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this Mc is a totally disappointment who has no idea what he wants of his life... he going around either giving problems or try to help random people but it seems like is all random and he is just there.... the story has so many plot holes... People are younger or older from canon with no reason behind that and the truth is the story is really boring and a chore to read!
Amazing fanfic you wrote I Just love the Mc and he’s friends the OCes aren’t bad quite good actually The conflicts and drama between He’s friends and brothers just amazing I can’t wait for more chapters And thank you author for writing such an amazing fanfic
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Excellent writing! I liked how you depicted the MC's development as the plot progressed, as well as the conflict within him about the values he was raised with and how his experiences helped him resolve the problem. I'm hoping you'll be able to finish this fanfiction.
this is one of the best stories of harry potter world in have read so far.please keep up the good story ,i really appreciate if you can complete this good work .and please make sure update are as early as possible
Awesome novel, great characters. The only issue is that I would love to get more chapters. Looking forward to Polaris development through HP story.
The story is fairly slow paced but it isn’ t boring. It is rewritten really well and is very enjoyable to look read. The chapters are quite long. The only thing I wished was better was the update speed but it makes sense considering author has a life of their own. Anyway, me like story.
i realy like this novel. MC is born in the black family and we see the prospective of a child born in a blood purist family. this is absolutely new! the story is well made and i could some times feel MC emotions, to the point where I nearly cried in some parts. The situation is well explained especialy the problems of the family and the relationship between its members. MC clearly feels human with his strong points and weakness. If it is continued it could become one of the best fanfic of harry potter, moreover the chaoter are rather long.
This is simply an amazing novel. The story does move a bit slowly, and it can be hard at times keeping track of the Timeline, but it's never boring. The story is spectacular, it's an original character so everything is new without any weird future knowledge, but the main character is smart enough to compensate for that. It's very story focused, no Suddenly OP main character type stuff, and the writing does an amazing job at conveying the thoughts of a young pureblood wizard growing up and slowly breaking free of that strict pureblood ideology he was raised around. There is a nice mix of new characters and canon characters that the MC meets while going through school at Hogwarts and while some are a bit one dimensional, others are very well fleshed out and explored. The writing quality is very high, no real issues there from what I have seen. I think the only oddity is the lack of POV specifications, as there are some chapters that jump from the main style of following the MCs POV to following another characters for a half chapter or more, and you just sorta have to figure it out by reading further who it is. Not horrible, but a bit odd at first. Still, overall it's a very good novel and I hope it continues on for many chapters to come.
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Finally, a flawed harry potter mc. I am very much looking forwatd to seeing Polaris' development, will he learn the pure blood supremacy is a farce? Certainly it has been hinted that he sees flaws with the ideology. Or will he be an unhappy deatheater? Perhaps a 3rd path where he leads the house of black as neither light Nor dark. Obviously HP fics are slow AF and it is really difficult to read (in the best possible way) Polaris effectively being a little sociopath because of how he was raised, he works purely in cold political self interest, with a sprinkling of sadism. I am disappointed he didn't go into ravenclaw I think it could've of made for a great conflict point for Pol and Walburga as well as create a special relationship with Sirius in that they're both rebels, just on different scales and types. Overall a great fic if you want to read a non reincarnated and canon typical OC for the marauders era, currently the novel needs Polaris to be differentiated from Regulus as the characters seem conceptually identical. They're 11and I'm already team polxamelia
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You're too good for this community, author. A main character that acts his age and that behaves like he ought to behave for someone of his background. This is something that I rarely see in this platform. You deserve an O+ for the character design. Kudos to you for that. P.S. I'm only 14 chapters in at moment, but the way you handled wandless magic let me know that you understand and appreciate the essence of the HP books. It's a breath of fresh air to find someone who doesn't think he knows better than J. K. Rowling.
was one of the better fanfics out there. plus it's interesting to note to develope new characters and how they fit into Potter world it's amazing how good it came out to be honest. and I hope it's not dropped already
Incredible FF about Harry Potter World. It is well written with correct grammar so that is a big plus in my eyes. (Most FFs have trash grammar so this is a nice surprise) MC could act more like a child sometimes, in my opinion he is acting to much like an adult when he is just a child. I would understand his adult like mind and behaviour if he was reincarnated, but he is just a normal guy who dosn't have any future knowledge nor is his mental age higher that other children, but that is just my opinion. But I don't have any negative comments about him besides this one, he is smart and level-headed which is not usually seen in FFs. So that is another big plus! Also, OCs that Author wrote are enjoyable. Corvus and Nate are probably my favorite because they give us just the right amount of humor not to be annoying and they have some funny moments in the FF. Keep up the good work Author, I'm expecting even more good chapters from you :)
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Aku sangat menyukai jalan dan pengembangan ceritanya! Tapi penulis aku masih sangat skeptis tentang bagaimana keberadaan Polaris akan mempengaruhi kanon. Jelas saat ini keluarga Black berada dalam kekuatan penuh dengan keberadaan Arcturus, Orion, Cygnus, Walburga dll. Tapi ketika kanon dimulai semua Black telah musnah kecuali Sirius. Jika cerita berjalan sesuai dengan kanon, maka di tahun keenam Pol, Voldy akan jatuh. Apakah saat itu semua Black juga sudah jatuh? Apakah dia akan menghentikan Kementerian menjebloskan Sirius ke penjara? Atau cerita sendiri telah berubah dan tidak mengikuti kanon. Ini menarik dan aku menantikan nya!
