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Really interesting fic, the author picked ir up again, and it seems that it will only get better. Good MC and interesting characters, as well as his power. Well writen, good pace. Now it has a good updating stability. . . . . . .
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This book has a lot of potentials to become great and something thing I disagree with like making him op right off the bat and how is he not crazy? well whatever this story can become great
Está historia está buenísima! No puedo esperar a que actualices! Me gustó la idea de un asmosiano en Marvel, pero pero gusto aún más que Laura sea la pareja, es uno de mis personajes favoritos de Marvel. Actualiza pronto por favor
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This fic is really good. There aren't lot of good ben10 fics here in wn, so it's really refreshing to see one such as this. The earlier version was already decent, being above average, but after the re-write it really stepped up a level in quality. I didn't really notice any spelling mistake, and if I did see some, then it didn't really bother me. Some people might find that some events are forced, like when he met Bobby for exemple, but it didn't really bother me in any way. Character development is present, and is one of the strong points of this novel in my opinion, because even if we didn't see any major changes to the mc's behavior, the people around him feel alive and have emotions. The best example of that is Laura, as we see the hot-headed girl who suffered a hard childhood and assaulted the mc without hesitation in beginning gradually open up to others and developing feelings towards the only person who stayed by her side apart from Logan, the mc. So yeah, a great fic overall, though the only thing that's really problematic would be the updating stability as of late, but that won't change the fact this is a great fic, and it really lives up to the great idea that gave birth to this. I really look forward to the character interactions between mc and those in the "normal" dimension (I sure do hope he will keep close to Bobby in the future, I can smell a very good friendship coming) after this time skip where Laura and him have basically gone missing for them. Anyway, I first of all thank you, hope everything's going well for you author, and that you'll have enough free time to continue this amazing fan-fic.
Loving how you've chosen Laura as the lover for the MC, so far there are no signs for a harem witch is fine by me if Laura remain the MC lover. The plot is fine so far and it kept me reading till the end of the current chapter (12) by the way did you (the author) ever played the H game "Rogue like"? it's a very good little game about X-Men, I liked especially the option of staying only with Laura. here's a picture of sexy Laura. xD
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Osmosian. SKILLS Energy Absorption Life Absorption Matter Absorption DNA absorption Memory Absorption Absorption of Skills and Powers Increased Strength (enhanced increase when absorbing matter t / or energy) Increased Durability (improved increase when absorbing matter) Regeneration (when they absorb matter) Enhanced Recovery (when they absorb energy) Body Alteration (when they absorb matter) Matter manipulation (when they absorb the same matter) Increased Longevity Technological manipulation (when they absorb energy) Energy Shots (when absorbing energy) Transformation (when they absorb energy from the Omnitrix) Any Power and / or Ability (for absorbing a life form with power) WoW, this evolved sub-race of humans is broken!
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The history is good but I feel like 2 things are wrong. 1-The Mc is too carefree with Xarles, he is a telepath and not a good person but that's no reason for the Mc to simply go all revolted teenager on him, Xarles is dangerous and manipulative this could have ended really bad for him, make the Mc a little bit more aware of his words. 2- As a reader, I don't think the Mc can lose, the way you write it makes it look like he will always win, I mean he passed through some difficulties but it didn't really felt like enough, if he lost some battle or something significant I think your history would be much better.
This is a great story thus far. His powers like Kevin 11 make is such that he isn't op from the second chapter and his gradual building of powers is cool. I like the fact that he's progressing without major nerfs aside from developing each power which is a fair trade off.
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Love it... I had a lot of fun reading this story. The main character is cool and everyday kind of guy. No hero syndrome or I got to be OP and bored. Love that he has to struggle with his own abilities as it allows for character growth. Thanks for writing it was a fun read. Look forward to more stories by the author.
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This is an enjoyable read the writer has most certainly improved greatly since their last work and evidence of this can be seen in the variety of changes the author has made both in their character design/interactions as well as in their control of pacing based on the 10 chapters currently released I truly look forward to seeing where this series goes in the future.
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I really like this story. It's a great concept. The story pacing and the speed in which the MC gains strength could use a bit of work, but other than that I don't really have any complaints. Thanks for the chapters you wrote so far. I'll be impatiently awaiting your next update.
I'm crying. I'm already hooked and now I have to wait for updates. I'm not a very patient person. lol keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
please update this story, it very interesting and I want more chapters so please update soon. don't tease me with a good story and then stop working on it.
