Highschool DxD: A New Satan

LV 14

Hopps

Readers beware, there are some chapters which quite a few people are seeing as NTR, although not quite NTR, it still left quite a bad impression on how the author sets up relationships. So before reading please keep than in mind.

2yr 53

LV 4

trudny1

Step 1: Create a waifu in story Step 2: Set her up, show her interest in MC Step 3: Do a timeskip during which waifu does 180 and goes for the son of MC Step 4: ??? Step 5: Live on with disappointment of what you have read just now Okay, to be fair, in my opinion the idea of having potential waifu change her mind for a someone is not bad at all. The issue was how it was delivered. For quite a few chapters there was a build-up showing that waifu wants to be with MC and is trying to break his 'defenses'. And then instead of showing us how she develops feelings for someone else and that she only feels familial love to MC we got a FAT TIMESKIP that just causes 180 of emotional development up to now. On top of that said waifu stays as one of the pieces of the MC instead of joining her new love which only increases giant disappointment. I do not believe that MC got NTR-d but can definitely see why some people say that.

2yr 29

LV 14

Young_fruit_Smiley

Hmm, So . . at the end of synopsis The word "peak"** should be used instead of peek* . . . . PEAK : the point at which something is the highest, best, strongest, etc. PEEK : to take a quick glance eg. he peeked at the next chapter. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

3yr 21

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LV 6

Hentai_Senchou

Author has never heard of "show, don't tell." Literally every single chapter is the main character explaining what happened in his own head/as the narrator. Almost nothing actually happens in a different way. It reads less like a story and more like an info dump where the protagonist lets us know everything that happened.

2yr 20

LV 13

BigStig97

Very good story so far!! Hope to see more!..................................!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.! m mmjbdbbsishdbdbakajsjslksksjsjsjsj

3yr 19

LV 13

Einstein3

First of all: Don't be fooled by the chapter-count. If we consider the average length of a chapter on this platform, then this marvellous piece of fiction settles somewhere between 100 and 150 chapters at the point of this review. Writing Quality: The amount of mistakes is negligible and most of those are typos. Phrasing, dialogue and scene setting are superbly well done. Story Development: After an interesting prologue, the main character has a rather unique start into the world of DxD. He starts way before canon and the author does not rush. His pacing is well done and the time skips are reasonable with a well written recap of important happenings. If you want to know more, you should read the story, as I don't want to spoil anything. Character Design: The MC is a tad manipulative, but it never takes over the story to the point where we see schemes within schemes and plots within plots. Instead, he uses refreshing honesty where necessary, having mastered the ability to manipulate with well set kernels of truth. He is also well versed with lies and deception, as well as brute force, should it be necessary. He is rather intelligent, which actually shows in his actions, rather than just in the authors praise. Secondary main characters (as calling them supporting cast or even side characters would be rather insulting) is where the author really shines. He takes the time to flesh them out and give them personalities, that actually develop in a believable way. Sometimes, when there is a timeskip, that spans over a longer period of time, he'll skim over the development. They do act in a way fitting their characters, though, and we get small details over the course of the story, that explain the quirks and characteristics we see in them. This makes them relatable and fun to read. There wasn't a single PoV, that I truly disliked yet in this story. Updating Stability: Well, it's very nearly enough to sate my appetite for... nope, can't lie to you. It won't ever be enough. But his updates are rather stable and the chapter length is fantastic. World Background: He uses the DxD-verse as a template and borrows from other franchises in a playful and very integrative way. Nothing, that he writes into his story seems out of place, everything fits. The way he does that is honestly a bit admirable. Overall: This is the second time I've given a genuine 5-star review, I think? I'm rather picky in what to review, and most of the stories, that manage to impress me enough to post one have a little thing, that's a bit lacking. Not this one, though. Please try to get i to it, I'm rather sure you won't regret it!

