"Stay put!" Commanded Draxx as black blood continuously dripped from his nose and mouth. He grimaced in pain while holding on with his boney right hand that started to shatter. Felix and Beatrix only smiled, however; they knew what this meant. Draxx had used his last chance of commanding them. Funnily enough, it was the first time they had ever known him to do anything that was not for his own good. His last chance and he wasted it on those opposed to his clan. How foolish…
Draxx then fell to his knees as his eyes became dizzy and his body withered. He smelt of death and it seemed he had only ventured into the pool to die. If he was going to die why not let his death have meaning – At least this was what he thought.
Taf saw Draxx about to collapse and looked into his eyes.
I really got into it at the end. Though I honestly think I missed an opportunity to make these deaths have more meaning. Especially Beatrix. Ooh well, 300 plus chapters but still a novice in the grander scheme of this writing thing. Might go back and truly give some characters depth in a volume or two.
I think that's one of the major flaws of this genre. You don't get time to flesh out the characters because of the demands for chapters. The irony coming from me who is one of the worse at uploads, right lol. At least I did feel sorry for her while she died hoping for Felix to turn around. Messed up stuff, what kind of mind writes this - Looks away evil laugh.
Final note - I just loved the intro with Taf sitting on Fenton's corpse. It was messed up on so many levels but badass and menacing when I wrote. His line that followed was so Taf-like. Let me stop rambling I'm off lol.
Creation is hard, cheer me up!