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This is my first time writing a novel, and I'm offering you a chapter. Please give me your opinions.

2024-09-13 19:48
Time passed in a flash. The originally clear sky was replaced by the night sky. This meant that the day was coming to an end. The night on Mount Redpine was quiet. Other than the rustling of the wind in the forest and the cries of some nighttime animals, there was nothing else. In the mountain forest, a thatched cottage that looked simple but was comfortable on the inside was still faintly flickering with candlelight. Fu Tianlin, who had been practicing for a day, lay on the bed in the thatched cottage. His entire body was sore. He was indeed exhausted today! It took him more than an hour to even finish dinner. The hand holding the chopsticks kept shaking without listening to his instructions. It was difficult for him to pick up a piece of food or eat a piece of rice. After dinner, he lay down on a simple bed that was made of wooden planks and covered with a layer of straw. On the straw was a layer of quilt as a mattress. He tried his best to relax, relax, and relax until he fell asleep unknowingly. His weak breathing sounded rhythmically. His small mouth was slightly open. His saliva slowly flowed out bit by bit. This was the state he was in after he fell asleep! Li Shen softened his footsteps and walked to the bedside to sit down slowly. Every movement of his was very light. He sat quietly at the side and looked at Fu Tianlin, who was sleeping soundly. His eyes revealed love, just like a father looking at his sleeping child. He stretched out his calloused hand and gently helped Fu Tianlin tidy up his slightly long bangs. He thought to himself,"If my child was still alive, he should be that old, right?" Just as Li Shen was immersed in his thoughts, a middle-aged man dressed in black brocade stood outside the door. The middle-aged man had arrived without a sound as if he had appeared out of thin air. The middle-aged man's appearance pulled Li Shen back from his thoughts. Li Shen turned to look at the middle-aged man without any surprise in his eyes, as if he had already known about the middle-aged man's sudden appearance. He said calmly,"You're here." The middle-aged man nodded in response. He looked at the sleeping Fu Tianlin and asked,"Is he asleep?”. " Yes, he's exhausted today. He's sleeping soundly," Li Shen said kindly as he looked at Fu Tianlin who was sleeping soundly. The middle-aged man looked at the sleeping Fu Tianlin and said with a smile,"It seems that his body is much better. His face is much ruddy compared to when I sent him here!" "That's right. This child's physique is good. Coupled with the prescription given by the living Yama, he recovered very quickly…By the way, how's your investigation going?" The middle-aged man did not respond. He first looked at Fu Tianlin and then said to Li Shen,"Let's talk outside." Don't let the child hear you!" The two of them walked to the open space outside the thatched cottage. The stars in the sky, the chirping of crickets, and the gentle breeze from the mountains made them feel extremely comfortable. The middle-aged man also felt a sense of comfort unconsciously. He muttered," No wonder you chose to settle down here. This is indeed a good place!" "Yeah, this place is far away from worldly disputes. It's very suitable for people like me to grow old here," said Li Shen. The middle-aged man smiled when he heard this. The world-famous Sea Shaking Saber wants to retire?" "One Blade Shakes the Ocean?" Li Shen said with a bitter smile. I can't accept this title anymore. I'm just a person waiting to die, no matter how resounding the title is, it's just empty talk to me." The middle-aged man smiled bitterly at Li Shen's self-mockery. Back then, the " One Saber Shakes the Ocean " who single-handedly defeated the Eighteenth Horse Gang on the Shahama Ancient Road had now become a person who lived alone in the mountains and waited for death all day long…Hehe…How sad… "Aren't you lonely here?" asked the middle-aged man. Other than you, the entire mountain... There shouldn't be anyone else, right?" "There used to be a group of bandits here who robbed people. Later, they all moved to a place where no one could find them," Li Shen said indifferently. The middle-aged man smiled and said,"It seems that even the bandits don't want to be neighbors with you." Li Shen was used to the middle-aged man's mockery. If he really got up that day…Li Shen was not used to it. Li Shen did not have many friends who could joke with him without making him angry. He was the only one. "When will you start practicing?" asked Li Shen. We've known each other for more than ten years, but you haven't changed at all. You're still as annoying as ever." The middle-aged man laughed and said," I can't change it. It's easy to change mountains and rivers, but it's hard to change one's nature. I might not be able to change even in my coffin." Li Shen agreed with the middle-aged man's words. If he really changed, then there would be one less interesting " bastard " in the martial arts world. That would be too boring. "Did you discover anything when you went to Rui Lin Manor?" Li Shen asked. Who did this?" The middle-aged man said seriously," When I got there, the entire manor was in a sea of fire. The fire burned for a day and a night. It was only when it rained heavily in the early morning that the fire was extinguished. Everything in the manor was turned into scorched earth. Many of the people inside were charred. I couldn't recognize their faces." As he spoke, the middle-aged man's eyes revealed a touch of sadness... "In other words, we can't find any clues?" asked Li Shen. "Not really, because I didn't find that person's body among the dead bodies," said the middle-aged man. "Who is it?" asked Li Shen. The middle-aged man replied,"Rui Lin Villa, Vice Head of Guard Zhang Biao." "Are you suspecting that he did it?" asked Li Shen. The middle-aged man said,"He doesn't have that ability. Even if he tied up five Zhang Biaos, he wouldn't be Fu Yuheng's opponent. But I suspect that he was the one who let those people into the villa." "Oh?" Li Shen asked,"Where did you see that?" Even if he didn't die in the villa, he could have died somewhere else. It might have been burnt. Didn't you recognize it?" "Impossible!" the middle-aged man said. When I searched Green Peace Mountain for Tian Lin, I couldn't find Zhang Biao's body or corpse. Moreover, Zhang Biao was known as a one-legged tiger in the martial world. His left leg was broken. It was the head of the Godly Axe Sect, Zuo Qian, who helped him install a mechanical leg. That was why he could walk like an ordinary person. Therefore, if he was burnt, it would be easy to recognize him."
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Find a novel, please give me your opinions.

