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“FUCK” IS A COMPLETE TURN OFF IN A NOVEL. Don’t use F word everywhere. It takes away beauty and novelty from the story. Second don’t use modern culture reference in medieval or ancient type culture.

The thing is I don’t understand how in a place filled with magic a mother could die of childbirth. Truth be told when I first started reading this novel I thought it was a normal medieval theme novel so I didn’t think much of a mother dying of childbirth, but as the story keeps going on the grandma started showing magical means and medical pills etc. I find it hard to believe that the grandma fails to prepare to bring pill and magical medicine for her precious daughter in case things go wrong with the childbirth. And we still haven’t gotten a reasonable explanation about this topic. For this major plot hole this novel is a major failure.

This is one of the worst illogical novel I have ever read in my life. I don’t see any logic in the hatred of the heroins for the villain. I mean even if they really betray the villain it has to be for something right. One of the heroins was ever written to love the villian with all her heart yet she still betrayed him because some stranger told her. This is one of the funniest reason to betray someone no. This novel is made to help masochist vent their anger on heroines and heroes who have been logically downgraded. I have seen plenty brainless heroes and heroins but they still betray for benefit. Never have I seen a heroine written as the most brain dead character just to satisfy the frustration and revenge fetish of reader and author. Another point is the lack of reasoning in the villain, they have been with him all this time and this is the first time he knew they would betray him lol, is he even qualified to be called a villain. He literally have all the power except a brain, frankly for me the hero and heroines are much more wise than him. The author draws the villain as a person betrayed by the heroines he saved and only one person truly cares for him. It can be easy to fool beginner readers with this foolish synopsis but seasoned readers like myself will easily be able to see the flaws. If he was betrayed that means he is a dumb villain, he can’t see reason and let people take advantage of him. I would never pity such an idiotic villain ever. He had a whole book to establish a good image uncover secrets but he was led by the nose from the beginning to end. Is it even interesting to read about such an idiot. An idiot who needs two lives to think properly. The only good thing about this novel is writing quality(5/5). I sometimes sigh for those authors who have good story but no writing quality 🥲

The story was ok until the third chapter(although I don’t like pov I persisted with it). But in the third chapter we get a female dragon for the MC who is a boy. That’s a big no no for me if the Mc is a girl it would make sense but for a boy that’s very sissy. I mean is she supposed to be banged by every dragon they meet along the way 🤓. In the original book Male dragons have always represented strength(bellarion), while the female are also strong they tend to be represented as cute and most of the time weaker than males. So for me this is not a good dragon match for a male MC. Unless he is a sissy ofcourse.

Thanks for replying, that's quite sad to hear. No worries, you will keep improving. Nobody seemed to give feedback regarding this, and I had to say, so you won't be kept blind. Just trying to be constructive. Best of luck.