How can a 'Naruto is heartbroken' fanfiction be made more engaging?

Making a 'Naruto heartbroken Fairy Tail fanfiction' more interesting can be achieved by building a multi - layered plot. Start with Naruto having a simple goal in the Fairy Tail world, like finding a way home. But as he progresses, he gets involved in political intrigues and power struggles within the guilds. These complex situations could lead to him being betrayed or let down, causing his heartbreak. Additionally, exploring the cultural differences between the Naruto world and the Fairy Tail world in more depth can add richness to the story and make his heartbreak more believable.

To make a Naruto and Hinata fanfic more engaging, focus on their unique personalities. Naruto's determination and Hinata's shyness yet inner strength are great elements to play with. For example, you can write about how Hinata's quiet support gives Naruto the extra boost he needs during a tough battle. Also, include lots of action scenes that are relevant to the Naruto universe, like using their ninja skills and jutsus.

By creating complex characters. Make the OC not just a victim but also have their own quirks, dreams, and flaws. Also, add more interactions with the main Naruto characters in unique situations.

Involving other characters in an interesting way can make it more engaging. Maybe there's a character who is trying to understand what the baby is experiencing during hypnosis. They could be an older sibling or a parent. Their reactions and attempts to communicate with the baby can add depth to the story. Also, creating a sense of mystery around the hypnosis itself, like not revealing all at once why the baby was hypnotized or what the full extent of its effects are, can keep the readers hooked.

Adding a lot of vivid descriptions. For example, if the story is set in a forest, describe the lush greenery, the sounds of the animals, and the smell of the damp earth. This makes the setting more real for the readers.

Adding vivid descriptions of the emotions involved can make it more engaging. For example, describe the mother's fear, the father's anxiety.

By developing strong characters. Make Gamzee's character multi - dimensional, with his own hopes, fears and quirks. Also, create interesting antagonists if there are any involved in the abuse situation.

Add some mystery. For example, after the kiss, Merlin starts to have strange visions related to Arthur's future. This will keep the readers hooked as they try to figure out what these visions mean and how they are related to the kiss.

Add some mystery. For example, the mother could have a secret past that is slowly revealed throughout the story and that somehow ties into her love for her child. This keeps the readers hooked.

To make it more engaging, you could introduce some mystery elements. Maybe there's a hidden reason why the bully acts the way they do. And also, develop the side characters more. Their reactions to the strange relationship between the main characters can add depth and interest. You can also use vivid descriptions of the characters' emotions, especially during the moments of transformation in their relationship.