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Five years ago, she replaced her twin sister to marry him who was burned beyond recognition and even became a eunuch. Five years later, when they met again, he pressed her against the wall in the corner A low voice sounded with doubt. "Is your daughter mine? " The corners of her mouth curled into a sneer. "Are you sure you have the ability to do that? " His originally cold face instantly turned into the darkness before the storm His voice was fierce and low as he growled, "woman, you are challenging me! "

A strange store that sells everything suddenly appears in the town. The Owner of the store is a young man and anyone who tried to mess with him %$#@. The products of the store are expensive, yet the queue outside the store never stops. "So what, If you're an Emperor? I'll fight to the death with you if you try to break the queue." These scenes outside the store were daily occurrences. *** Join the Discord server, https://discord.gg/4nbaU7Cy *** The cover art is not mine. I have taken it from pinterest. Please contact me if it is your art.

She, the tribe leader of the Miaojiang witch tribe, was reborn as a pitiful little girl that everyone could bully. She rose to power, brought her natal Gu, played in the entire business and entertainment circle, and became the national prince charming in the hearts of women. It was just that she accidentally seduced the diamond man who was ranked first on the diamond list She was doomed just like that! One day. "I have to do something. " She finished getting her equipment, and her face had a stern look. "Hmm? " The man raised his eyebrows slightly. "someone offered a billion dollars to buy your life. " "You want to avenge me? " The man thought to himself that his wife still loved him. "No, he offered a hundred million dollars for my life, but he offered a billion dollars for yours! " She pulled his collar. "I'm the real master, why am I so much less than you! So, I WANT TO SEND HIM TO HELL! " - The author's new article, "my movie Queen's a exploded! " ASKS FOR SUPPORT!

He is indifferent but wise, a noble, soldier, an elite who calls the shots. She is a naïve girl who was reborn to punish sluts and destroy scums and most of all, to become a top notch designer! He isn’t used to innocent girls with sparkling eyes playing pranks on him. Her beguiling eyes have charmed him and he isn’t letting her go anywhere! Officer Yu narrows his eyes and says coldly, “I will definitely get you, even if I have to abduct you!" Designer Gu smiles lazily, “I don't need love in this life!" Officer Yu threatens to ban everything. “I am the one who gets to decide whether you need love or not!” A male lead who is cold and dominating but dotes foolishly on his wife!

This is a brand new story. Survive the darkness, see the light There is no right or wrong, it just depends on which side you are standing on. To be a god, or to be a man. To be good, or to be evil. Just what is...the highest order of weapon that humanity has? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ After a great catastrophe struck, the world was set back many years and humanity started living in anarchy. With time, society started building up again and people were now living in walled strongholds and fringe towns across the land. Humans have also become distrustful and ruthless in an unforgiving society where the strong survive and the weak are eliminated. Growing up in such an era, Ren Xiaosu had to fend for himself. After an incident, he gained supernatural powers...

Xia Yangyang receives her 20th birthday present by witnessing her boyfriend and her best friend in bed. The next moment, she ends up marrying the most eligible and wealthiest bachelor in the city, Gu Qichen. From then on, she levels up and becomes invincible. Xia Yangyang’s jerk ex-boyfriend tries to win her back, while her scheming friend plots against her. Mr Gu comes to her rescue and seeks revenge on her behalf. She has a vicious half-sister and a stepmother who makes things difficult for her. Mr Gu retaliates and teaches them a lesson. Everyone knows that Mr Gu is ruthless and cold-blooded. But no one has ever seen how he pampers and dotes on his wife…

Making poison, studying poison, and playing with poison is her hobby and fascination. Saving people, killing people, and torturing people - those are considered her virtues and ethics. Indeed, she is a doctor - a term that might be more appropriately shortened to... physician! She has the medical code of ethics, yet lacks the empathy. Her patient care is purely dependent on her mood. An injury led to a fortuitous encounter, making two individuals completely unrelated to each other cross paths. Later on, as the woman became a military doctor... In their first meeting, she saved him from the brink of death. The location of his wound was "a wake-up call". And in their next meeting, when she offered - to devote herself to him! His response was: "I... am willing." She said: "I was actually just joking." For Mu Lin, there are only two types of people in the world: the sick, and the deceased. For Jing Chen, the world also only consists of two types of people: family, and soldiers. However, when he met her; when she met him, everything was bound to undergo chemical changes. Mini Theater One day, a dandy with an enchanting posture and seductive eyes said: "From now on, all of me belongs to you." This Poison Doctor, leaning forward revealing a slight smile, "Are you serious about what you said?" in a place he couldn't see, the silver needle in her hand flashed with a cold glint. Snapshot Theater In the future, the child asks: "Mommy, why was your taste so bad back then, choosing this daddy to be my daddy?" How contemptuous. Mu Lin: "This is a serious question, I need to think it over carefully." She definitely needed to think it over thoroughly. The child, full of high spirits: "Certainly this daddy is not your true love." The next second, an aria flies past, "Wife," came a voice filled with aggrievement. "Good." People only know that women are oblivious to Master Jing's eyes, but they don't realize that from their first encounter, her figure has already silently approached him. Some say that Mu Lin was taken down off her lofty pedestal by Master Jing, but Mu Lin wants to say, she did it willingly. [I'm incapable of writing a good summary, please refer to the main text for the story! Come and take the plunge!] Moreover: For recommendations check out my older works: [Overbearing Marriage: Cold wife of a wealthy family after rebirth] [Master Jing's colorful life: Doting on a spoiled wife] My new book [Art of Seduction: Master, hurry up and wear a condom] is looking for favorites.

The story follows a young boy named david aztlan who was once a normal human but now has become an alien race called the aztlanians who is trying to enjoy his long life to the very fullest by going on many fun adventure's and quests alike with his growing crew called the worst prodigy but in order to have his stolen freedom given back too him he has start by stopping the evil organization called the injustice order lead by king jester humane who is the last ancient human on the planet earth who is on a mission to exterminate the aztlanian race for good from planet earth david and his crew member's having no other choice decide to fight back fighting fighter's, monster's, alien's, and even gods themselves for a better and brighter future full of freedom and no restriction placed on them whatsoever.

Greg moved to America after his heart had been broken by his only girlfriend. He had the option to work from home (as an anonymous streamer) but all he did was reminisce about his first and only love that had been with him for only a short while. The day before an interview to TBC Company, he saw an accident and not thinking Greg rushed to the scene to save any survivors. That’s when he saw an Sophia walk out of the car and faint. Since his phone was dead he couldn’t call an ambulance but he could at least offer mouth to mouth resuscitation. He didn't know that he took her first kiss and she inadvertently fell in love with him. Will Sophia repair his broken heart and restore his faith in love? Join the roller-coaster. ------------------------------------------- cover is not mine 2 chapter a day 8:30 and 18:30 GTM+1 mass realese(5 chapters) depend from views: 100k - done 250k - done 500k - done 750k - done 1kk - not done .... there will be shown mature content- before it I will be warning on first words of chapter

Carter Williams was your typical twenty year old loser. After a fight in the street leaves him unconscious he wakes up in the body of a young dragon in an entirely new world. Armed with a system to assist him and two beautiful wives to support him, Carter vows never to live his life hiding in the dark again as he seeks the title of dragon king. - Additional tag : Yuri Discord link is : https://discord.gg/q68P5JPnNz