Cyberpunk Fantasy Ancient Hope // Tribulation : Singularity

LV 1

CarrotOnTheStick

Ok, I was the first and hopefully not the last. First, the novel, as far as I know, progressing as I read it to chapter 3. Second, the grammar is good, the dialogue is not artificial. Third, the chapters are the way too long! Tips, (I'm not a great writer, but I just going to share my experience as I readers.) 1. Please, please, don't make your chapter to long. Cut it. I advise to you that make it only 1.5k-to 2k per chapter words. 2. Between the person/characters, add space between the character's dialogue so it'll not be too confusing somehow even though you emphasize whoever it was. 3. Hahahha, you've wasted words that you can exploit. Because as far as I read to chapter 3. For these 3 chapters only, maybe you can cut it to 15 or more chapter, so the reader's count would be 15 times for as of now. But overall as of now, the novel have potential. So thumbs up for author!