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2024-09-22 18:38

Alright, I can recommend a novel for you. What type do you want? Is it fantasy, science fiction, romance, or some other type of novel?

This is my first time writing a novel. Please forgive me if I'm lacking in anything.

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2024-08-16 11:08

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I'm looking for fantasy novels urgently ~ Please give me your opinions, old bookworms!

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2024-09-02 14:07

Okay, what kind of fantasy novels do you like? For example, fantasy, science fiction, martial arts, and so on.

The first paragraph of the novel that I'm writing is to give some opinions and welcome criticism. I'll be grateful if you tell me more about your shortcomings.

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2024-09-13 01:24

When you hear this voice, you're already sucked in by a powerful force. This voice makes you feel uneasy but also curious. You begin to explore this mysterious place and discover that it comes from an unfamiliar planet. Everything on this planet will amaze you. Its sky was a deep blue light, shining with ever-changing colors. There were countless strange creatures on the ground. Their faces had unique body shapes, faces, and mouths. You also saw a huge invisible creature that seemed to be related to your actions, always pushing and blocking you from behind. When you finally find a quiet place, you meet a mysterious human. He tells you that there are many future and mysterious things inside this planet, but he won't tell you the truth. He tells you that you need to find a specific item to return to your family from this planet. You begin to explore this planet in hopes of finding this item. When you finally find this item, you feel a huge force pulling you into a new world.

This is a fragment of my novel. It's called " Light of Silver Night." I'm 12 years old. Everyone, please give me your opinions. How is it?

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2024-09-27 03:59

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Hello everyone, I want to write a detective novel. What is the most taboo in writing detective novels? Please give your opinions and opinions.

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2024-09-10 15:08

The biggest taboo when writing detective stories was the lack of creativity and inspiration, which would make the readers feel bored and give up reading. In addition, the lack of a compact plot and complex character relationships will also make readers feel confused and dissatisfied. When writing detective novels, you can also consider avoiding some common writing pitfalls such as too dull reasoning process, meaningless evidence display, meaningless character development, and so on. The most important thing was to maintain the cohesiveness and logic of the story to avoid contradictions and loopholes. In addition, in order to make it easier for the readers to understand and accept, you can consider using some common detective novel techniques such as setting suspense, using multiple pieces of evidence, and portraying the character and motivation of key characters. Writing detective stories required constant exploration and experimentation, as well as constant learning and improvement of writing skills.

Please give me a name for my novel. I'm writing about love in school. Please help me

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2024-09-22 13:33

Of course. Here are some names that might be suitable for a school romance novel: 1 Campus Love Story 2 Love Story of Youth 3 " Campus Long-Distance Romance " "My Love Story with the School Belle" Love on Campus "Fairytale of Campus Love" 7 "Campus Love" 8 " School Love Story Collection " 9. My Campus Love with My Girlfriend Love in College I hope these names can inspire you to write a wonderful novel!

I'm writing a Xianxia novel, please give me a title.

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2024-09-19 18:02

The title of the Xianxia novel can refer to the following suggestions: Xianxia World The Legend of Sword and Fairy Legend of Xianxia 4 Xianxia World 5 Xianxia Myths 6 Fairy tales Xianxia Qixia The Legend of Sword and Fairy 9 Xianxia novels 10 Xianxia Mythological Fictions I hope these suggestions can give me inspiration to write a wonderful Xianxia novel!

Please give me some advice on how to write a novel, thank you (This is my first time writing)

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2024-09-13 03:17

There were a few points to note when writing a novel: 1. Decide on the theme and plot of the story. This can help you build an attractive and logical story. 2. Create interesting characters. Every character should have their own background, personality, and goals. Their actions and conversations should be real and interesting. 3. Use appropriate narrative techniques. For example, describing the scene, creating characters, using dialogue and actions, and so on. 4. Keep the story coherent and smooth. Try to avoid logical errors and contradictions. 5. Pay attention to details and create an atmosphere. The details can help the reader understand the story better and help you create a fascinating world. I hope these suggestions will be helpful to you. I wish you an excellent novel!

I'm a newbie ~ This is my first time writing a novel. Please recommend a better novel website.

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2024-09-27 02:34

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