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Wow this is a very good fanfic so far. I usually skip the forst few days of the leader boards so The good books rise but im glad i picked this one because of the title, im glad i did because this is an amazing book so far with minor flaws that you could overlook. some flaws being that the author joined the hephestus familia to get a wepon made for him then making his class something like A magic monk (fighting with his fists and magic) (he should have an armour made with gauntlets or something unique not like a sword or sheild because that dosnt make much sense)(also i like the idea of a monk mage type character). but the positives overweigh the small bad things. some of the good things are a pretty uneque story, finding a good balence between op and not too broken and very likeable characters(very hard to do correctly). overall this is a very good story i would recomend to anyone 100% of the time.
forgive the poor grammar. as the first story I've read on webnovel i have to say you basically ruined everything else for me. this story atleast in my opinion doesnt do anything truly excellent but it does everything quite good. I've liked other stories alot but this one is the only one I've consistently read every single update as it came out and it's a story I imagine I will continue to read every single update. I think the author did a really good job and I would highly recommend reading it if you are even slightly tempted too.
If you came for a Danmachi fanfic... You are out of luck. Does it technically take place in the world of danmachi with the same characters you know and love? Eh~ kind of but not really. The characters feel extremely watered down to me; sometimes making choices that don't really fit with their personalities or are simply so stupid that it was obviously to push the plot forward. For example you have the third strongest Familia, Hephi's, apparently believing she is unable to do anything to protect her own member because... Reasons. Then you have the world itself; simply put it spits on everything that makes Danmachi Danmachi. Some may think I'm complaining about the addition of new monsters and such but I'm really not - increasing the diversity of the dungeon isn't actually a bad idea to spice it up. I think the idea of monster hunter & dnd monsters was a good choice. What is a bad idea for a fanfic is changing how the fundamental principles of the series actually work because that begs the question of why you are even writing a fanfic in the first place. Gods are useless. Not only do the characters not need to have theirs fauna updated to increase their stats they also don't need it updated to level up. I may have misunderstood that but what I gave is the best case scenario as you have a mortal character doing what only gods can do. Mortals can learn to read the Fauna on their own however they cannot, under any circumstance, update or "unlock" it as that literally requires a drop of a gods blood. Or at least that is how it works in the series but not in this fanfic where the interesting aspects of the original are thrown under the bus for the ease of the author. They can't even decide if they want the enemies to poof after death like in anime or only after crystal is removed like in the LN. Literally changing from one to another (not only in the same chapter) but four paragraphs apart. Only thing that kept me going was the mystical promise that volume 2 gets way better however the lack of care about what made Danmachi makes that impossible for me as it has for many.
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I liked it till chapter 54. It was interesting from his POV of Orario. The powers were cool and the reactions to him were fun. But I couldn't continue reading because of how he interacted right after the death of the girl and the description of it.🥲
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Love this book, I always come back to it, can’t wait for the sequel
Not worth your time. I have tried reading this multiple times, but I can never get past 50ch. I was bored and looking for something to read and thought that I would give it a chance again as so many high star reviews commenting on the later half of the story being excellent. But I just cannot do it. The author commonly lowers the main characters (or others) intelligence so they make mistakes which creates conflict to move the plot forward. This is probably the biggest issue I have with this novel and it is done so much I struggle to read it without getting frustrated. Also, the author seems to be using Danmachi as a convenient world with some characters without understanding or working within its existing frame work. I.e. The MC becomes level two, with max stats, the first day in the dungeon with 10 op skills and his goddess not leveling him up. That is chapter 5 (where is stopped this time) and it gets worse. Overall, the story may get better. It may be excellent after 150chapters as others state. But wasting hours of my time with a story that is aggravating to get to the good part isn’t worth it.
havent read yet just wanna ask some question, is this fandom blind? i mean can i read this without knowing danmachi, havent really watched it
História tinha potêncial mas o autor simplesmente estraga tudo fazendo um MC batata que conta os segredos dele tudo e basicamente inutiliza os deuses já que o cara pode subir de nível sozinho
Great writing , great story, gets better as it goes!!! Huge fan, of this brilliant style and flow. Thank you for your hard work and dedication, hate to see it end Plus ultra !!!
Man I probably should be the last person on earth to write a review but after reading and STILL not done as I'm writing this (chapter 176 currently) , all I can say is this fanfic feels... like a chef's kiss 😩👌
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Pretty bad to be honest, the first 50 chapters are barely readable, sadly the beginning is the best plotwise, I had to stop reading at chapter 89, it was driving me insane how bad this story is.
