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Honestly the story is not bad but good. I honestly don't understand why this novel has so many bad reviews. The story's grammar is not good but note bad enough to where you notice it all the time, unless you just started reading novels.
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I am the soul of my account Exp is my body and coin is my blood I have created countless reviews Unaware of the congruity, Nor aware of the quality Withstood critics to create reviews, waiting for one's acceptance I have no shame. This the easiest way My whole life was Unlimited Useless Previews
Hope the author start writing again it was good could use a Lil more work but that's it
The story is great, the MC is too good to be true true but I like it 😄👍🏻 keep it up. Can't wait for the system to start and making him more OP.
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Your writing is outstanding and your plot is ingenious. I really look forward to see where you go with this and how you change the world of SOA. PLEASE UPDATE!!
Welp i’ve read 5 chapters or something like that, i stopped reading when Kirito and Asuna colide, why?, cuz your MC or Kirito is YOU as a character, beacause of that, your character doesn’t have personality or development, he is just godlike in all senses, and let me tell you something, that is NOT funny at all, when im reading this story i feel like im watching YOU, making YOURSELF perfect, this is just a story for your EGO.
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I hate this book because... (scroll down) HE IS NOT THE REAL KIRITO!!! AND I'LL NEVER ALLOW HIM TO BE AND THAT IS NOT THE WAY KIRITO ACTS. I HATE HIM!!!
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The idea was interesting but the MC is pretty much jezus in that world. Unfortunately the entire story takes place prior to Sao so it's just the usual self gratification borderline ecchi fic
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I’ll give you 3 stars since it’s not a bad read but you should fix your spelling a bit for example you spelt prices prizes etc, but other than that good job.
I think this is a beautiful work. While your characters are a bit too; I'm not sure how to say this, eastern for my liking. The basic concept for the story is interesting. You can improve the story by avoiding stupid things like a sexually active 12 year old, that is a prince charming? "Rolls eyes"
This version of Kirito is more fun and loving a hopefully not mono just poly cough* Author story is more vivid and enjoyable plus gives some before Death match in game I can't say much due to how this is a tad diffrent but still better than no novel of SAO
One of the only good Sao fanfics I have read in a long time, u should give it a try!!! 👍 So to fill the remaining letters needed for the review : It's just great, author : keep up the good work! And so on.......
Very well detailed very minor spelling problems I just wish that kirito gets some kind of buff when or even if, hopefully, he gets trapped in Aincrad. 10 out of 10. I will definitely drop all my stonez
Don't mind me. ============================================================================================================== =======================================================
Same as Webzayne and Maclemore love the story, hope you keep it up. To trolls Stop being d!cks and trying to ruin the Authors drive to write.
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If an author can’t even be bothered to write a paragraph about his/her story than either his/her story sucks or he/she will abandon the story the first chance he/she gets.
Bull**** author. Acting as if your story is so good. This is the third time you rewrite this. Is this some kind of quest, where we follow you everywhere? Ffack you...
Might as well balance out this review section. All these cucks spamming one-star reviews without writing anything worthwhile. I'll say that I have read the last few iterations of this novel. While I can't agree that rewriting it so many times is a good idea; at least you've shown improvement. That's more than what can be said for some authors. Good job, although I'd love to see something else done with this concept. Sao is a lackluster novel, that's been done to all hell. The one punch concept that you had before was better. Although the creation concept sort of broke the pacing. Once you overload a character so much, with possibilities; you cut all possible ******* for your story. This makes it harder to decide on a path, when you literally have infinite open. I would rewrite that, but allow the ability to have some limits, and growth potential. For example, he can only give himself abilities at the start of the world, and is limited for three or so. Make it so that he can't give himself information, allowing him to gain experience in his skill. Of course, he can create outside of his body or something so it isn't a totally useless wish. You just have to have limits with those kinds of abilities. I'd go for a pseudo-creation wish, with a library sort of information center with exorbitant information, and a wish that encompasses his body/form or bloodlines.
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So I see one review that was at the top that said people put 1 star reviews because they didn’t read the story and calling us cucks, yet failed to mention how the author proceeds to sexualize children. Not only that romance is so forced, like no way Asuna would be acting like a fan girl and taking pictures. Then she proceeds to think, “Wow, his smile is so charming!” It’s basically just the author taking the characters and changing their personality to be so unrealistic, and did I forget to mention he’s sexualizing Kirito’s cousin when she’s 11?
