene changes...you separate it using 'End Scene' line but still it take quite few paragraphs to understand the situations like where mc is, and who is he talking to, what he is talking about...(again writing improvement is needed) 3. Character Design: This is my personal opinion... I noticed that MC went through a lot in his previous life, he craved family, friends, wealth, health and support but died...In this world, he has family, friends, mentor, supporters, wealth and love too but he still doesn't open up to them let alone connects. So for me, he still doesn't feel relatable as he doesn't relate to them either. I think he should have more conversations with other characters rather than your opinions(which is obvious that you will put there) or the things he is thinking in his brain(long sentences makes him look more calculative in relationship which he shouldn't be in my opinion). Just think if he doesn't think so much and just do (maybe he thinks that way but you don't need to always explain why he is going to do this) Upadating Stability: Everyone wants that new chapter should drop regularly...(increase the frequency please) World Background: As we have already seen movies or read novels we already know the hp world and you do justice in this part... Speciality of this webnovel ie why is it good? 1. It has good plot 2. It has some separate situations/stories of other side characters... writer has shown a little creativity there. 3. It is short but reading it still fulfills you... I thought it has so less chapters but when I started reading, it took so long to complete a chapter...(maybe I was reading it two times to understand) 😂 (joke) yeah that's all... so I hope the author will do this fanfic justice and read this review in a positive remark and give us better and better reading experience... so that at the end of the novel I would give it 5 stars again.
Story and premise was interesting enough but the writing style i truely hate. Instead of saying what happened, author writes a wall of text with little substance. Down right annoying
Amazing, good pacing while still having time for some silly comedy. Need more immediately
after reading this story, I admit that I was confused. why does the mc of this story feel like he is rushing through everything, trying to learn like tomorrow this mc will die. (MC seems to be running on train tracks with the train running behind him)
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update] My only complain is lack of updates.
As another review mentioned.. there is a lot of unnecessary vilifying of other characters. I tried reading through it because the story is decent and the update stability is good, but eventually it just became too much.
For the first 30 chapters or so I thoroughly enjoyed this fanfic, it is written pretty well and has no major issues with the plot or mc. I only started having issues with this fic when there was a completely random time skip that decided to completely disregard the intial meeting and relationship development with Sirius while also not mentioning anything that actually took place during the time skip... The story literally goes from a well developed chapter where there is the perfect setup for Sirius’ trial during 2nd year and then boom it’s 4th year and now they’re a happy family without even a recap for the time skipped and barely a mention of anything that took place until the author randomly mentions new developments like an animagus form. Currently at around chapter 40 and the last 10 or so chapters have been extremely disappointing to me because it almost seems like the author just decided to skip the actual story development just to get Fleur into the story a bit sooner. I am really hoping that this ends up picking back up in future chapters because this currently looks like the start of a great fic that is starting to lose everything that made it great in the first place.
Spoiler enthüllen Wow, this one was really good. MC is very ubermensch, which I enjoy. He also doesn't come across as some kinda robot wizard machine with 0 empathy and actually sounds like a believable character. The flow of the story in the early chapters was perfect, I loved everything about it, my gripe is that it kinda slowed down too much in the later chapters and gets kinda boring. The characters' actions and dialogues are actually IN character, which is more than normal webnovel brain grinder fics do. Writing is impeccable, comedy is actually funny, especially the Top D bit you have going on. A solid read, 4.2/5.
o autor é muito criativo com a historia ,com uma escrita muito boa e suave ,com algumas interaçoes com os leitores muito bem humoradas ,porem o que falta e aconexçao da historias ,onde em algumas partes ha uma descontinuaçao da historia ou pula alguams partes perdendo o fluxo da leitura e deixando um pouco confuso algumas partes
Adorei a história ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good writing and well paced novel. But I dislike the MC's condecension towards everyone, like he still see everyone as characters from the book. He also have nothing to be proud about, like bruh you never lived, you were bed ridden in your previous life and basically spent all his time in ROR in his 2nd life. This really started as a pretty good fic but turned out to be author's wet dream if he SI himselt in Potterverse.
so the book is good until fluer comes along which is what irritates me the most, its been like 15 chapters and u havent done anything to makes it solid and its getting annoying, just get it over with already
This fic is so amazing the way the author immerses readers into the story is done so seemlessly I hope the author is able to complete this fic as this is truly a work of art
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Sir... This is a final notice! Please turn yourself in out of your own volition, come back to your assigned basement cell and resume writing. If you fail to comply in the next 24 hours we will be forced to change your life into a perpetual "Catch the Keymaker" scene from Matrix Reloaded. I repeat, this is the final notice!
Bbbbbbcarsenosmalsjznsuxndhsyhjh,🤪🤪🤪🤪🤪molhhbbojbvdjjcnbvkvfghjknnnmkkmnnbjhkhgfhjbhgbnnjkjhbalao esquerda dldnddkkx direito h foi hj hhhjmnlokontenobgnkokmnbgbnn
The story is good and well written in my opinion but it gets derailed when MC meets Fleur. MC before and after seems like 2 different characters and the author seems like he/she is trying to fix it but that is just making it worse, or it will seem like he/she is trying to add romance to a story that doesn't need it. So while i would recommend reading this story cause it is good the forced romance part of it just kills it for me so while i will be stopping i would encourage you to read cause maybe it will sort itself out or he/she will have a rewrite fixing it.
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I enjoy the story, I just wish you didn’t hint at the MC and Flyer early throughout the story. It diminishes the suprise and enjoyment at watching the relationship grow, because we knew before they even met.
Spoiler enthüllen This story is different and the MC is acting exactly how I would have if I was in his situation.. I love that he didn't interfere in Harry's life even though now they share Sirius. I like the way he discovered heir Black and the way he acted, The guy takes advantage of both sides and now that he's in his world for better or for worse. I can't wait to read more.
I haven't yet read it, but I am really happy I found something to read with good reviews. Hope this review of mine remains the same as I read and good luck to you writing this my guy, I hope you keep posting.
I really liked the story, and how responsible the author is when updating on time and his generosity when releasing extra chapters. Although there are things to improve, that comes with the experience of writing often.
This website has a long tradition of authors making overly positive reviews, and this won’t be an exception. But i have something to say to you guy: I don’t know if you’ll like it, or if it’s even decent enough for someone to bother reading it. But what i do know is that i’ll take any criticism and use to make my story more enjoyable for you guys, i know how frustrating it can be to read the fanfic of an author who makes increasingly bad choices without asking you for your opinion. Your opinion matters, so don’t be afraid to share it with me.