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Good writing quality. There are some grammatical mistakes here and there but overall it's good. Story development : none. Dozens of chapters in and only 2 or 3 days have passed. The pacing is horrendous, so much so that it quickly becomes boring to read. And the fact that it's filled with child level humor does not help at all. The story did not even progress a tiny bit yet the author threw in some side stories. Character design : ok I guess. But again, the problem is that the story has not progressed at all, some characters were introduced but the MC only really interacted with 5 of them. So I can only give my opinion about those 5 + the MC. They are fairly accurately written. The elephant in the room is the MC tho. I don't know his mental age, he seems to be between 4 and 30 years old. Updating stability : dropped, I think. World background : Genshin Impact and its amazing lore and background. Again, cannot give 5* BCS have not seen anything of the world in this novel, since the non-progressing story is stuck around Mondstadt.
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Good morning/Afternoon everyone and to be the bringer of bad/good news he's continued the story, now for the bad news it on P*treon
The story itself is good. Has good writing quality, plot and some more. But, it's very frustrating to read. For the first volume there are many drama part. Romance is very few in the first chapter. The MC doesn't use his ability wisely. I know, he didn't know then but even after knowing he use it very rarely. And by the time he use his ability it's already too late. At first it shows the MC is suspicious about everyone and he still didn't use his ability to know about them. Urg, it's very frustrating! Also, I don't know if the author is going to drop this fanfic.
It's ok? The progression is nice, the writing is smooth. but the protagonist kinda just, idk?? he's erm not smart, stupid and impulsive in some scenarios ? but that's his personality i guess? at 315 rn
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I didn't really read many novels but, I can say that this is one of the best I have read, from the development of the characters to the story and how it develops, and its funny moments, I really appreciate the author for such a good work
Annoying, wimpy, loud, beta mc, it's as if the dude had came out of one of those low quality japanese isekai novels, also, the writing is filled with random zoomer-tier discordturd lingo, and it makes it unreadable for anyone with above room temperature iq.
Everything is perfect here. I love how the author characterized my favorite genshin characters and how they acted. I also love the grammar, it’s the best and 100% better than other fanfics that don’t pay attention or care about people being able to understand what they’re reading. Then there’s the story, I liked how it’s developed and how the author progressed it, and lastly the chapters. Thank you for all these chapters and not trashing or dropping the story, thank you 🙏🏽
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Hi Author thank you for writing such a good story, I am confused about something I think I missed where lumine was sneaking off to at night in liyue, could you please clarify this for me?
Spoiler enthüllenIt's fun to read, the characters are detailed and lively, the story is exciting, the relationship between the characters progresses at a realistic pace, no character is perfect, each character has their own problems, motivations and dreams, character development is good, the personality of the character is quite colorful. side characters are good at revealing their existence and differences. I read it 2 times and enjoyed it a lot. thank you for this fanfic
After reading the latest chapter and seeing the current cover as paimon, I know where this is going
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What can I say? Amazing could be the only word to describe this fan fic... There's so many things to point out that makes this a worthwhile read let me list a few of them... -An original MC with zero knowledge about the world itself. This is a rare find in fanfiction and I have no doubt this is a great decision. Since the interactions with MC and his learning of the world and it's norm is very enjoyable and with it we see characters get more fleshed out as MC learns more about them through interactions, gives it that realistic feeling that most fanfictions in this platform fail to display. -Dope powers. Yomite's powers are really interesting and adds new dimensions to the story. The Tempus of Particles is a very rarely seen powerup, since it's like Onoki's kekkei toutum in Naruto, a very underappreciated ability, it's really OP and can practically disintegrate anything it's locked on, Tempus of the Story and Tempus of the Heart aren't really explained as of yet but I can already see great potential in them so I like how this is going. -The world of Genshin. Honestly, I haven't played the game but I've researched it, and from their I've come to love this world and it's story, knowing gacha games I have no doubt this will take a depressing turn but I hope it would all wind up to a great ending and this fanfic would be able to uphold it if not surpass it, with the author who is backing it I have no doubt it has that surpassing potential. -The Characters and how they are portrayed. This is by far the greatest feature of the ff. The characters feel alive and complement their og counterpart perfectly. The dialogues, the interactions, their individual gestures, behaviors, body language, each itty bitty details are handled carefully to make them individualistic and have their own style. I can easily read a speech and tell which character it is describing, it's honestly astonishing, at this point, how the author has portrayed them. I love it and hope he can be consistent with it. Some things that may need some improvements... -The writing. For the most part it's phenomenal writing if compared to most fanfics on this platform. There's little to no mistakes bit there's always the occasional misspellings, also sometimes the words and sentences feels a bit jumbled, past and present sentences are mixed and a bit weird to see one paragraph be past and the other be present. Quite possibly it can be because I have not seen any writings of this style so the author maybe right and me wrong. what's definite is that, this in no way breaks or disrupts the reader experience so hurray to that. Well, that's all, hope this review helps you in gathering some readers aki and this review, although obviously biased, upholds what I genuinely feel about this fic.. Waiting for dem smuts, fluffs and the journey to relations you've promised us... Don't keep us waiting fam, hope this ff doesn't die like the old ones because of retards and I appeal to the WN to pls not ban him again, the man is old he can't take another shock like this.. Aki doesn't want a 4th time spare the guy plz....
