Yu-gi-oh Entities from Beyond

Right this is a Yugioh fanfiction taking place in the Arc-V world the main character of the story uses a Entity archetype deck (For more information on this archetype search Entity archetype on YouTube TGS anime has a great video on it.) There will be some original creations of mine (Entity archetype cards) later on in the story since a archetype with 6 extra deck 2 spells and 1 trap is hard to work with. Hope you like the story.
"means Speaking out load"
'means thinking in Mc's head'

Please tell me what I'm doing wrong and how I can do better in the comments.