One of the best danmachi fanfict!! If you like the slow pace story and character development then it’s a great story to read. However, the volume 1 of the novel could be too much for some danmachi anime or LN fans. BUT, as the author said in the novel description it will be great after volume 1!! You can see the development of author’s writing in this novel as the novel progresses. Currently reading author next novel MHA:Horizon after finishing this novel(Recommend!!)
I initially felt conflicted about giving this novel a lower rating since I didn't read much of it, so I decided to settle on 3 stars as a middle ground. The story shows promise, but it becomes evident that the author lacks sufficient knowledge of the Anime, leading to some perplexing mistakes that avid viewers would notice. For instance, certain characters' personalities seem off, the leveling up speed feels unrealistically fast, and the protagonist's ease of joining the familia raises eyebrows. Additionally, the MC's (aka. the author's) word choice is peculiar and doesn't always fit seamlessly into the situation. It's disappointing to learn that the novel was completed a year ago without revisiting and refining its initial flaws, since authors do evolve over time, it seems odd to "abandon" a project and move on without addressing/fixing these issues. Despite these shortcomings, I've heard that the novel improves as it progresses. However, it feels like a well-built building constructed on an unstable foundation, making it difficult for me to fully immerse myself in the story. I hope nothing but the best for the author and encourage them to revisit this work with all the experience they have gained after completing it. Taking the time to refine and improve upon their initial flaws could potentially elevate this novel to a more satisfying level.
really bad. 1st time in dungeon he lvls up. author doesn't understand danmachi at all
The character devolpment was great and I really loved the foreshadowing on certain parts
While the beginning was bad, overall it was really good. It was confusing due to the fact that the falna settings changed in the middle of the story and I was also a Yang x Lefiya shipper but other than that, I loved the whole thing.
In the comments section are full of wimps complain about anything, if they just thinking that MC is a naive-Japanese-simp-retard with a loose mouth🤓, then they can't understand MC's character AT ALL!...... here I'll tell you.... first thing first MC is BLACK!🤦🏿 so he is just a chills and funny homie with friendly personally that can talk with anyone about anything, he doesn't know how this world work at all, so you should imagine him as American teenage Snoop Dogg that just lose his memory and suddenly get magic power, so he will just play with it like normal teenage will do in the hood (dungeon) and share with his new friends (everyone he know) how amazing his new magic is!!! and finally for god's sake🙄 what you virgin wimping otakus always complain about MC interested in Lefiya, when I reading their comments I just know that they are just some kids that don't know how to talk to a girl or have a relationship before from how they complain how MC choose the girl to date of how he can talk to the girl the ways that they can't do🫠..... anyways I'm ready glad that I give this fanfic a try and not believe in there negative comments from those who like to read about an Edgy-OP-harem protagonist that this novel clearly doesn't present.
It's great to read this but I can't give 5 stars, because yeah Maybe this is not your best work so I will read your other novels and thank you this story is really interesting
this one of the few stories here that actually strike a good balance between wish-fullfillment and story developement. The pace is good and any mistakes are easily forgotten due to the overwhelming interest in "what happens next". I can say that I found greater pleasure in reading this fanfic than I enjoyed the original. My score says it all really. PS: Reading this for the second time.
Writing quality:its goOd FRomm the start and it stays consitwnt throughout the story
I picked this up after reading the most recent novel written by the author and you can definitely see how much he's improved, even throughout this story you can see improvement. That being said this novel feels very mid, forgettable, and almost a waste of time. I find myself skipping more and more dialogue and skim reading to see if there's something I care about in the chapters. I don't really care for the mc or how he went from dominating everything to struggling even in a team against everything. Overall just a very average novel I might come back to but still unsure
The writing is fairly good and the concept is okay, but the characters are all off from the very beginning. He basically walks around and has everything handed to him while mentally being no different from a small child. Nobody who isn't mentally challenged would just say okay and move on when they wake up with missing memories in an unfamiliar place. Not to mention that nobody questions his background to find out if he has a troubling background or whether he is a spy for another familia. It isn't realistic and kind of killed the book for me.
Hi there Author here, the auxiliary chapter explains what makes this story an AU story. This is a fun story but I will be treating it seriously as I am practicing properly writing by authoring this story. MC looks like Kirikou Rung and Elementalist is an esper ability(Superpower) that essentially makes you the avatar such as Aang or Korra. This is not a harem and will not be and this is an adventure story. Knowing that feel free to enjoy the story and I hope you all have a great day.