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Interesting fanfic, very good character development. The mc is very human, the way his emotions and thoughts are put on paper is pleasing to read. The story is slow paced but it adds a certain amount of 'realness' to the story. I personally like it, there are very few errors thus it's nice to read. Hope you try it And thank you author-san.
This was started about a year ago, which I can't believe since it doesn't feel that long since I started. I started with nothing in mind just the name of the mc and the age differences between his siblings. With just that information I just went with the flow and wrote without thinking much, with no idea how to really write seeing as it was somewhat my first time trying to write a fanfic, mostly just writing creatively in general. I suppose ages ago, maybe eight months ago I stopped writing mostly because I wasn't really interested in the writing- well how it was written in a sense not too sure and the grammar too so I never really bothered because I wanted to edit it before continuing which I eventually did eight months later... I've edited the chapters taking some things out replacing it with other things, and changing dialogue and I'm still writing chapters to update once I've done one. Now I've got that interest back to continue writing curious about what will happen just as some of you might be, idk. I honestly don't have a vivid idea of what I want to happen, mostly just a vague idea of how it could end. I guess it's slow-paced which I didn't really intend to do like I said I just go with the flow but I guess most fanfics a much faster, my bad I get it I would want things moving along too. I guess low pace isn't for everyone, perhaps mine is 'too' slow pace idk everyone is free with their opinion. I guess it's rather a slow pace, it's definitely not close to a fast pace. I don't mind criticism, so feel free to comment or give honest reviews, I like hearing what people don't like about my fanfic, It helps me improve somewhat and know what I shouldn't do. Yeah and feel free to give ideas if you want, I'm open to ideas, I write with the flow anyways. Love interest is Amelia. No harem, never really got them or even know how to incorporate them properly into a story. I hope I don't lose interest again and don't update in eight months again. I'll try not to, though if I plan on dropping I'll say so, so you're not waiting on chapters or something.
this Mc is a totally disappointment who has no idea what he wants of his life... he going around either giving problems or try to help random people but it seems like is all random and he is just there.... the story has so many plot holes... People are younger or older from canon with no reason behind that and the truth is the story is really boring and a chore to read!
Amazing fanfic you wrote I Just love the Mc and he’s friends the OCes aren’t bad quite good actually The conflicts and drama between He’s friends and brothers just amazing I can’t wait for more chapters And thank you author for writing such an amazing fanfic
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Excellent writing! I liked how you depicted the MC's development as the plot progressed, as well as the conflict within him about the values he was raised with and how his experiences helped him resolve the problem. I'm hoping you'll be able to finish this fanfiction.
this is one of the best stories of harry potter world in have read so far.please keep up the good story ,i really appreciate if you can complete this good work .and please make sure update are as early as possible
Awesome novel, great characters. The only issue is that I would love to get more chapters. Looking forward to Polaris development through HP story.
The story is fairly slow paced but it isn’ t boring. It is rewritten really well and is very enjoyable to look read. The chapters are quite long. The only thing I wished was better was the update speed but it makes sense considering author has a life of their own. Anyway, me like story.
i realy like this novel. MC is born in the black family and we see the prospective of a child born in a blood purist family. this is absolutely new! the story is well made and i could some times feel MC emotions, to the point where I nearly cried in some parts. The situation is well explained especialy the problems of the family and the relationship between its members. MC clearly feels human with his strong points and weakness. If it is continued it could become one of the best fanfic of harry potter, moreover the chaoter are rather long.
This is simply an amazing novel. The story does move a bit slowly, and it can be hard at times keeping track of the Timeline, but it's never boring. The story is spectacular, it's an original character so everything is new without any weird future knowledge, but the main character is smart enough to compensate for that. It's very story focused, no Suddenly OP main character type stuff, and the writing does an amazing job at conveying the thoughts of a young pureblood wizard growing up and slowly breaking free of that strict pureblood ideology he was raised around. There is a nice mix of new characters and canon characters that the MC meets while going through school at Hogwarts and while some are a bit one dimensional, others are very well fleshed out and explored. The writing quality is very high, no real issues there from what I have seen. I think the only oddity is the lack of POV specifications, as there are some chapters that jump from the main style of following the MCs POV to following another characters for a half chapter or more, and you just sorta have to figure it out by reading further who it is. Not horrible, but a bit odd at first. Still, overall it's a very good novel and I hope it continues on for many chapters to come.
