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Unexpected desire. But choosing wishing, he should have known that the price would be huge for the choice. But probably the main character did not think about it at that moment? Wow ... the grandfather is the one ... the bawdy ... seized upon the new world ... well, the third chapter is a surge of harmonies of the rejuvenated grandfather for 90 years ... yes ............. . I have no words Bastards are exploiters, they are like that))) But apparently others would also be nice to pile sides for the manifestation of sexism. Intriguingly clear! Now it’s clear ... that grandfather was a serial killer ... The novel is specific, with scenes of violence, written in living language, it should be noted that the author uses polemical techniques ... well, probably this is the style, but here the author should put more clearly tags to immediately notify readers that the novel will be tough. Rated 4.2 stars. I read up to chapter 5.
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Honest Review: I had to stop after chapter 7... The Good: Ummm... fairly original plot, when you could find it... Author seemed to write this purely for fun, which is good sometimes. The Bad: Oh where to begin... The author obviously wrote this while high, the MC acts like a crack head, and seeing HAHAHA so many times made me HAHAHAve to put it down.
To put it simply this novel is bad. Jumps from one thing to another making it very confusing by that I mean he can be doing something in school but the next ch he is at his home eating breakfast or something like that. Second of all the mc. Damn the dudes annoying as ****, laughing like an idiot all the time and so on. Then theres world building... well what can i say theres bearly any of that if any. Character development is non existent as well. To put in simpler terms, DON'T READ IT IF U VALUE U'R BRAIN CELLS!!!
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Honest review here requested from the forums. So I didn't my best to read as far as possible to give it a fair review but I really can't keep going. There's more than 140 chapters but really my brain felt like it was being fed bad gas station junk food and I wanted to strop reading after a few. To keep the review fair I will not be judging based on the genre because ok, another harem fantasy. These types of stories are no problem as long as no one acts these things in reality. They can even be very erotic and sexy (this one is not). Writing quality is, pretty bad I gotta say. It reads like an overloaded random youtube anime AMV from the 2000s made a hyperactive overcompensating 13 year old. The structure is choppy and cannot be excused with the world/dimension jumping, it's just sloppy writing. Stability of updates: The author has posed over 140ch since April 2019, that's pretty stable. But many chapters are so short- They range from 300something to maybe a thousand. I could pick a random chapter to open right now and it would probably be a mere 500 word count. Updates a lot but you're not getting much. Story development: So this is what happens when you tell a story from a 15-year power play rapist with chuunibyou syndrome. To be fair the story is not just rape, the author really does have an absurdist power play fantasy going on. I love dimension-hopping but the author gets it too way too easy each time while the previous ones are forgotten. What about his family from the beginning? Nope- but again another overdone done power fantasy. It's a bullzoser that makes bad commentary and occasionally uses a girl as hole. (badly written rape scenes- as in it's written so horribly even ******** cringey 50shades of Grey fanfiction fans would refuse to read) Character design: We're obviously not going for realism here. No one talk like that? No one speaks like the characters do I don't know know if it's bad English or the author just is that sort of underdeveloped writer. Don't expect character- expect a lot of new faceless ones. Males are to be used in one way and females are to be used in different ways. World hopping and all, characters are just props. Hell even the MC has no personality, just "System what new powers do i have today?" and "bi*ch c*nt hottie sl*t you shall be mine!". Really, nothing else? How about some characterization of variety? The MC has a type: big boobs and out of his league. As of ch 67, I don't think he made a girl feel pleasure once. World background: SOmeone read and watched a lot of media and are reusing them in basic way. Nothing special. There's a lot of thought in the powers/opitions though that aren't exactly copied but are still uncreative OPs. Conclusion: If you like harems and sexy novels, don't bother it's really not steamy at all. All the girls are 'hot' but pretty faceless. He's the fast finisher kind and the unpleasant rape scenes are self-focused and awkwardly described. Like I'm sure a 17-year highschool virgin with D in English could write some better fantasies. You have a lot of better harem stories on here. If you don't like those sorts of novels and want to save your brain cells - well obviously don't read this. If you have an absurd ego and want to lose yourself in a trippy op power play without using much critical thinking - this actually not a bad option. The author is obviously dedicated to writing but the sheer amount of quantity and I wish them good luck in growing and developing their writing.
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Okay, so, I promised to be genuine in my review, so here goes- You are obviously having a whole lot of fun writing this story, and that's great. Grammar-wise, I can actually not find a whole lot of problems, which is rare for this site, so good on you. That said, I'm having a hard time following the plot, and I'm struggling to figure out the MC's motivation or mindset, and I have no idea at all why he keeps laughing out loud randomly. This story feels a lot like a zany sugar high- lots of enthusiasm, but not a tremendous amount of focus or depth. It is possible I just didn't give the story enough time to "get good", and that would be a fair criticism. I can see how some readers would love something like this, but I'm not sure that it's for me.