Reveal Spoiler Wow this is a very good fanfic so far. I usually skip the forst few days of the leader boards so The good books rise but im glad i picked this one because of the title, im glad i did because this is an amazing book so far with minor flaws that you could overlook. some flaws being that the author joined the hephestus familia to get a wepon made for him then making his class something like A magic monk (fighting with his fists and magic) (he should have an armour made with gauntlets or something unique not like a sword or sheild because that dosnt make much sense)(also i like the idea of a monk mage type character). but the positives overweigh the small bad things. some of the good things are a pretty uneque story, finding a good balence between op and not too broken and very likeable characters(very hard to do correctly). overall this is a very good story i would recomend to anyone 100% of the time.
forgive the poor grammar. as the first story I've read on webnovel i have to say you basically ruined everything else for me. this story atleast in my opinion doesnt do anything truly excellent but it does everything quite good. I've liked other stories alot but this one is the only one I've consistently read every single update as it came out and it's a story I imagine I will continue to read every single update. I think the author did a really good job and I would highly recommend reading it if you are even slightly tempted too.
If you came for a Danmachi fanfic... You are out of luck. Does it technically take place in the world of danmachi with the same characters you know and love? Eh~ kind of but not really. The characters feel extremely watered down to me; sometimes making choices that don't really fit with their personalities or are simply so stupid that it was obviously to push the plot forward. For example you have the third strongest Familia, Hephi's, apparently believing she is unable to do anything to protect her own member because... Reasons. Then you have the world itself; simply put it spits on everything that makes Danmachi Danmachi. Some may think I'm complaining about the addition of new monsters and such but I'm really not - increasing the diversity of the dungeon isn't actually a bad idea to spice it up. I think the idea of monster hunter & dnd monsters was a good choice. What is a bad idea for a fanfic is changing how the fundamental principles of the series actually work because that begs the question of why you are even writing a fanfic in the first place. Gods are useless. Not only do the characters not need to have theirs fauna updated to increase their stats they also don't need it updated to level up. I may have misunderstood that but what I gave is the best case scenario as you have a mortal character doing what only gods can do. Mortals can learn to read the Fauna on their own however they cannot, under any circumstance, update or "unlock" it as that literally requires a drop of a gods blood. Or at least that is how it works in the series but not in this fanfic where the interesting aspects of the original are thrown under the bus for the ease of the author. They can't even decide if they want the enemies to poof after death like in anime or only after crystal is removed like in the LN. Literally changing from one to another (not only in the same chapter) but four paragraphs apart. Only thing that kept me going was the mystical promise that volume 2 gets way better however the lack of care about what made Danmachi makes that impossible for me as it has for many.
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Elementalist in a dungeon Elementalista en una mazmorra La MEJOR fanficción de Danmachi por mucho [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
I liked it till chapter 54. It was interesting from his POV of Orario. The powers were cool and the reactions to him were fun. But I couldn't continue reading because of how he interacted right after the death of the girl and the description of it.🥲
Reveal Spoiler Love this book, I always come back to it, can’t wait for the sequel
Not worth your time. I have tried reading this multiple times, but I can never get past 50ch. I was bored and looking for something to read and thought that I would give it a chance again as so many high star reviews commenting on the later half of the story being excellent. But I just cannot do it. The author commonly lowers the main characters (or others) intelligence so they make mistakes which creates conflict to move the plot forward. This is probably the biggest issue I have with this novel and it is done so much I struggle to read it without getting frustrated. Also, the author seems to be using Danmachi as a convenient world with some characters without understanding or working within its existing frame work. I.e. The MC becomes level two, with max stats, the first day in the dungeon with 10 op skills and his goddess not leveling him up. That is chapter 5 (where is stopped this time) and it gets worse. Overall, the story may get better. It may be excellent after 150chapters as others state. But wasting hours of my time with a story that is aggravating to get to the good part isn’t worth it.
havent read yet just wanna ask some question, is this fandom blind? i mean can i read this without knowing danmachi, havent really watched it
História tinha potêncial mas o autor simplesmente estraga tudo fazendo um MC batata que conta os segredos dele tudo e basicamente inutiliza os deuses já que o cara pode subir de nível sozinho
Great writing , great story, gets better as it goes!!! Huge fan, of this brilliant style and flow. Thank you for your hard work and dedication, hate to see it end Plus ultra !!!
Man I probably should be the last person on earth to write a review but after reading and STILL not done as I'm writing this (chapter 176 currently) , all I can say is this fanfic feels... like a chef's kiss 😩👌
Reveal Spoiler Pretty bad to be honest, the first 50 chapters are barely readable, sadly the beginning is the best plotwise, I had to stop reading at chapter 89, it was driving me insane how bad this story is.
