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The Miller family had a troublemaker in the family. Her name was Amelia Miller. Her mother died in childbirth when she was born. Her stepmother fell off a flight of stairs while pregnant and died. Amelia's father punished her by making her face the wall in the attic. The attic was dark and humid, and there was no sunlight at all. Nobody brought her food, and Amelia thought she might very well die there. Moments before her death, she dialed a number that her mother had told her before she passed away. After she hung up, there were rumbling sounds all around her. The Miller family's residence was surrounded by a group of bodyguards dressed in black. Eight men got out of their cars, each with a different aura. They went directly to the attic. The man who led them went down on one knee and held Amelia, unconscious, in his arms. He had a solemn expression on his face. "The Miller family needs to go bankrupt." After sleeping the entire night, Amelia woke up to find that her father was bankrupt. Her family members were all homeless. Meanwhile, she... She had eight uncles and a kind grandfather who loved her dearly. Amelia's father regretted what he did, and he was unwilling to accept his fate. So what if Amelia was living a good life now? She was still the troublemaker who got her mother killed and her father bankrupt! Little did he know, after Amelia returned to her uncle's house, their luck only seemed to improve. Even her bedridden grandmother could now get out of bed and dance in the square! Finally, a god-like man claimed to be her father. He pampered her to the point where the entire world became envious of her.

Keith, a regular office worker from Earth, suddenly transmigrates to the world of the novel he had been reading for the past decade. The new world, which was also called Earth, was slightly different. People with various powers existed who were called awakeners, making this world comparatively dangerous and also mysterious. While he was thrown into the novel's world, he was also given a mystical ability to grant systems to other people. Armed with his special ability, he slowly climbs up the power ladder by taking "taxes" from the people he would give systems to. The only question that remained, was what would a realistic normal man, when faced with a similar minded protagonist, do when their goals opposed each other.

Lumiel has been reborn many times and he was tired of it all. Until his awakening did not happen for some time now and he became bullied by his classmates that have a Class. Up until he awakened the Arcanist class. The class he has been waiting for! It was his past Class has been awakened and he could create skills on his command! Making the weakest class become overpowered as he could copy jobs and their skills. Now with the threat of dungeons, he became a hunter and closed dungeons once and for all. All enemies will bow down to the Arcane Emperor!

Love is monopolies, is madness, is bigotry "Please let me go." "You are mine, I will never let you go." "Go to hell, I hate you." "If I have to go to hell, you have to come down with me."

Born with the wrong kind of talent, shunned from his family, removed of his succession rights and made the guardian of the lowest of the low dungeon─the infamous, most terrible, dungeon that no one visits unless they have to...that was Moros' home. Until a certain wall crumbles, and a new realm sends out its deadly invitation with Moros name on it. It was a hell that was made for him. A hell he will soon call home...and best of all, there is a lot of money to be made.

Lan Hengsheng was once the pride of the Lan Clan, a child prodigy with limitless potential—until his fifth birthday changed everything. Declared spirit coreless, he was abandoned by those who once praised him, dismissed as a mortal in a world ruled by cultivators. His so-called friends turned their backs on him, and the clan that once held him in high regard saw him as nothing more than a disappointment. But Hengsheng holds a secret—one that defies the natural laws of this world. Ding! [Make a wish]  He wished for everything! With the ability to create a system, he doesn’t need talent. He doesn’t need fate’s blessing. He can program his own path to immortality. Why struggle for enlightenment when he can create a Cultivation Optimization System? Why waste decades training when he can install a Time Acceleration System? Why risk his life searching for treasures when he can develop an Auto-Farming System? While other cultivators beg the heavens for guidance, Hengsheng writes his own cultivation manual. Armed with his cheat-like power, he will challenge geniuses, reshape sects, and rewrite the very foundation of cultivation itself. The strongest cultivator is a system maker! Join the Discussion & Share Ideas! Discord: https://discord.gg/T7uyfDPBvd Patreon: patreon.com/Raventan Contribute your ideas and help shape the story!

Lilith is a second-year med student who has her whole life planned out, but her world is turned upside down when she meets a stranger. Lilith's whole life it pulled apart and changed as she gets to know Lucis more, entering into a world that she soon craves more than life its self, unknowingly leading herself to her own death

Tragedy can strike anywhere and at any moment, to anyone. In a moment life can change. It can leave you so drastically altered as to leave you with permanent scars. Meet Jaxsen Michaels and Sebastian Green. A parentless child and a fatherless son each get a chance to have the family that was lost to them both as they get to know one another and help each other past the darkness of each of their pasts with love and patience. This is book one of three.

Fifty years ago, the world changed forever when Earth was mysteriously connected to the Primordial World, a reality that operates like a game. This world can only be entered by Awakeners—people who have awakened with special powers. However, out of fifteen billion humans, only one million have this privilege. Enzo, a poor young man with no connection to the Primordial World, should have had no chance of becoming an Awakener. However, against all odds, he awakens... and more than that, he gains an innate skill unheard of before—the ability to make skills with only his imagination. In a world where power determines everything, how will a nameless young man carve his own path?

This is a story about a young man named Will! While playing his favorite game "Potion Maker" after installing a mod, his computer shorted out. Will then woke up in a new world with the ability to make any potion he wishes! With a system that allows him to gain new abilities, will he be walked on by those stronger? Or will he rise to the top? Release rate: unstable, as my schedule is very tight. Buy me coffee? ko-fi.com/heavensp Please check out my facebook page: https://www.facebook.com/HeavenShakingPalm9/ Or check out my discord: https://discord.gg/M3ejYvV The first volume is available on amazon! https://amzn.to/2NCUlRc If the link doesn't work, I am sure you can find it with the good ol' fashioned manual search ;D