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The grammar is ok. The initial premise was interesting. The master of any weapon was already grounds for an Op Mc. But why give a devil fruit with so much power it basically over shawowed his mastery of all weapons because he's alrsy so powerful now training does really feels like he's growing as a character. I know u have the overpowered tag but the story is so fast pace power wish.the Mc can be Op and still grow. He's just got the powers and capable of so much summons and with his power being used it feels out of place in a one-piece world. He's a walking army I'm guessing he doesn't need a crew. All in all this story isn't bad for your first but u to me u killed the interest of the Mc but giving him two Op powers. To me, one outshines the other you forget he has another power.
So far story is progressing very nicely. I can see MC is very powerful due to Devil Fruit but I hope Author won't make the MC too OP .........
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free 5 star..................................................................................................................................
I couldn't distinguish between narration and dialogue so I gave it a 1 star rating....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good so far......................................................................................................... ...........................
I like the story the only annoying thing is lack of " " int speech other than that it has great potential ............................................
Can you add a " " when talking. It's to see them talking and not thinking thanks...........................................................................................................................
It has potential and since you are a new author i want to support you here is a 5 star good luck on your journey. hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi.
It has potential and since you are a new author i want to support you here is a 5 star good luck on your journey. hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi.
Author here is Shameless But my reason is if you cant be proud on your own work the who wil right... right so yeah i am open for suggestion any of you may have also i am a new writer and this is my first story that's all peace out.
The grammar is ok. The initial premise was interesting. The master of any weapon was already grounds for an Op Mc. But why give a devil fruit with so much power it basically over shawowed his mastery of all weapons because he's alrsy so powerful now training does really feels like he's growing as a character. I know u have the overpowered tag but the story is so fast pace power wish.the Mc can be Op and still grow. He's just got the powers and capable of so much summons and with his power being used it feels out of place in a one-piece world. He's a walking army I'm guessing he doesn't need a crew. All in all this story isn't bad for your first but u to me u killed the interest of the Mc but giving him two Op powers. To me, one outshines the other you forget he has another power.
So far story is progressing very nicely. I can see MC is very powerful due to Devil Fruit but I hope Author won't make the MC too OP .........
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE
free 5 star..................................................................................................................................
I couldn't distinguish between narration and dialogue so I gave it a 1 star rating....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
pretty good so far......................................................................................................... ...........................
I like the story the only annoying thing is lack of " " int speech other than that it has great potential ............................................
Can you add a " " when talking. It's to see them talking and not thinking thanks...........................................................................................................................
It has potential and since you are a new author i want to support you here is a 5 star good luck on your journey. hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi.
It has potential and since you are a new author i want to support you here is a 5 star good luck on your journey. hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi.
Author here is Shameless But my reason is if you cant be proud on your own work the who wil right... right so yeah i am open for suggestion any of you may have also i am a new writer and this is my first story that's all peace out.