In a Magical World with an Anime System

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icecranium

I want to preface this by saying my review score of 5 stars is not meant to denote the quality of this story. Read my actual review if you want to know what I think. I gave the story 5 stars to encourage more people to check it out and to encourage the writer to continue what he/she is doing. Ok, so let's start the review by stating what I think are positives. You, Mr. Author have done a great job in not falling into the common trap of giving your MC way too much at the beginning. It's the limits of your character that make it interesting not its capabilities. On top of that the story is fairly well written and is easy to read. It's too early to tell much of anything but it seems to be going to a good general direction. Ok, so the only real criticism that I can make is the exposition. There is way too much of it. I understand that you want to get the information dump out of the way to clearly state your rules so you can get on with the story, but it seems like it may have been a better idea to reveal the rules and limitations of the system as they become relevant rather than all at once. Ok, now that I've stated both positives and negatives I am going to state some warnings based off of common mistakes I've observed on this site. Try not to fall into the trap of giving your MC power way too quickly. You seems to have that in check. The limit of having to connect to individual worlds in order to gain powers and items from those worlds was a good idea. Another tip about any potential harem activity. Make sure that any potential harem members have a purpose within your story. This is important. Rather than thinking "Who would make the best waifu?" You should instead be thinking, "Why am I adding this character into my story?" So, overall I think you've done a really great job so far. This is miles better than a lot of the trash that clutters this site.

LV 11

Elder

Start is normal but the more you read the ****ier it becomes. Its just a trash story not serious at all. Disappointed. To make it readable it needs srs rewriting.

LV 10

7sins_Lord

was a high 3 maybe a month ago but the current arc and plot has made it unreadable. the updates don't help because the story is slow as well. then the characters and world is just a half baked parody with no substance to it.

LV 4

HentaiVeteran

I want more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more

LV 10

AinzOoalGown

A story with a lot of potential keep it up ⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️🗡️⚔️ 🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️🛡️

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HentaiVeteran

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LV 5

DevilsAce

It's a really good novel. writer's writing skills are average but it's a fantastic story. I will recommend all Anime lovers to read it. It's not like other Anime system novel and has a great story. Whoever the writer is I'm getting impatient now, release more chapters.

LV 5

Dolphin_Tweed

I am not Chinese, therefore I cannot be shameless with my review. My writing style is pretty average, it's not that great. I always try to put my own self-enjoyment at first when it comes to writing. I feel like writing comes out better when one writes with a good mood. My update stability is probably below average as well. Can't perform that well on a consistent pace, That's why I didn't even say how many chapters I make per week. Story Development, I just can't focus well enough, feels like I'm writing filler, but at the same time, I really want to head to anime segments already. Character Design, to be honest I think I rarely give my characters a physical description that much, instead I'm always thinking of their roles in the story and how they advance the plot and why they do so. So I at least want them remain in character of even their 1-dimensional personality. Is my world background creative? I don't think so honestly, anyone could have come with it if they really tried. Is it well developed? Meh.