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Awesome story man. I love the story and please continue the story ๐ฏ๐๐๐ค๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ค๐ฅณ๐ป๐๐๐ค๐ค๐๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐๐๐คฃโ๐ญ๐โบ๐๐๐๐๐โค๐๐๐ค๐ค๐๐๐ป๐ฅณ๐ค๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฏ๐ค๐๐๐ฏ
You need a proof reader badly, so many grammar mistakes, you repeatedly call male characters she and her, get someone that is a native english speaker to read your work before posting, it'll help a lot.
its got potential. slow start not to slow hopefully I hate 140 character restriction . mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmdumb.
Awesome story author ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐๐๐๐ please do a mass release ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ or more chapters since there are only 9 ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
This is a pretty good story so far. Its could prove to be a very interesting one. But does the MC not know anything about the MU and MCU? If not its pretty weird but then again its an interesting take on the story.
I ran straight through without stopping. I'm definitely looking forward to more. I like the fact that you have them starting off as a baby and as he grows up he become a carefree child. Awesome start. Im waiting for more.
It's a good story and a better fan fiction than others here you really are good in writing. I wanna ask you to how to get inspiration like this so I can also write the stories or fan fiction
I like this story MC is the baby brother of Tony Stark and turns out Tony's overprotective. He gets She-hulk as a wet nurse and later befriends the princess of Wakanda I like the myriad of opportunities before him and all the powers he's gonna get highly recommend
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A pity you stopped writing, the story was starting to get good ....................................................................... ............................
I like the story flows especially that I like marvels... I even watch every marvels that was released... I hope the author will continue updating this story and won't drop this... For this story was good and interesting...
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I expected the story to be a bit different but my expectations are yet to be met. I'm guessing it's coz it's still in development but hopefully the writer will do good. So far I'd say it still needs some work
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Freaking amazing! This story leaves me wanting more for each page and now thar i stopped reading, I cant stop thinking about future outcomes and possibilities. Havint Tony Stark as your overprotective brother is brilliant. I hope you dont give up this book Author-sama.
Awesome story man. I love the story and please continue the story ๐ฏ๐๐๐ค๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ค๐ฅณ๐ป๐๐๐ค๐ค๐๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฐ๐๐๐คฃโ๐ญ๐โบ๐๐๐๐๐โค๐๐๐ค๐ค๐๐๐ป๐ฅณ๐ค๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฏ๐ค๐๐๐ฏ
You need a proof reader badly, so many grammar mistakes, you repeatedly call male characters she and her, get someone that is a native english speaker to read your work before posting, it'll help a lot.
its got potential. slow start not to slow hopefully I hate 140 character restriction . mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmdumb.
Awesome story author ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐๐๐๐ please do a mass release ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ or more chapters since there are only 9 ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ญ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐ฅบ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
This is a pretty good story so far. Its could prove to be a very interesting one. But does the MC not know anything about the MU and MCU? If not its pretty weird but then again its an interesting take on the story.
I ran straight through without stopping. I'm definitely looking forward to more. I like the fact that you have them starting off as a baby and as he grows up he become a carefree child. Awesome start. Im waiting for more.
It's a good story and a better fan fiction than others here you really are good in writing. I wanna ask you to how to get inspiration like this so I can also write the stories or fan fiction
I like this story MC is the baby brother of Tony Stark and turns out Tony's overprotective. He gets She-hulk as a wet nurse and later befriends the princess of Wakanda I like the myriad of opportunities before him and all the powers he's gonna get highly recommend
Spoiler enthรผllen A pity you stopped writing, the story was starting to get good ....................................................................... ............................
I like the story flows especially that I like marvels... I even watch every marvels that was released... I hope the author will continue updating this story and won't drop this... For this story was good and interesting...
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I expected the story to be a bit different but my expectations are yet to be met. I'm guessing it's coz it's still in development but hopefully the writer will do good. So far I'd say it still needs some work
Awesome๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Freaking amazing! This story leaves me wanting more for each page and now thar i stopped reading, I cant stop thinking about future outcomes and possibilities. Havint Tony Stark as your overprotective brother is brilliant. I hope you dont give up this book Author-sama.