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Good writing quality. There are some grammatical mistakes here and there but overall it's good. Story development : none. Dozens of chapters in and only 2 or 3 days have passed. The pacing is horrendous, so much so that it quickly becomes boring to read. And the fact that it's filled with child level humor does not help at all. The story did not even progress a tiny bit yet the author threw in some side stories. Character design : ok I guess. But again, the problem is that the story has not progressed at all, some characters were introduced but the MC only really interacted with 5 of them. So I can only give my opinion about those 5 + the MC. They are fairly accurately written. The elephant in the room is the MC tho. I don't know his mental age, he seems to be between 4 and 30 years old. Updating stability : dropped, I think. World background : Genshin Impact and its amazing lore and background. Again, cannot give 5* BCS have not seen anything of the world in this novel, since the non-progressing story is stuck around Mondstadt.
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Good morning/Afternoon everyone and to be the bringer of bad/good news he's continued the story, now for the bad news it on P*treon
The story itself is good. Has good writing quality, plot and some more. But, it's very frustrating to read. For the first volume there are many drama part. Romance is very few in the first chapter. The MC doesn't use his ability wisely. I know, he didn't know then but even after knowing he use it very rarely. And by the time he use his ability it's already too late. At first it shows the MC is suspicious about everyone and he still didn't use his ability to know about them. Urg, it's very frustrating! Also, I don't know if the author is going to drop this fanfic.
It's ok? The progression is nice, the writing is smooth. but the protagonist kinda just, idk?? he's erm not smart, stupid and impulsive in some scenarios ? but that's his personality i guess? at 315 rn
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I didn't really read many novels but, I can say that this is one of the best I have read, from the development of the characters to the story and how it develops, and its funny moments, I really appreciate the author for such a good work
Annoying, wimpy, loud, beta mc, it's as if the dude had came out of one of those low quality japanese isekai novels, also, the writing is filled with random zoomer-tier discordturd lingo, and it makes it unreadable for anyone with above room temperature iq.
Everything is perfect here. I love how the author characterized my favorite genshin characters and how they acted. I also love the grammar, it’s the best and 100% better than other fanfics that don’t pay attention or care about people being able to understand what they’re reading. Then there’s the story, I liked how it’s developed and how the author progressed it, and lastly the chapters. Thank you for all these chapters and not trashing or dropping the story, thank you 🙏🏽
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Hi Author thank you for writing such a good story, I am confused about something I think I missed where lumine was sneaking off to at night in liyue, could you please clarify this for me?
Spoiler enthüllenIt's fun to read, the characters are detailed and lively, the story is exciting, the relationship between the characters progresses at a realistic pace, no character is perfect, each character has their own problems, motivations and dreams, character development is good, the personality of the character is quite colorful. side characters are good at revealing their existence and differences. I read it 2 times and enjoyed it a lot. thank you for this fanfic
After reading the latest chapter and seeing the current cover as paimon, I know where this is going
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What can I say? Amazing could be the only word to describe this fan fic... There's so many things to point out that makes this a worthwhile read let me list a few of them... -An original MC with zero knowledge about the world itself. This is a rare find in fanfiction and I have no doubt this is a great decision. Since the interactions with MC and his learning of the world and it's norm is very enjoyable and with it we see characters get more fleshed out as MC learns more about them through interactions, gives it that realistic feeling that most fanfictions in this platform fail to display. -Dope powers. Yomite's powers are really interesting and adds new dimensions to the story. The Tempus of Particles is a very rarely seen powerup, since it's like Onoki's kekkei toutum in Naruto, a very underappreciated ability, it's really OP and can practically disintegrate anything it's locked on, Tempus of the Story and Tempus of the Heart aren't really explained as of yet but I can already see great potential in them so I like how this is going. -The world of Genshin. Honestly, I haven't played the game but I've researched it, and from their I've come to love this world and it's story, knowing gacha games I have no doubt this will take a depressing turn but I hope it would all wind up to a great ending and this fanfic would be able to uphold it if not surpass it, with the author who is backing it I have no doubt it has that surpassing potential. -The Characters and how they are portrayed. This is by far the greatest feature of the ff. The characters feel alive and complement their og counterpart perfectly. The dialogues, the interactions, their individual gestures, behaviors, body language, each itty bitty details are handled carefully to make them individualistic and have their own style. I can easily read a speech and tell which character it is describing, it's honestly astonishing, at this point, how the author has portrayed them. I love it and hope he can be consistent with it. Some things that may need some improvements... -The writing. For the most part it's phenomenal writing if compared to most fanfics on this platform. There's little to no mistakes bit there's always the occasional misspellings, also sometimes the words and sentences feels a bit jumbled, past and present sentences are mixed and a bit weird to see one paragraph be past and the other be present. Quite possibly it can be because I have not seen any writings of this style so the author maybe right and me wrong. what's definite is that, this in no way breaks or disrupts the reader experience so hurray to that. Well, that's all, hope this review helps you in gathering some readers aki and this review, although obviously biased, upholds what I genuinely feel about this fic.. Waiting for dem smuts, fluffs and the journey to relations you've promised us... Don't keep us waiting fam, hope this ff doesn't die like the old ones because of retards and I appeal to the WN to pls not ban him again, the man is old he can't take another shock like this.. Aki doesn't want a 4th time spare the guy plz....