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He has all the traits that you wished for your dream man to have. Power, money, perfection, handsomeness and a body like a Greek God. But he's in love. He's in love with her. For him, she is the completion of his dream, a perfect wife and a mother to be with his children. He would give her everything including his own life. He would sacrifice his world for her. But she left him. She betrayed him. She broke his heart into pieces. And he turned into a cold, heartless, rude and an arrogant billionaire, who would do everything to show her that she's no longer important into his life. Even though the truth is the opposite of what he is doing. His heart still aches for her. And that's when he met me. I applied as his Personal Assistant to fulfil my bucket list of dreams. To explore my life and experience everything. He offered me a deal. He asked me to marry him just to show his ex that he already moved on. * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * "She's pregnant." He blurted out and I almost stumbled on where I am standing. I just gripped the backrest of the couch to support my weight. The pain creeping in my heart is unbearable but I managed to stay calm. "Wow! Congratulations!" I said faking my excitement as I remembered him saying... -cheating would not be the reason to break our marriage- of course I couldn't accuse him of this as 'cheating' because she was the real reason why we are pretending as a couple. He still loves her. He's still in love with her. And that's when I made the biggest decision in my life. Taking all my strength and a piece of my heart that still hanging on a thin rope... I left him. Taking also my biggest secret in me... that I've already fallen in love with him. Then I learned a lesson; 'Loving someone who doesn't love you back isn't as hard as loving someone who still in love with his ex and who just only uses you to get her back again into his life..'

------------ Check out my new LitRPG, VR novel, Paragon Online! ------------ Athena, Zeus, Aphrodite, Hermes... These were all figures Alex only ever saw in books and status, so HOW are they now his neighbors?! Alex was a very ordinary young adult, stressing out about his financial situation and desperately trying to make ends meet. While awaiting his gig money deposit, he stumbled upon an email about a certain 'God Recruitment for the Pantheon!!'. He responded to the email to kill off his boredom and satisfy his inner otaku! "We're going to the Underworld?!" Chosen by Hermes to become a god himself, Alex has to navigate his new immortal self and find his place in the pantheon! This is an alternate Olympus, and the plot sometimes takes precedence over sticking completely to original myths. This book is an adaptation of Greek mythology, and for those who don't know much about it, don't worry, everything is explained as the plot progresses!

Five billion people in the world traveled to the killing world at the same time! There were tens of thousands of races and demons here! The law of existence was killing! Endless killing! How could humans find an opportunity to save the blue star in the killing world? Dick activated the talent plundering system! Congratulations on your gaining the level C talent, rage! Congratulations on your gaining the level B talent, element! Congratulations on your gaining the level A talent, space! Congratulations on your gaining the level S talent, time! Congratulations on your gaining level SS talent, retract! Congratulations on your gaining level SSS talent, creating creatures! Since then, Dick had embarked on a path of endless harvest.

After being kicked out of the prestigious Wester Family, Kaiden has no choice but to work at a pheromone nightclub to moderate his excessive pheromones, or else he might spontaneously go into heat. On the night of his 19th birthday, he falls into the arms of the Alpha known to hate all Omegas, Damon Lin. The next day, the cold and ruthless Alpha offers him a deal: be his pheromone partner for a year and he will be set for life. What is Kaiden supposed to do when he can’t help falling in love with an Alpha who hates him, especially when said Alpha has a Beta lover? -- Damon Lin, the Alpha head of the Lin Finance Group, has a problem: it’s been three years since his last rut. His options are either to live with the sexual frustration or find his ‘fated mate,’ but where on Earth can he find an omega with 99.9% compatibility with him? On a night out with his friends, he drunkenly follows a scent that tantalizes his whole being and carries the solution to his problem to the backseat of his car. The next day, he offers the Omega a deal: be his pheromone partner for a year but don’t he dare be mistaken, he will never love him. Is it too late for regrets once he loses his fated mate? -- WARNING: This is BL omegaverse with R-18 scenes, unhealthy relationship dynamics, mentions of past trauma and abuse, and lots of angst.

He used to pamper her so much that almost everyone in city a knew that if anyone dared to touch du Anran, he, Xin Zimo, would be the first to make their lives worse than death. However, in just two years, he abandoned her like a broken shoe. "If you anger me, your Du family will not have a good life! " That time, a sudden accident happened between her and another woman, but he resolutely chose someone else. That time, she personally saw the child that was aborted with her own eyes, and her heart was as dead as ash. "Xin Zimo, the DU family doesn't owe you anymore... " However, in this love game that started with using him, whoever fell into it first was destined to lose. When she was able to escape unscathed, he held her waist with a calm and shameless expression. "Give me another son. " "Who wants to give birth to you! " "Then who do you want to give birth to? HMM? "

In the era of the awakening, every human will be able to awaken a specific gifted skill at 18 years old. However, Lin Fan realized that the Human Race was still being bullied by the other races. Lin Fan awakened one after another exponentially powerful gifted skills which shocked everyone… Lin Fan finally understood, it wasn’t that the Human Race was weak, it was just the other humans who were weak! He single-handedly quashed all of their enemies and sighed, “Seems like the human race can only depend on me..”