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Finally, a flawed harry potter mc. I am very much looking forwatd to seeing Polaris' development, will he learn the pure blood supremacy is a farce? Certainly it has been hinted that he sees flaws with the ideology. Or will he be an unhappy deatheater? Perhaps a 3rd path where he leads the house of black as neither light Nor dark. Obviously HP fics are slow AF and it is really difficult to read (in the best possible way) Polaris effectively being a little sociopath because of how he was raised, he works purely in cold political self interest, with a sprinkling of sadism. I am disappointed he didn't go into ravenclaw I think it could've of made for a great conflict point for Pol and Walburga as well as create a special relationship with Sirius in that they're both rebels, just on different scales and types. Overall a great fic if you want to read a non reincarnated and canon typical OC for the marauders era, currently the novel needs Polaris to be differentiated from Regulus as the characters seem conceptually identical. They're 11and I'm already team polxamelia
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You're too good for this community, author. A main character that acts his age and that behaves like he ought to behave for someone of his background. This is something that I rarely see in this platform. You deserve an O+ for the character design. Kudos to you for that. P.S. I'm only 14 chapters in at moment, but the way you handled wandless magic let me know that you understand and appreciate the essence of the HP books. It's a breath of fresh air to find someone who doesn't think he knows better than J. K. Rowling.
was one of the better fanfics out there. plus it's interesting to note to develope new characters and how they fit into Potter world it's amazing how good it came out to be honest. and I hope it's not dropped already
Incredible FF about Harry Potter World. It is well written with correct grammar so that is a big plus in my eyes. (Most FFs have trash grammar so this is a nice surprise) MC could act more like a child sometimes, in my opinion he is acting to much like an adult when he is just a child. I would understand his adult like mind and behaviour if he was reincarnated, but he is just a normal guy who dosn't have any future knowledge nor is his mental age higher that other children, but that is just my opinion. But I don't have any negative comments about him besides this one, he is smart and level-headed which is not usually seen in FFs. So that is another big plus! Also, OCs that Author wrote are enjoyable. Corvus and Nate are probably my favorite because they give us just the right amount of humor not to be annoying and they have some funny moments in the FF. Keep up the good work Author, I'm expecting even more good chapters from you :)
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Aku sangat menyukai jalan dan pengembangan ceritanya! Tapi penulis aku masih sangat skeptis tentang bagaimana keberadaan Polaris akan mempengaruhi kanon. Jelas saat ini keluarga Black berada dalam kekuatan penuh dengan keberadaan Arcturus, Orion, Cygnus, Walburga dll. Tapi ketika kanon dimulai semua Black telah musnah kecuali Sirius. Jika cerita berjalan sesuai dengan kanon, maka di tahun keenam Pol, Voldy akan jatuh. Apakah saat itu semua Black juga sudah jatuh? Apakah dia akan menghentikan Kementerian menjebloskan Sirius ke penjara? Atau cerita sendiri telah berubah dan tidak mengikuti kanon. Ini menarik dan aku menantikan nya!
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Interesting fanfic, very good character development. The mc is very human, the way his emotions and thoughts are put on paper is pleasing to read. The story is slow paced but it adds a certain amount of 'realness' to the story. I personally like it, there are very few errors thus it's nice to read. Hope you try it And thank you author-san.
This was started about a year ago, which I can't believe since it doesn't feel that long since I started. I started with nothing in mind just the name of the mc and the age differences between his siblings. With just that information I just went with the flow and wrote without thinking much, with no idea how to really write seeing as it was somewhat my first time trying to write a fanfic, mostly just writing creatively in general. I suppose ages ago, maybe eight months ago I stopped writing mostly because I wasn't really interested in the writing- well how it was written in a sense not too sure and the grammar too so I never really bothered because I wanted to edit it before continuing which I eventually did eight months later... I've edited the chapters taking some things out replacing it with other things, and changing dialogue and I'm still writing chapters to update once I've done one. Now I've got that interest back to continue writing curious about what will happen just as some of you might be, idk. I honestly don't have a vivid idea of what I want to happen, mostly just a vague idea of how it could end. I guess it's slow-paced which I didn't really intend to do like I said I just go with the flow but I guess most fanfics a much faster, my bad I get it I would want things moving along too. I guess low pace isn't for everyone, perhaps mine is 'too' slow pace idk everyone is free with their opinion. I guess it's rather a slow pace, it's definitely not close to a fast pace. I don't mind criticism, so feel free to comment or give honest reviews, I like hearing what people don't like about my fanfic, It helps me improve somewhat and know what I shouldn't do. Yeah and feel free to give ideas if you want, I'm open to ideas, I write with the flow anyways. Love interest is Amelia. No harem, never really got them or even know how to incorporate them properly into a story. I hope I don't lose interest again and don't update in eight months again. I'll try not to, though if I plan on dropping I'll say so, so you're not waiting on chapters or something.