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Schreiben Sie eine RezensionI love the story! I like how they took the time to put a cover with the size for it to be posted. I dunno if this a spoiler? Also, how Zane likes to see people. XD It is kinda funny how he examines people. Though, I just stare. XD
The plot was interesting. The prologue itself hooked me for the next chapters. The writing style was superb, the quiz and riddles that the Author throws at the readers among the unexpectedly twisting plot was fascinating. A very good job to the Author. Cheers
That prologue was so real man . I love the Use of Abilities and The system. Good pacing and worldbuilding keep Posting chapter i need more.👏🏿👏🏿👏🏿
The story is really interesting and you are doing a good job with it. Your writing style is clear and easy to understand. Good luck, Author!
I wish depth and breadth were awarded by Webnovel; you'd have a home run of 5/5 star reviews! Your protagonist's first appearance as a well-characterised senior citizen with wisdom, cynicism, and intelligence to match his age, who DOESN'T reincarnate, is a gem... I dare to say I wish to give him a huge hug. As your plot progresses, it rolls out like the an Italian's 'r'. Though there are still grammatical errors after the first two chapters, I am sure they will be corrected when you return to your story in a few months. If you do not wish to wait that long to freshen your view on your writing, another strategy is reading your story as you view it on another device *using a different font size and type* - your slight errors will stick out like a sore thumb (I speak from experience)! I can feel the immense work you put into this novel and greatly commend you for your effort. Sometimes, it can be tiring when all you think about is improvement - you may even slip by the beauty you could create when you do so! My only piece of advice to offer you is to forget the pressure of perfection as you write and live in the love of the moment; I promise that you'll realise you make far less errors. I wish I had more constructive criticism to help you build your writing but I do not. Whatever editing skills you implored for your first two chapters (the Prologue) are exquisite.
Hi! Your book is interesting. I'm looking forward to Zane's improvement in the story. But I want more updates. Don't stop here! Kudos to the author!!
Hi! This is an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Such an amazing and great novel of yours Author. I can't deny the fact that this one is interesting and at the same time a refreshing story for readers. Keep writing, Author. Can't wait for more chapters...
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels! + Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing contest! This contest is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi, but if you haven’t worked on these genres, that’s TOTALLY FINE! You can refer to the given examples and tips to develop a new story. As all new stories can get cash rewards, this might be your chance to begin your writing career and start to make a living by writing! Not to mention that you can take your chance to win the big cash and get your books published in hardcover! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/3tBG7l7 or contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com
Overall a very interesting and good story. I can see where a couple of folks have left comments with suggestions for edits- they looked to be correct, and they'll make the story a little more polished. I enjoyed reading the prologue-type of introduction, and it really set up your story for success in the later chapters, very good use of that writing tactic. The characters' interactions are above average here on WN, and the suspense build up is perfect. Good job, and keep writing, dear author!
Wow , we have similar beings in our mythology. This made me nostalgic as it reminded me of all mythological beings who are immortals. Thank you author. Keep up the good work.
Hey Webnovelist! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to email rebecca.review@outlook.com. We are mainly looking for adventure novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game). A brief introduction, along with a few samples or links, will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!
There is some good characterization on the characters, I think the plot will go to somewhere interesting. But in the first part there is a hefty amount of info dumping. It might be challenging for the light readers to read though. I think grammar needs some work but else good story.
Off to a food start, the characters are well described and i csn visualize it well. I look forward to seeing more chapters coming out. Keep up the good work!
Interesting premise, however there are quite a few grammatical errors and punctuation errors. If you can polish your book it would turn the book even better. Otherwise good job!
Interesting story and characters but quite lengthy in conversation. The character is having one conversation after another. Loved the butterfly effect portion and the world you have created. A bit complex but ambitious and great.
Spoiler enthüllenI love the story! I like how they took the time to put a cover with the size for it to be posted. I dunno if this a spoiler? Also, how Zane likes to see people. XD It is kinda funny how he examines people. Though, I just stare. XD
The plot was interesting. The prologue itself hooked me for the next chapters. The writing style was superb, the quiz and riddles that the Author throws at the readers among the unexpectedly twisting plot was fascinating. A very good job to the Author. Cheers
That prologue was so real man . I love the Use of Abilities and The system. Good pacing and worldbuilding keep Posting chapter i need more.👏🏿👏🏿👏🏿
The story is really interesting and you are doing a good job with it. Your writing style is clear and easy to understand. Good luck, Author!
I wish depth and breadth were awarded by Webnovel; you'd have a home run of 5/5 star reviews! Your protagonist's first appearance as a well-characterised senior citizen with wisdom, cynicism, and intelligence to match his age, who DOESN'T reincarnate, is a gem... I dare to say I wish to give him a huge hug. As your plot progresses, it rolls out like the an Italian's 'r'. Though there are still grammatical errors after the first two chapters, I am sure they will be corrected when you return to your story in a few months. If you do not wish to wait that long to freshen your view on your writing, another strategy is reading your story as you view it on another device *using a different font size and type* - your slight errors will stick out like a sore thumb (I speak from experience)! I can feel the immense work you put into this novel and greatly commend you for your effort. Sometimes, it can be tiring when all you think about is improvement - you may even slip by the beauty you could create when you do so! My only piece of advice to offer you is to forget the pressure of perfection as you write and live in the love of the moment; I promise that you'll realise you make far less errors. I wish I had more constructive criticism to help you build your writing but I do not. Whatever editing skills you implored for your first two chapters (the Prologue) are exquisite.
Hi! Your book is interesting. I'm looking forward to Zane's improvement in the story. But I want more updates. Don't stop here! Kudos to the author!!
Hi! This is an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Such an amazing and great novel of yours Author. I can't deny the fact that this one is interesting and at the same time a refreshing story for readers. Keep writing, Author. Can't wait for more chapters...
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels! + Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing contest! This contest is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi, but if you haven’t worked on these genres, that’s TOTALLY FINE! You can refer to the given examples and tips to develop a new story. As all new stories can get cash rewards, this might be your chance to begin your writing career and start to make a living by writing! Not to mention that you can take your chance to win the big cash and get your books published in hardcover! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/3tBG7l7 or contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com
Overall a very interesting and good story. I can see where a couple of folks have left comments with suggestions for edits- they looked to be correct, and they'll make the story a little more polished. I enjoyed reading the prologue-type of introduction, and it really set up your story for success in the later chapters, very good use of that writing tactic. The characters' interactions are above average here on WN, and the suspense build up is perfect. Good job, and keep writing, dear author!
Wow , we have similar beings in our mythology. This made me nostalgic as it reminded me of all mythological beings who are immortals. Thank you author. Keep up the good work.
Hey Webnovelist! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to email rebecca.review@outlook.com. We are mainly looking for adventure novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game). A brief introduction, along with a few samples or links, will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!
There is some good characterization on the characters, I think the plot will go to somewhere interesting. But in the first part there is a hefty amount of info dumping. It might be challenging for the light readers to read though. I think grammar needs some work but else good story.
Off to a food start, the characters are well described and i csn visualize it well. I look forward to seeing more chapters coming out. Keep up the good work!
Interesting premise, however there are quite a few grammatical errors and punctuation errors. If you can polish your book it would turn the book even better. Otherwise good job!
Interesting story and characters but quite lengthy in conversation. The character is having one conversation after another. Loved the butterfly effect portion and the world you have created. A bit complex but ambitious and great.
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