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The author is inserting things that should be tagged like gender-bending. That whole GB plot point made no sense. Now with the author having the MC flirt with dudes, it's getting very weird. . One star for not tagging the story properly.

Grammar is good but the sentences all read like it's a translated Chinese fic. Another thing that bugs me is the story telling me everything but not showing me anything. Good story If you don't have a good grasp on the English language or are just desperate for something to read though.

The more you read the worse it gets. Every character is one dimensional and every other sentence will be spouting nonsense about how great the Ricci families power is. The main character's temperament is dog water, Foundation team fails a mission because of something out of their control and the MC starts stomping his foot and throwing shit at them, like come on man you're an 05 ACT LIKE IT! The MC:

I knew this story was sus as hell but God damn did I make a mistake reading this at 4am. To any new readers be warned you have to read through 40 chapters of straight up garbage before the story gets good. Considering that it only has around 50 chapters just wait for more before reading or don't if you hate a slave MC.

Very cool idea and it hooked me until I read the first couple chapters. The author does more telling than showing. Example of telling instead of showing: He went to get a smoke then he bought a ticket and then he died. When he woke up he was scared because he just died. More showing less telling: The moment his feet left the concrete, he knew something was wrong. There was an unsettling absence of gravity, like he had been sucked into a void. Looking down, he saw his body, limp and lifeless on the ground. Confusion and fear gripped him as he realized he had died.

Same, don't worry author I'll root for you.

I'll write this review because there isn't a single actual review that's not just "Its corn". The story starts strong we have a character with solid motivations and goals that make sense which is instantly better than most other novels on this site. We have a shinigami in Fairy Tail and it is cool to see his character growth throughout the story. I also liked that you showed him actually getting injured which doesn't really happen on this site. Then we have the bleach arc. The whole bleach arc up to the current chapter has been terrible. Adam goes from being this solid character to someone who can't make a single decision without flip-flopping. He constantly talks about doing one thing and then quickly does another thing where is the Adam from Fairy Tail who made a decision and saw it through to the end. I Like the story but the bleach arc should have been handled differently. I want to offer some solutions but I don't know either source materials enough to offer a helpful solution.