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Unexpected desire. But choosing wishing, he should have known that the price would be huge for the choice. But probably the main character did not think about it at that moment? Wow ... the grandfather is the one ... the bawdy ... seized upon the new world ... well, the third chapter is a surge of harmonies of the rejuvenated grandfather for 90 years ... yes ............. . I have no words Bastards are exploiters, they are like that))) But apparently others would also be nice to pile sides for the manifestation of sexism. Intriguingly clear! Now it’s clear ... that grandfather was a serial killer ... The novel is specific, with scenes of violence, written in living language, it should be noted that the author uses polemical techniques ... well, probably this is the style, but here the author should put more clearly tags to immediately notify readers that the novel will be tough. Rated 4.2 stars. I read up to chapter 5.
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To put it simply this novel is bad. Jumps from one thing to another making it very confusing by that I mean he can be doing something in school but the next ch he is at his home eating breakfast or something like that. Second of all the mc. Damn the dudes annoying as ****, laughing like an idiot all the time and so on. Then theres world building... well what can i say theres bearly any of that if any. Character development is non existent as well. To put in simpler terms, DON'T READ IT IF U VALUE U'R BRAIN CELLS!!!
I have a question for the author how did you manage to get 1 million views its so hard getting people 2 your page even if story is good. I want more people to visit my book no matter what.
Honest review here requested from the forums. So I didn't my best to read as far as possible to give it a fair review but I really can't keep going. There's more than 140 chapters but really my brain felt like it was being fed bad gas station junk food and I wanted to strop reading after a few. To keep the review fair I will not be judging based on the genre because ok, another harem fantasy. These types of stories are no problem as long as no one acts these things in reality. They can even be very erotic and sexy (this one is not). Writing quality is, pretty bad I gotta say. It reads like an overloaded random youtube anime AMV from the 2000s made a hyperactive overcompensating 13 year old. The structure is choppy and cannot be excused with the world/dimension jumping, it's just sloppy writing. Stability of updates: The author has posed over 140ch since April 2019, that's pretty stable. But many chapters are so short- They range from 300something to maybe a thousand. I could pick a random chapter to open right now and it would probably be a mere 500 word count. Updates a lot but you're not getting much. Story development: So this is what happens when you tell a story from a 15-year power play rapist with chuunibyou syndrome. To be fair the story is not just rape, the author really does have an absurdist power play fantasy going on. I love dimension-hopping but the author gets it too way too easy each time while the previous ones are forgotten. What about his family from the beginning? Nope- but again another overdone done power fantasy. It's a bullzoser that makes bad commentary and occasionally uses a girl as hole. (badly written rape scenes- as in it's written so horribly even ******** cringey 50shades of Grey fanfiction fans would refuse to read) Character design: We're obviously not going for realism here. No one talk like that? No one speaks like the characters do I don't know know if it's bad English or the author just is that sort of underdeveloped writer. Don't expect character- expect a lot of new faceless ones. Males are to be used in one way and females are to be used in different ways. World hopping and all, characters are just props. Hell even the MC has no personality, just "System what new powers do i have today?" and "bi*ch c*nt hottie sl*t you shall be mine!". Really, nothing else? How about some characterization of variety? The MC has a type: big boobs and out of his league. As of ch 67, I don't think he made a girl feel pleasure once. World background: SOmeone read and watched a lot of media and are reusing them in basic way. Nothing special. There's a lot of thought in the powers/opitions though that aren't exactly copied but are still uncreative OPs. Conclusion: If you like harems and sexy novels, don't bother it's really not steamy at all. All the girls are 'hot' but pretty faceless. He's the fast finisher kind and the unpleasant rape scenes are self-focused and awkwardly described. Like I'm sure a 17-year highschool virgin with D in English could write some better fantasies. You have a lot of better harem stories on here. If you don't like those sorts of novels and want to save your brain cells - well obviously don't read this. If you have an absurd ego and want to lose yourself in a trippy op power play without using much critical thinking - this actually not a bad option. The author is obviously dedicated to writing but the sheer amount of quantity and I wish them good luck in growing and developing their writing.
Reveal Spoiler Okay, so, I promised to be genuine in my review, so here goes- You are obviously having a whole lot of fun writing this story, and that's great. Grammar-wise, I can actually not find a whole lot of problems, which is rare for this site, so good on you. That said, I'm having a hard time following the plot, and I'm struggling to figure out the MC's motivation or mindset, and I have no idea at all why he keeps laughing out loud randomly. This story feels a lot like a zany sugar high- lots of enthusiasm, but not a tremendous amount of focus or depth. It is possible I just didn't give the story enough time to "get good", and that would be a fair criticism. I can see how some readers would love something like this, but I'm not sure that it's for me.
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