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Really interesting fic, the author picked ir up again, and it seems that it will only get better. Good MC and interesting characters, as well as his power. Well writen, good pace. Now it has a good updating stability. . . . . . .
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This book has a lot of potentials to become great and something thing I disagree with like making him op right off the bat and how is he not crazy? well whatever this story can become great
Está historia está buenísima! No puedo esperar a que actualices! Me gustó la idea de un asmosiano en Marvel, pero pero gusto aún más que Laura sea la pareja, es uno de mis personajes favoritos de Marvel. Actualiza pronto por favor
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This fic is really good. There aren't lot of good ben10 fics here in wn, so it's really refreshing to see one such as this. The earlier version was already decent, being above average, but after the re-write it really stepped up a level in quality. I didn't really notice any spelling mistake, and if I did see some, then it didn't really bother me. Some people might find that some events are forced, like when he met Bobby for exemple, but it didn't really bother me in any way. Character development is present, and is one of the strong points of this novel in my opinion, because even if we didn't see any major changes to the mc's behavior, the people around him feel alive and have emotions. The best example of that is Laura, as we see the hot-headed girl who suffered a hard childhood and assaulted the mc without hesitation in beginning gradually open up to others and developing feelings towards the only person who stayed by her side apart from Logan, the mc. So yeah, a great fic overall, though the only thing that's really problematic would be the updating stability as of late, but that won't change the fact this is a great fic, and it really lives up to the great idea that gave birth to this. I really look forward to the character interactions between mc and those in the "normal" dimension (I sure do hope he will keep close to Bobby in the future, I can smell a very good friendship coming) after this time skip where Laura and him have basically gone missing for them. Anyway, I first of all thank you, hope everything's going well for you author, and that you'll have enough free time to continue this amazing fan-fic.
Loving how you've chosen Laura as the lover for the MC, so far there are no signs for a harem witch is fine by me if Laura remain the MC lover. The plot is fine so far and it kept me reading till the end of the current chapter (12) by the way did you (the author) ever played the H game "Rogue like"? it's a very good little game about X-Men, I liked especially the option of staying only with Laura. here's a picture of sexy Laura. xD
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Osmosian. SKILLS Energy Absorption Life Absorption Matter Absorption DNA absorption Memory Absorption Absorption of Skills and Powers Increased Strength (enhanced increase when absorbing matter t / or energy) Increased Durability (improved increase when absorbing matter) Regeneration (when they absorb matter) Enhanced Recovery (when they absorb energy) Body Alteration (when they absorb matter) Matter manipulation (when they absorb the same matter) Increased Longevity Technological manipulation (when they absorb energy) Energy Shots (when absorbing energy) Transformation (when they absorb energy from the Omnitrix) Any Power and / or Ability (for absorbing a life form with power) WoW, this evolved sub-race of humans is broken!
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The history is good but I feel like 2 things are wrong. 1-The Mc is too carefree with Xarles, he is a telepath and not a good person but that's no reason for the Mc to simply go all revolted teenager on him, Xarles is dangerous and manipulative this could have ended really bad for him, make the Mc a little bit more aware of his words. 2- As a reader, I don't think the Mc can lose, the way you write it makes it look like he will always win, I mean he passed through some difficulties but it didn't really felt like enough, if he lost some battle or something significant I think your history would be much better.
This is a great story thus far. His powers like Kevin 11 make is such that he isn't op from the second chapter and his gradual building of powers is cool. I like the fact that he's progressing without major nerfs aside from developing each power which is a fair trade off.
Spoiler enthüllen Love it... I had a lot of fun reading this story. The main character is cool and everyday kind of guy. No hero syndrome or I got to be OP and bored. Love that he has to struggle with his own abilities as it allows for character growth. Thanks for writing it was a fun read. Look forward to more stories by the author.
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This is an enjoyable read the writer has most certainly improved greatly since their last work and evidence of this can be seen in the variety of changes the author has made both in their character design/interactions as well as in their control of pacing based on the 10 chapters currently released I truly look forward to seeing where this series goes in the future.
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I really like this story. It's a great concept. The story pacing and the speed in which the MC gains strength could use a bit of work, but other than that I don't really have any complaints. Thanks for the chapters you wrote so far. I'll be impatiently awaiting your next update.
I'm crying. I'm already hooked and now I have to wait for updates. I'm not a very patient person. lol keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
please update this story, it very interesting and I want more chapters so please update soon. don't tease me with a good story and then stop working on it.
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