One of the best danmachi fanfict!! If you like the slow pace story and character development then it’s a great story to read. However, the volume 1 of the novel could be too much for some danmachi anime or LN fans. BUT, as the author said in the novel description it will be great after volume 1!! You can see the development of author’s writing in this novel as the novel progresses. Currently reading author next novel MHA:Horizon after finishing this novel(Recommend!!)
I initially felt conflicted about giving this novel a lower rating since I didn't read much of it, so I decided to settle on 3 stars as a middle ground. The story shows promise, but it becomes evident that the author lacks sufficient knowledge of the Anime, leading to some perplexing mistakes that avid viewers would notice. For instance, certain characters' personalities seem off, the leveling up speed feels unrealistically fast, and the protagonist's ease of joining the familia raises eyebrows. Additionally, the MC's (aka. the author's) word choice is peculiar and doesn't always fit seamlessly into the situation. It's disappointing to learn that the novel was completed a year ago without revisiting and refining its initial flaws, since authors do evolve over time, it seems odd to "abandon" a project and move on without addressing/fixing these issues. Despite these shortcomings, I've heard that the novel improves as it progresses. However, it feels like a well-built building constructed on an unstable foundation, making it difficult for me to fully immerse myself in the story. I hope nothing but the best for the author and encourage them to revisit this work with all the experience they have gained after completing it. Taking the time to refine and improve upon their initial flaws could potentially elevate this novel to a more satisfying level.
really bad. 1st time in dungeon he lvls up. author doesn't understand danmachi at all
The character devolpment was great and I really loved the foreshadowing on certain parts
While the beginning was bad, overall it was really good. It was confusing due to the fact that the falna settings changed in the middle of the story and I was also a Yang x Lefiya shipper but other than that, I loved the whole thing.
In the comments section are full of wimps complain about anything, if they just thinking that MC is a naive-Japanese-simp-retard with a loose mouth🤓, then they can't understand MC's character AT ALL!...... here I'll tell you.... first thing first MC is BLACK!🤦🏿 so he is just a chills and funny homie with friendly personally that can talk with anyone about anything, he doesn't know how this world work at all, so you should imagine him as American teenage Snoop Dogg that just lose his memory and suddenly get magic power, so he will just play with it like normal teenage will do in the hood (dungeon) and share with his new friends (everyone he know) how amazing his new magic is!!! and finally for god's sake🙄 what you virgin wimping otakus always complain about MC interested in Lefiya, when I reading their comments I just know that they are just some kids that don't know how to talk to a girl or have a relationship before from how they complain how MC choose the girl to date of how he can talk to the girl the ways that they can't do🫠..... anyways I'm ready glad that I give this fanfic a try and not believe in there negative comments from those who like to read about an Edgy-OP-harem protagonist that this novel clearly doesn't present.
It's great to read this but I can't give 5 stars, because yeah Maybe this is not your best work so I will read your other novels and thank you this story is really interesting
this one of the few stories here that actually strike a good balance between wish-fullfillment and story developement. The pace is good and any mistakes are easily forgotten due to the overwhelming interest in "what happens next". I can say that I found greater pleasure in reading this fanfic than I enjoyed the original. My score says it all really. PS: Reading this for the second time.
Writing quality:its goOd FRomm the start and it stays consitwnt throughout the story
I picked this up after reading the most recent novel written by the author and you can definitely see how much he's improved, even throughout this story you can see improvement. That being said this novel feels very mid, forgettable, and almost a waste of time. I find myself skipping more and more dialogue and skim reading to see if there's something I care about in the chapters. I don't really care for the mc or how he went from dominating everything to struggling even in a team against everything. Overall just a very average novel I might come back to but still unsure
The writing is fairly good and the concept is okay, but the characters are all off from the very beginning. He basically walks around and has everything handed to him while mentally being no different from a small child. Nobody who isn't mentally challenged would just say okay and move on when they wake up with missing memories in an unfamiliar place. Not to mention that nobody questions his background to find out if he has a troubling background or whether he is a spy for another familia. It isn't realistic and kind of killed the book for me.
Hi there Author here, the auxiliary chapter explains what makes this story an AU story. This is a fun story but I will be treating it seriously as I am practicing properly writing by authoring this story. MC looks like Kirikou Rung and Elementalist is an esper ability(Superpower) that essentially makes you the avatar such as Aang or Korra. This is not a harem and will not be and this is an adventure story. Knowing that feel free to enjoy the story and I hope you all have a great day.
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