Spoiler enthüllen Honestly the story is not bad but good. I honestly don't understand why this novel has so many bad reviews. The story's grammar is not good but note bad enough to where you notice it all the time, unless you just started reading novels.
is it droped is it droped is it droped is it droped is it droped is it droped is it droped is it droped
I am the soul of my account Exp is my body and coin is my blood I have created countless reviews Unaware of the congruity, Nor aware of the quality Withstood critics to create reviews, waiting for one's acceptance I have no shame. This the easiest way My whole life was Unlimited Useless Previews
Hope the author start writing again it was good could use a Lil more work but that's it
The story is great, the MC is too good to be true true but I like it 😄👍🏻 keep it up. Can't wait for the system to start and making him more OP.
Mooooorrreeeeeeeee.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,please.,..,.,.,.,..,.,.,,., Gjgjgjgjjfjfjjgjgjfjgjfk fKgkgjgkjgjgjgj
Your writing is outstanding and your plot is ingenious. I really look forward to see where you go with this and how you change the world of SOA. PLEASE UPDATE!!
Welp i’ve read 5 chapters or something like that, i stopped reading when Kirito and Asuna colide, why?, cuz your MC or Kirito is YOU as a character, beacause of that, your character doesn’t have personality or development, he is just godlike in all senses, and let me tell you something, that is NOT funny at all, when im reading this story i feel like im watching YOU, making YOURSELF perfect, this is just a story for your EGO.
Spoiler enthüllen I hate this book because... (scroll down) HE IS NOT THE REAL KIRITO!!! AND I'LL NEVER ALLOW HIM TO BE AND THAT IS NOT THE WAY KIRITO ACTS. I HATE HIM!!!
Keep......................................................................................................................................up
The idea was interesting but the MC is pretty much jezus in that world. Unfortunately the entire story takes place prior to Sao so it's just the usual self gratification borderline ecchi fic
Don't drop don't drop don't drop don't drop don't drop. Update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update
GREATEST NOVEL 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS 140 WORDS
I’ll give you 3 stars since it’s not a bad read but you should fix your spelling a bit for example you spelt prices prizes etc, but other than that good job.
I think this is a beautiful work. While your characters are a bit too; I'm not sure how to say this, eastern for my liking. The basic concept for the story is interesting. You can improve the story by avoiding stupid things like a sexually active 12 year old, that is a prince charming? "Rolls eyes"
This version of Kirito is more fun and loving a hopefully not mono just poly cough* Author story is more vivid and enjoyable plus gives some before Death match in game I can't say much due to how this is a tad diffrent but still better than no novel of SAO
One of the only good Sao fanfics I have read in a long time, u should give it a try!!! 👍 So to fill the remaining letters needed for the review : It's just great, author : keep up the good work! And so on.......
Very well detailed very minor spelling problems I just wish that kirito gets some kind of buff when or even if, hopefully, he gets trapped in Aincrad. 10 out of 10. I will definitely drop all my stonez
Don't mind me. ============================================================================================================== =======================================================
Same as Webzayne and Maclemore love the story, hope you keep it up. To trolls Stop being d!cks and trying to ruin the Authors drive to write.
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If an author can’t even be bothered to write a paragraph about his/her story than either his/her story sucks or he/she will abandon the story the first chance he/she gets.
Bull**** author. Acting as if your story is so good. This is the third time you rewrite this. Is this some kind of quest, where we follow you everywhere? Ffack you...
Might as well balance out this review section. All these cucks spamming one-star reviews without writing anything worthwhile. I'll say that I have read the last few iterations of this novel. While I can't agree that rewriting it so many times is a good idea; at least you've shown improvement. That's more than what can be said for some authors. Good job, although I'd love to see something else done with this concept. Sao is a lackluster novel, that's been done to all hell. The one punch concept that you had before was better. Although the creation concept sort of broke the pacing. Once you overload a character so much, with possibilities; you cut all possible ******* for your story. This makes it harder to decide on a path, when you literally have infinite open. I would rewrite that, but allow the ability to have some limits, and growth potential. For example, he can only give himself abilities at the start of the world, and is limited for three or so. Make it so that he can't give himself information, allowing him to gain experience in his skill. Of course, he can create outside of his body or something so it isn't a totally useless wish. You just have to have limits with those kinds of abilities. I'd go for a pseudo-creation wish, with a library sort of information center with exorbitant information, and a wish that encompasses his body/form or bloodlines.
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So I see one review that was at the top that said people put 1 star reviews because they didn’t read the story and calling us cucks, yet failed to mention how the author proceeds to sexualize children. Not only that romance is so forced, like no way Asuna would be acting like a fan girl and taking pictures. Then she proceeds to think, “Wow, his smile is so charming!” It’s basically just the author taking the characters and changing their personality to be so unrealistic, and did I forget to mention he’s sexualizing Kirito’s cousin when she’s 11?
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