The bag man lurked in the alley. His bag twitched. Then, the bag unzipped itself and out came a thousand eyes staring at me. And that was just the beginning.
The bag man was always there, lurking in the shadows. One night, I saw his bag move on its own. Scary.
The bag man lurked in the alley. His empty sack awaited a victim.
The bag man lurked in the alley. I heard his raspy breath, then he opened his bag and darkness swallowed me.
The bag man's silhouette emerged. I blinked, and my soul was no more. You see, his presence alone was a harbinger of doom. He didn't need to make a sound or a move. Just his shadowy form was enough to send shivers down my spine. When I blinked, it was as if he had the power to steal my very essence, leaving me as an empty shell in that moment.
The bag man came closer. I heard his bag rustle, and fear gripped me.
A third story could be: 'I took a photo of the cemetery. When I looked at it later, there was a figure standing behind me that I didn't see when I took the picture.' It gives a feeling of unease as it implies that there was some sort of ghostly or otherworldly figure present at the cemetery that the person was unaware of until they saw the photo.
It depends on the person. For those who are easily spooked by the unknown and sudden scares, 'Bag Man' can be really terrifying. The two - sentence structure is designed to shock, and it does a good job of that. However, some people who are more desensitized to horror might not find it as scary, but it still has an eerie quality.
I walked into the old house. The moment I stepped in, the door slammed shut and I heard a sinister laugh.
I was alone in the old house. Suddenly, a cold hand touched my shoulder, but when I turned around, there was no one there. It was just the start of the horror that lurked in that place.
She heard a knock on the door. When she opened it, no one was there but she felt a cold hand on her shoulder.