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Thank you for your suggestions! I'll definitely keep them in mind moving forward.
Thanks for the suggestions, I'll try to rewrite some of them like you said.
ch 0 2 Ascension
Twilight Waning
Urban · ALPHN
i love this [img=gift]
ch 0 5 Elite Blade Devil.
God Ash: Remnants of the fallen.
Action · Demons_and_I
great action, again so well written[img=recommend]
ch 0 3 Something New Under the Sun.
God Ash: Remnants of the fallen.
Action · Demons_and_I
I love the world and character description. But sometimes they are lengthy as not allowing any buildup of some kind in the story. But this is an introductory chapter and it's really written well [img=recommend]
ch 0 2 Life as it was, and as it is...
God Ash: Remnants of the fallen.
Action · Demons_and_I
very interesting lore [img=thinking]
ch 0 1 Prologue: The Thousand Millennium War... (2)
God Ash: Remnants of the fallen.
Action · Demons_and_I
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God Ash: Remnants of the fallen.
Action · Demons_and_I
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ch 0 7 Chapter 6: Banquet (Part 2)
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
"Never underestimate an Ashford." Zen said in a an extremely cold voice and then opened Mike's arm to the side.
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
Mike totally lost his calm. His eyes were red with rage and he looked at Zen and his ridiculing smile. At this moment he lost it. Rage took over him and he attacked without thinking.
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
Great Chapter!
ch 0 6 Chapter 5: Banquet (Part 1)
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
|Whoosh| the punch was extremely fast. Everyone's breadth stopped. After throwing the punch, Mike felt odd. He was sure that he didn't feel anything but air. He was scared because he thought Zen was too weak to take the punch and he accidently killed Zen. He looked up and his eyes were wide opened. Zen just tilted his head to the side and avoided the punch closely.
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
Mike:
Zen looked at Mike with indifferent expression. He knew he was at a disadvantage because Mike was first outer ring mutant with water attributes. Knowing that Zen was not a mutant, Mike had a cold smile.
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
"Hey bro, everything alright? Are you constipated?" Zen asked with concern.
Mutation Frenzy
Sci-fi · Evil_Avatar
Thanks! I will
Twilight Waning
Urban · ALPHN