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ch 70 Chapter no.70 A Drunk Man's Words Are A Sober Man's Thoughts

Naruto : The System Files

Naruto : The System Files

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I have some ideas for magical items that can be used in the story and that could be useful for Naruto: Teleport Item: Allows the bearer to teleport to any place they have been to before (I know there's Hiraishin, but a teleportation item, that doesn't use Chakra, right from the beginning is EXTREMELY useful, both in combat and in locomotion) Invisibility Item: While being worn, the wearer cannot be seen or felt by anyone (Very useful for ANBU, powder cannot be seen and will not be felt by sensors. Furthermore, it is very useful for pranks ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ‘) Environment Manipulation Item: Allows the wearer to manipulate the element present in the environment (The name and description are not very accurate, but let me explain: It's basically the Avatar Bending, if Naruto is in a place with water he can use the item to manipulate it at will, he can also use it to manipulate the earth from the ground, the air to levitate and so on. So I believe it is an extremely versatile item and very useful for ANBU and other things) Object Change Item: Allows the bearer to change the shape of inanimate objects to whatever they desire (Basically Harry Potter's Transfiguration, but it can be very useful for combat and complex things as well as for simpler and more banal things) Chakra Attunement Item: Allows the bearer to tune in to their highest affinity Elemental Chakra, allowing absolute control over it (This item will allow Naruto to have absurd control over his Wind Chakra, being able to strengthen wind jutsus, shape the wind chakra as he wishes and even transform his body into wind, being able to create an intangibility equal to Logia de One Piece. An idea that I found very interesting, especially now that Hinata gave Naruto a wind jutsu scroll) And that is all ! I think these items will be good to be included in the story and I believe that other weapons will not be very interesting as Naruto already has his Sen No Tenrui. Furthermore, all of the above are open to change, whether in name or usage, do what you think is best for the story ๐Ÿ‘ (Google Translation)

ch 70 Chapter no.70 A Drunk Man's Words Are A Sober Man's Thoughts

Naruto : The System Files

Naruto : The System Files

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Excellent chapter, I'm really enjoying the story so far

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ch 34 Chapter 34 - The Fall of the Trump Pirates! Gratitude from the Clockwork Island!

One Piece: Hunter God

One Piece: Hunter God

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NEW REVIEW: I just finished the most recent chapters (79 to be exact), and I took the opportunity to read some of the first ones too. So with that, I can start by saying that the story ended up taking quite unexpected turns, chapter 70 was really a shock for me, in that I must recognize the author's courage. So overall, the story is still great and its pacing is very good. However, the story has its problems, but the main problem that you can see that the author is having difficulty with here is precisely: the development of the characters. As Ren is the MC, he doesn't suffer much from this problem, but in the case of women, it has already bothered me a little, as more and more women are joining the crew, so it becomes more and more difficult. to develop them all. Kaya is a great example of this, despite her being the MC's 3rd official girlfriend, she ends up not being able to have much development because either the author ends up focusing too much on the main ones (Nami, Nojiko, and now Robin), or he needs to give more space to others characters, like Mikita, Tashigi and now Zala and Khalifa, which also ends up causing the same problem for other non-main characters. So it would be great if the Author took some time off from the main story to better develop Ren's crew, including his new fleet. And I also think it's very important that the Author doesn't forget certain abilities that he gives to his characters (for example Nojiko, who got Death Wink in Chapter 38 and hasn't used it yet), because if he's going to give new abilities to in the end they are left aside, so it is better not to add them in the first place. Finally, moving on to the technical part, the writing is quite decent and the update frequency is very good, you can see that the author is very committed to his story, and that is really cool to see. And I also want to make it very clear that despite all this criticism now, I am really enjoying reading it and I only wish the best for this story. Anyway, that's all I had to say. For now, I'm very curious to see where this story will go. Until later (Google Translation)

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