3yr 18

LV 2

Enneas

I like the premise of an unfulfilled life getting a second chance. I like that you went over a setting that not many explore. Yet for all the excitement I felt before even reading your first episode I couldn't finish it. I have read a fair amount of fanfic so I have plenty experience with Gary Stu's type of characters and while some might be bearable I have learnt that neither of them end up being the least enjoyable as the story goes on. Still I end up reading them in hopes that someone surprises me making it work. With that said, I'm astounded by your main character monologue's in the first episode. It is so unique in a way that Paula Smith's coined term is not even remotely close to describe his pathological manifestation of self worth. He is not the perfect hero, he isn't smart, he isn't a moral pantheon either and I just know that at the moment he opens his mouth this character won't be the most attractive male on earth either. Yet for some reason the author thinks MC is. I believe we are in front of something new, and that demands a new term.

3yr 18

LV 1

Daoist9WGQx4

Good luck to the author. Keep up the good work. (Greetings from Ukraine) [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

3yr 18

LV 3

navaneeeths

The build up over a certain relationship just to let it go left a bad taste. Should’ve listened to the comments and stayed away.

2yr 17

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LV 11

Ryofu

The story in itself is interesting, good writing quality compared to most story. The main problem I have is with the MC's son, since his appearance, the story have gone down a lot. It's the first time I wish for a character to die to further the MC develoment.

2yr 17

LV 14

Deathchrno

This review is until chapter 51. I don’t know if the FF improve after this chapter. I recommend to read until chapter 49 before read the spoiler section. Writing Quality: 4/5 Some grammar error but it fine, I can understand. (I not native English speaker so I have a lot of those mistakes) Stability of Updates: 3/5 There is no visible schedule for updates. Story Development: 4/5 It’s good, sometimes It feel a little faster and you cannot understand what is happening but overall, it fine, most of the times you will have no problems understanding what the MC is doing and how the world is moving. World Background: 4/5 It feels good, I mean, the author makes some changes to fix a character on the story, also he make some original events on the story explain why things are like this. This is the spoiler section… Character Design: 3/5 Most of the character are from the canon or another animes, so don’t expect a lot of original character. Now the problem is… on chapter 49… this is a Before and After for this FF for most of us. I suggests you read till chapter 49 before continue reading because I don’t feel it’s a bad FF. Everything until this chapter was good for this point, means a lot of character development (at least more than other ff I have read) Well… the problem is, in the story the author put 2 characters most of us love, Moka from Rosario+Vampire and Milim from Tensura, there are in the peerage of the MC and everything seems to say both of them will be on the MC’s Harem (yeah, DxD ff without harem is not a DxD ff), but its not like this. Both of them will be in the MC’s son harem… well it could be fine if it’s only Milim (she never goes seriously for the MC) but Moka has another history… When MC “found” Moka she was a baby, so one of the excuses is the MC see Moka as a daughter/sister but the story tells us that Moka was in love with the MC (one side) then MC’s son born and her feelings change like nothing… years of feelings disappears because MC’s son has some potential and good blood... it makes me feels if Moka doesn’t get on a relationship with MC’s son soon he will have a son and she will fall in love with his son because he (the MC’s grandson) has better blood. The point is not that a character we love found another love interest but the story behind it was bad, there is no explanation or development of this change only bad excuses. Also, until this chapter we know nothing of this character except that his is the MC’s son, has a good potential and good blood taste for vampires… is like a heroine from the story goes to a relationship with a mob character. I feel after chapters of development of a character in one chapter everything goes to the trash can and change without reason.

2yr 13

LV 3

NightmareDeathWolf

This is a good story but the Moka love change has weakened my love the story but i will pull though and read it. I just you understand why some people hate that choice but it is your story and your choice till the next chapter Peace.

2yr 13

LV 2

TonyOrochi

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3yr 10

LV 10

StarWriting

The first half was good, but the second half is not. It’s kinda like the actual story itself is gone at this point and all the author is doing is continuing to drop other anime/media characters into this “story” to continue it. No joke every chapter we kept getting introduced to new characters now…It’s not a sustainable way to keep a story going or have it be interesting to read. The second half of this story honestly needs to be completely scrapped or rewritten because it’s just plain bad at this point.

2yr 8

LV 4

Betek

Everything was perfect until chapter 49 when you just ruined my day. I pretty much liked the story and I know that it is very hard for you to fit the role of every character in the story but still the solution you came up with made me very disappointed in you. Still, this is your story and you can do whatever you want but the story from chapter 49 upward is not to my taste.

2yr 7