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So far I have read 30+ chapters and I love it characters are pretty well fleshed out and world well put together great read really
I haven’t finished reading Chapter 6 yet, but I’m already here to complain. Seriously, why is the main character like this? Throughout these chapters up to the sixth one, he feels like an analogy to a kid under the Christmas tree, opening his presents, overly excited, while his system is like an uncle who gave him the gifts and is explaining what they are and how they work. Seriously, he’s way too carefree. Then there’s the fact that after reincarnating, he didn’t even bother to simulate the behavior of the previous consciousness that was in this body. To everyone around him, he suddenly went from being a serious and mature guy to an overly excited child. I can’t judge the entire novel based on just six chapters, but it’s a bit disappointing.
author is there chapters missing cause it jumped from him taking over the business to chasing liez and talking about Silas and how he's been running the company but there isn't any chapters explaining what Silas did or what happened when he took over as ceo
Gentle reminder: the first volume and parts of the second are all about background and world-building—think of it as setting the stage for what’s to come. But once that phase is done? Buckle up. The intensity picks up as Pyris starts demolishing everything in his path toward greatness, all while gathering a harem of insanely powerful beauties. Stick around for the ride—you won’t want to miss how this story takes off!
So, Author, (although I doubt you’ll see this) here’s some feedback from me as of chapter 38. Firstly, some positives-I think you’re making pretty likeable an interesting characters. At least, I can see myself being interested. I also like the idea of him needing to clean up the business before they become too problematic. For some areas of improvement-I think you could be slowing down on the characters and the focus. Especially when it comes to Pyris’ relationships with these ladies. We jumped from his sister to the vampire princess to his assistant to now this succubus. It feels that you’re eager to get to the harem and the excitement that not all of your intent is coming through. It’s as if you’re trying to explain why someone should watch a series by jumping into the highlights with minimal context given. Let yourself and the characters linger and build into the world via varying dynamics. I don’t mean to talk shit author. I’m actually enjoying your series so far and I think you can get much better.
Thanks for the Books!!!!! 😆 📖🍻 Oh, I haven't reviewed this novel yet? Then let me give all five stars for all five categories for your new book 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 We are all looking forward for the next chapters 🥰📖🍷
The writing quality is lacking a lot you should put more work into it . So far the rest is good for me [img=recommend]
Very promising plot, hope the author won't drop it.[img=update][img=update][img=update]
So far I have read 30+ chapters and I love it characters are pretty well fleshed out and world well put together great read really
I haven’t finished reading Chapter 6 yet, but I’m already here to complain. Seriously, why is the main character like this? Throughout these chapters up to the sixth one, he feels like an analogy to a kid under the Christmas tree, opening his presents, overly excited, while his system is like an uncle who gave him the gifts and is explaining what they are and how they work. Seriously, he’s way too carefree. Then there’s the fact that after reincarnating, he didn’t even bother to simulate the behavior of the previous consciousness that was in this body. To everyone around him, he suddenly went from being a serious and mature guy to an overly excited child. I can’t judge the entire novel based on just six chapters, but it’s a bit disappointing.
author is there chapters missing cause it jumped from him taking over the business to chasing liez and talking about Silas and how he's been running the company but there isn't any chapters explaining what Silas did or what happened when he took over as ceo
Gentle reminder: the first volume and parts of the second are all about background and world-building—think of it as setting the stage for what’s to come. But once that phase is done? Buckle up. The intensity picks up as Pyris starts demolishing everything in his path toward greatness, all while gathering a harem of insanely powerful beauties. Stick around for the ride—you won’t want to miss how this story takes off!
So, Author, (although I doubt you’ll see this) here’s some feedback from me as of chapter 38. Firstly, some positives-I think you’re making pretty likeable an interesting characters. At least, I can see myself being interested. I also like the idea of him needing to clean up the business before they become too problematic. For some areas of improvement-I think you could be slowing down on the characters and the focus. Especially when it comes to Pyris’ relationships with these ladies. We jumped from his sister to the vampire princess to his assistant to now this succubus. It feels that you’re eager to get to the harem and the excitement that not all of your intent is coming through. It’s as if you’re trying to explain why someone should watch a series by jumping into the highlights with minimal context given. Let yourself and the characters linger and build into the world via varying dynamics. I don’t mean to talk shit author. I’m actually enjoying your series so far and I think you can get much better.
Thanks for the Books!!!!! 😆 📖🍻 Oh, I haven't reviewed this novel yet? Then let me give all five stars for all five categories for your new book 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 We are all looking forward for the next chapters 🥰📖🍷
The writing quality is lacking a lot you should put more work into it . So far the rest is good for me [img=recommend]
Very promising plot, hope the author won't drop it.[img=update][img=update][img=update]
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